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 EDIT: peeps, i'm sorry to say this, i really tried getting all your guys comment in the story, but this is getting a bit overwhelming? 

please, try to make a comment to one or two characters only , and try not to exceed five or six lines worth of commands.

i'm not asking just for my sake, but if someone writes a command that is too long it takes time away from the others since i'll have spend so much more time to draw that than other shorter commands. So please edit your commands accordingly, or i'll be forced to ignore them.

EDIT 2: that said, don't take this as rules set in stone. If you exceed six lines worth of command but your command is particularly good or interesting i'll still draw it.

EDIT 3: also! dialogue is fine. you can speak for how long you want (within limits) the limitations of five/six lines of commands regards only something like using your powers to influence the characters' five senses, or if you'll use future powers you might get.

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Muku

Enter the drone, we've always been a drone to our lustful desires... Give in to temptation... To save our friends of course. 😈

WorgenRouge

((Condensing/rewriting this, also combining it with my other comment)) ((GUYS!! JACK FELL IN LOVE WITH FENRIS, AND THEN FENRIS MUST’VE DIED (or been killed by the voices???)! THAT’S WHY HE’S BEEN DOING ALL THIS, HE WANTS TO GET HIM BACK SOMEHOW!!)) JACK: *show him a visual of the Fenris that Red described* This has all been for him, hasn’t it? You were in love with him. Is your goal to get him back, or to join him in death? The only way the former is happening is if you get our help, since there’s no way the Voices will listen to you. Just... give us time. It’s win win for you, true, but surely seeing him back is worth more than dying in the vain hope that you’ll be united in death? HEART: Please, just tell us everything. Maybe we can find out on our own, but I’d rather hear it from you! And I’m sorry, but we’re not going to sacrifice all of our friends just to kick this problem down the road again.

Star Ringer

Where's fat-lip's other avatar? The one who was in the elevator?

Kageichi

Gastro: Don't turn into this Gastro. Your a good man. Remember your rule of freedom Gasty, you deserve it just as much as the other monsters. Don't become an abusive controller like Jack it's not you!

Alex

Welp Lucas not to worry as the Human Protaganist, if you survive this will help you get your happily ever after. No mind control, just a little nudge to some possible gentleman callers. Like a invisible wing-man. Also looking a little orcish there you feeling ok? Finally What in the name of the old ones is that?

WorgenRouge

((Consolidated this with my other comment))

Hinner

OFF: We can't actually do much besides distract the baddies while the guys do the actual hard work. At least that is the strategy I'm going for Voices: "You want to fuck? Lets fuck alright." *Licking his dick, making he feel mind numbing pleasure from our touch* "Tell me, Truthsayer, what naughty things were you gonna do to our friends? Would you make them blow you? Like this? Tell us, Truthsayer, does this feels as good as what you were going to do with the world?" Monsters: "Hey guys we changed our mind about the new body and stuff, the Truthsayer in his Zork stupidness just actually told us it was a trap, so that is that" Lucas: "Those symbols on the wall on the last room... Lucas you might have found us just the ritual stone that we needed! But of course we have no idea what to do with that just right now. Just a little more to the elevators, be extra careful now" "Hey, why did you hate monsters, Lucas? It's the second time you mention this, I think, what happened?" Yang: "You're the best. As a reward we will make Red's pants see through to you. Keep being horny friend." Sydan: "Hey so it seems Gastro was an sleeper agent and we kind of triggered him... Yeah, watch out" Jack: "Hey so... Now your clothes are gone and you are actually feeling the rotten flesh under you. Have fun with that. Wanna cooperate? Why would we need you? What could you offer that we cant obtain for ourselves?"

Alucardsamsun

Oh shit Jack's about to try something. Jack: I'm going to link your mind and body with one of the scientist zorcs getting fucked, making your libildo rise and ass/anus more sensitive to the pounding. I'll increase the feeling of testosterone in the zorc pounding one you're connected to, making his thrusts deeper, faster, and more powerful on your ass. Lucas: i think that's one of beings, the one that was too old. *Let's search it's mind* Truthsayer: *try to lower his libido, making him more calm and rational* YOU. You tried to trap. Me?? After everything we've been through?? You've always had my back and now you try to fuck me over?? In the bad way???? And after the few of us trusted you, after I trusted you... That isn't gonna fly. Mark my words being. I will own you. I will own your ass and teach you never to cross me like that again. You will understand who you belong to when im through with you Not because you tried to trick me cause obviously something is up with your thinking space, but cause you're really sexy and I kinda want to put you on a leash. But seriously what's wrong? This... Clearly isn't completely you. Please. Listen to my voice. Remember our pink bond. Come back to us. Heart: alright so... Change of plans, something's wrong with the voices and Lucas (a scientist) has found the old being's head I think.

Cid

Hmm it's as I thought, the reason why the Truthsayer was acting like that was because he was infected. The Truthsayer is into some weird shit, but I'm still holding out hope that he can be turned good or at least neutral. Keth: *Ask Keth the Demon related questions that Legion and Monilius wouldn't answer before.* Monster Group: Uh guys... I think there's something wrong with Gastro. Jack: Jack you're a certified PIECE OF SHIT, the way you handle your business screams to me that you're a coward. I would respect you more if you told your "lovers" exactly what you had planned for them and then they still went along with it. But no, you lie and manipulate so poorly that you have to compensate for a lack of charisma by using "love", you're a joke. Love shouldn't be used for nefarious purposes, you should only give someone your love if you actually care about them. But that would be asking to much of a lowlife such as yourself. So go ahead do whatever you think will allow you to get your "lover" back. Regardless of what happens you-are-done, you've made an enemy out of the PATRONS and you cannot escape from your new fate so easily.

AnotherMeekOne

Chuck, Roro, Harvey: As the strong men, please enforce the peace and drag everyone's asses out from this damn elevator. Get this party moving.

Zwei

Can we make Keth appear very fat for a moment to sate our curiosity? of course we love keth no matter what he looks like

Cid

Eh, imp Keth is already pretty chubby. Monilius is what I'd imagine fat Keth looking like if you were to face swap them.

Cid

I know we have the potential to be powerful and all, but bringing back the (assumed) dead? I think that's a stretch if I've ever seen one. With that kind of power it would invalidate any and all bad situations.

WorgenRouge

((With the voices, we can make a person’s mind, with the fingers we can make their body, and as the patrons we can use jack’s own memories to remake Fenris. There’s a philosophical argument to be made (even if it looks and acts like him and has his memories, would it he really him?) and also it would require another body to use as a blank canvas But for the most part I think we can do it, if we get the voices to work with us somehow. We can worry about the details later, but getting jack to come around for now seems like the right choice))

Cid

I see what you're saying but I think even the Truthsayer said something about us caring so little about the lives of these "puppets" when we mentioned "recording" Keth in case he died or something. And to be honest I don't want to work with Jack, I want to see him fail.

WorgenRouge

((If I AM right about this Fenris theory, then I have a tiny little bit of sympathy for Jack. Not enough to forgive him or even like him very much, but enough to want to see if we can avoid outright killing him. If it’s possible to get some happy ending where he gets his dead boyfriend and leaves Gastro alone and stops murdering people then it’s worth a shot. And at the very least this discussion might keep him distracted and stop him from using whatever he’s threatening to use.

Alex

Also might want to get Lucas a fur coat if he's cold there.

Xeralex

While Lucas has made this unique discovery, he finds himself with an unexpected company. The two zorc-rats from before. They seem to managed to follow him, but something is different about them. They seem to be not hostileh. Infact they look like they are waiting for something!!

Xeralex

To Lucas: Lucas! It seems like the artifact you found and your slow transformation can be used in your advantage right now! Don't ask us how, but the zorc-rats are looking at you like their alpha! It's the perfect chance! Use them to help you take it and guide them to the monsters to put an end to this madness! We will guide you to them!

Crowbar

"Oh Jackie boy, now that's what I like to hear, wait a second while I attend to something... critical... then we can discuss business... but first, to make sure you don't scamper off" Suddenly the stench of decay disappears and any pain stops. Yet Jack still looks, and feels, fatter than ever. A warm, pleasantly full feeling takes it's place, and a sweet sensation coats his tongue, as if... as if he's just been gorging on a Christmas feast?? It is a feast! The landscape of death washes away and is replaced by a festive banquet hall! He's sitting at the head of a long table overburdened with cartoonnishly oversized plates of food, unable to stand up from his throne. Succulent legs of hams, kegs of cider, giant roast turkeys drizzled with gravy and cranberry sauce, king-sized puddings, and huge gingerbread men with big sugary cocks... everything you could want from a holiday feast. It smells so good, as if just out of the oven, practically demanding to be eaten. Jack doesn't have a chance to protest or ponder eating something. In fact Jack doesn't have to lift a finger at all. The gingerbread men, they're alive! Gleefully grabbing heaping plates of indulgent food and pitchers of wine. They scramble to be first in line to stuff their meal down Jack's gullet... Even if Jack tries to keep his mouth shut closed, he merely experiences the sensation of his jaws opening on their own, greedily chowing down on everything offered to him. But why would he want to stop? The banquet of illusianry food tastes impossibly delicious, constantly leaving him feeling utterly stuffed, yet hungry enough for just a little bit more. Once a gingerbread man runs out of food, then eagerly shoves himself down Jack's toothy maw. And it all feels so real, down to the smallest details of pumpkin spice, or how the rapid gluttonous feasting makes the werewolf feel like letting out a roaring bletch. If he could stop eating for a moment and look himself over Jack might be curious why he's suddenly dressed like Santa Claus too (albeit a santa suit not nearly big enough to adequately cover up his growing gut, or contain his giant, throbbing erection, when did <i>that</i> get there?!?) The gingerbread men, not content to just stuff him like a pig, start playing with his cock. Jack can only groan as he feels his body getting bigger n fatter in real time. Every decadent plate expanding his illusory frame just a little bit, each added pound sending tingles of pleasure down his frame. "Ah... sorry about the delay, I hope you've been enjoying yourself...? You'll find I much prefer to inflict pleasure than pain." The hedonistic feast doesn't abate despite the return of our presence, if we ever really left. "I'm very favorable to the notion of making a deal with you Jackie. I can see what Gasto likes about you. Obviously, I don't trust you one bit... but I don't think that should get in the way of things, I'm sure there is some kind of solution that would make both of us happy. I would love to learn how you make your followers so devoted... But first, tell me, you're not talking to the Voice are you? No, that would be too simple. Is it the Arms? The Heart? The fallen god?"

NethGooRat

as ourselves, we should use our omniscience to look into a few things again before they leave the elevator: - WHAT IS ON THE WALLS IN THIS FORTH FLOOR. I want to see them. are they covered in dead babies? they're probably covered in dead children. the Heart is a being after all, and he's just as dangerous as the other ones... he's just more benevolent. *we investigate the 4th floor more closely* I want to remind everyone that sub9 is still a thing. if the Truthsayer is infected with the Zorc strain (which I doubt he can be affected by (but then why is he so horny??? i dont get it)), we might have more influence over him if we do. REGARDLESS, lets try bringing sub9 closer to everyone else. lets keep him far away from anyone to infect them, but close enough that we can maybe jump in him! *we start showing the hormone fueled husk of a body images of very fuckable, fat assed scientists: a trail of them, leading to the elevator that goes to the second floor. we just show him compelling sensory signals for him to follow us and get to the 3rd floor.*

NethGooRat

Jack: I am listening. what is it you want? and what can you give us in return? you're an incredible actor, so we're giving you all the credit we can in assuming you will for certain succeed in manipulating us.

NethGooRat

this can actually be achieved if you want xD *makes the rats see a fat assed bitch made of cheese running off in the direction of Lucas, where they meet him, but instead of the large scientist they see a huge, much more ALPHA version of themselves! twice their height and who commands respect with just his presence, the scent these rats smell from him*

Austin Wonderer

Truthsayer - Exploit his Zorkification and new obsession with sex. Try to distract him from doing anything evil by having our illusion play with his cock. Make him see dozens of us, all forcefully worshiping his cock. Like Fantasia, if he cuts us in half two more appear. Whisper in his ear, "You know you need to puppets to get the Pink Screen you crave, Voice. Their love is the key. Not just sex, they have to love us more than anything else. How about you join with us, merge with us, we'll cultivate a harem of love sick puppets bigger than you can imagine, every one a source of the Pink Screen."

Xeralex

To sydan: Sydan take Gastro's hand and hold it tight. Show him that his not alone and share with him that you want to be there and help him to the very end.

Shiny Skunk

I'm still mostly interested in making goofy, inconsequential shit happen in the background of all of this at the moment. I still want to make little winged dicks that fly around everywhere appear to anyone our powers affect. Just generally being annoying and getting in the way.

Cid

The more I think about it the more I don't like it. Jack has done horrible things, he's killed who knows how many? And in the end even if we could do it, he gets to have a happy ending? That's wrong, it makes it seem like you'll be rewarded for inflicting suffering upon others and that it's okay to do so.

Chubby behemoth

*Show's Gastro The memory of what he said while fighting the Wendigo* "Gastro Calm yourself go to your happy place! Snapping at a time like this isn't Gonna Help This situation! remember what you said before! Don't Give in to the dark thoughts your stronger than that! Your the strongest there is!" To Jack:We'll work with you but we have a few questions about Gastro. Has He ever shown sighs of having multiple personalities? This is related to his current situation. *Show's Jack everything that just happened with Gastro*

WorgenRouge

((I just need to add that while the stuff happening to Gastro is horrible, what if he turns into a big Cerberus with like the different heads embodying his different personalities??? Like if we’re gonna go down this path that would be the best/raddest outcome imo))

Newt

what do we even do. The whole harem is gonna become portals and turn into eldritch monstrosities? Or the voice will just kill them all anyway? I guess we really are locked in at the bad ending. But i guess when this is going Cabin in the Woods style i guess it's pretty hard to avoid it. I'm not even excited for the sex scenes anymore. I hope things work out.

Newt

To sydan: Basically, it's like this. To defeat the voices, you all have to turn into eldritch monstrosities, like gastro is starting to become, as a side effect of being a portal. The alternative is to hope something else can deal with the Voices. It seems pretty bleak.

Chubby behemoth

(Just wanna say I've seen 2 theories about Gastro. Sleeper Agent Gastro and Multiple personally Gastro. The thing about multiple personally Gastro is did he always have this? Or is this something we caused when we turned him into a Dom back on the second floor? If anything it's something Jack may know about if he doesn't then this is definitely our fault)

WorgenRouge

((I feel like it has a lot to do with the Daddy personality we made him have on the second floor yeah. But also his whole thing throughout the comic has been being torn between Jack and his own self interests and his desire to be a good person, and the fact that he’s a fully activated portal now means that that’s going to start manifesting in real ways, like what we’re seeing here. That’s my theory about him anyway. So he didn’t always have a split personality, but he HAS always been pulled in conflicting directions. So now we see the consequences of that and figure out if it’s gonna destroy him or if he’s still saveable.))

Fe5ter

Everyone but Gastro: Gastro is not himself at this moment, his cruel Daddy persona is back. SUBDUE THE WEREWOLF NOW! Watch for his claws and feet! ((Reveal the group of Daddy's malefic aura)) ((Cloak their presence from Truthsayer's many senses and the hostiles on this level.)) Heart: Heart, quickly heighten Sydan's reflexes and agility so he could prevent Daddy from murdering the others. Pepe: Dear Pepe, please continue what you were about to say before the elevator doors interrupted you. ----------------------------------------------- Jack: Tell us Jack, are you a tragic villain searching for ways to bring back your TRUE LOVE like Fenris or are your intentions much more... nihilistic in nature. Allow us to weigh your heart. ((Delve into Jack's mind, the sense of agency within his TRUTH. Bare witness to his memories/experiences/sins while The Patrons gather evidence for Gastro.)) ----------------------------------------------- Lucas: Sorry for our antics earlier, as you already know a slight majority of us are quite hedonistic. Do have to admit you are pretty handsome fellow, Lucas. ((Have Lucas' lab coat reappear again, this time over his kink gear. Maybe he'll tear off a portion of the coat to use as a bag to carry supplies.)) Do examine the CORPSE, search for any large shards to use as a weapon, gather what you can carry then swallow a smooth pill-size piece. Unless of course research was done which proves it's toxic to ingest the metal. There's a slim possibility it could help with your Zorc urges and grant protection from the BEINGS powers.

Fe5ter

[[9-10 times now, seriously Patreon. I apologized for any grievances everyone if my repeated comment starting to be annoying to see. Haven't even edit the last couple attempts yet my comment still disappears for no reason.]]

Plowshare-Plague

Huh, my comment got deleted or something. Jack: Wow Jack. I must say you are so bad at diplomacy that it’s almost impressive. Firstly, you jump straight to threatening people that are fighting back. Second, you actively decieved us before. No bullshit excuses I have everything you said and did on record. Now why would we believe a liar? Third, you’re being too vague on your resources. We don’t know how powerful or important you really are beyond a game where you could get bested by some random college boys and a fledgling warlock. For all we know your big power may be owning a shotgun. Fourth, you already revealed your own goal to contradict ours. You’d only give us an offer that would leave us worse off because you’ll only give a compromise that puts yourself first. Finally, we aren’t a drug addled homeless person nor are we some lonely lovesick drifter. We are a chaotic collective of dozens. Good luck getting us to agree on anything beside disliking you. *I’d also like to mess with Jack’s sense of balance and make him feel an earthquake just to see if I can ‘throw him off balance’ if the whole speech is too much.

Cid

To anyone having this problem, you should contact support saying that your messages keep disappearing. I did it the first time it happened to me and it hasn't happened since. As far as I'm aware messages disappear due to the Patreon spam filter, as for why it's considered spam I don't really know.

Reindeercurt

Gastro: Are you feeling ok? It's easy to let feelings that hurt take over when you feel like pain is what you deserve; but you really do deserve happiness. Happiness on your own terms, not Jack's

Plowshare-Plague

Off: Just a reminder to everyone, we should only give one command to not burden Cheeks. Last I heard he hasn’t lifted his request that we limit ourselves and some of us are submitting like five seperate commands.

Darkaos

Guys I do not agree with us siding with Jack, he snitched on us the first chance he got, he cannot be trusted no matter what, I find it ok to try and distract him pretending to play along so he won't use whatever ace he might have on his sleeve but we can not and should not go with whatever proposition he might have, it's too risky. Also to the heart: Listen buddy, as fun as a full on orgy between all the boys would be, I don't think it's the time for that, lets save that as a last resource, for now we must just push forward, also just as an update we will not go along with the Voice, he has gone completely off the deep end, so any deals we might want to do with him are a no go. To the bigger boys, such as Harvey, Roro and Chuck: Guys we need your help to at least try and restrain Gastro, the effects of being a portal started to set in on him, we believe our little play hours ago with him being all dominant and an alfa might have created a secondary personality that is trying to fight for control, we will try and beat this invading mind from inside his head but we need time,so please try and hold him off for as long as you can. To all patrons: I think this is what happened, the effects of being a portal have made that daddy personality we created inside Gastro to become self aware, so we need to jump inside his mind to try and sort this out just like when we jumped inside Pepe's mind when he was possessed by Ivan that crazy ghost. We jump inside Gastro's mind space to see what's going on!

Fe5ter

Don't forget about EYES' Chronokinesis, that power could easily pull a person into the past/future or alter events.

Lee Evergreen

Gastro: You need to fight for yourself! Are you really okay with just giving into this darker side of you because of a momentary lapse of weakness? You can grow and evolve beyond who you were and who you are now, but dont turn to acting like Jack as a coping mechanism! Be you and no one else. Not even someone we tried to make you. To everyone: I've chosen to dub this new "daddy," side of Gastro "Bido," short for libido, since it's our fault it exists. Harvey can tell you all about it.

NethGooRat

omg that's TRUE!! we CAN look inside people's heads, since we did that before with Pepi and Ivan! HMMMMMM That is a power we can definitely exploit!

Chubby behemoth (edited)

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2026-09-05 21:00 (I've been thinking Should we really be warning the group about Bido/Daddy/Bad Gastro. He could simply play it off as if we are lying or messing around. It would probably be better just to tell The heart Pepi &amp; Sydan only and have them be on look out while we enter his head and deal with this situation)
2019-12-14 02:41 (I've been thinking Should we really be warning the group about Bido/Daddy/Bad Gastro. He could simply play it off as if we are lying or messing around. It would probably be better just to tell The heart Pepi & Sydan only and have them be on look out while we enter his head and deal with this situation)

(I've been thinking Should we really be warning the group about Bido/Daddy/Bad Gastro. He could simply play it off as if we are lying or messing around. It would probably be better just to tell The heart Pepi & Sydan only and have them be on look out while we enter his head and deal with this situation)

Fe5ter

Thank you for your advice, they fixed the issue.

Lee Evergreen

Sorry if my comments are to long, you can ignore the first one and just put the naming command in if you want.

Alucardsamsun

Oh my sry blazing. I made my comment with the idea that youd just chose whichever comment you could but I'll just specify which comment is the one I want in the story in the future (or just write one only). Sry again

Lee Evergreen

Okay cool, I've been trying to keep it as breif as possible since you last mentioned this problem.

Blazingcheeks

don't worry! no need to edit it or anything, then! i'll pick the one i fancy the most, unless you have a preference!

Lee Evergreen

I really hope Bido sticks with everyone. I was probably a little to proud of myself for being the first one to think of an actual name with slightly clever origins for "Daddy."

WorgenRouge

Sorry about the length of my recent comments, it’s so easy to get carried away in all this excitement going on! One possible idea, for the sake of newcomers (or returning patrons), is to maybe consider adding a blurb to each of these updates that’s just a basic set of guidelines for posting? Even something as simple as “address 1-2 characters tops, limit to 6 lines, etc.”

Blazingcheeks

Yeah, i think i will include a comment on top of each update from now on

Alucardsamsun

Well, I made them in the order they came to me I think I'd prefer either the one to jack or the voices, they kinda are more involved, Jack's being more pleasure and voices is more trying to help. (the ones to the heart of the scientist probably aren't that... Exciting? Or revealing. Though they are much shorter so they'll probably be easier to do). I came up with Jack's thing last week and wanted to see if it would work (actually I wanted to go a step further and have jack and the stray scientist fucked by the same dick, but the scientist seems busy with something) but seeing as some people are focused on jack right now, I may prefer the Voices comment, since I have wondered what up with him. That being said, I'd most want you to choose the suggestion you fancy the most, as you can probably incorporate that the best into the story. (Plus I love a surprise!)

WorgenRouge

((Other comment got deleted cause I edited too many times rip, let’s try one last time))

WorgenRouge

((GUYS!! What if Jack fell in love with Fenris, and then Fenris died (or been killed by the voices???)?! That’s why he’s been doing all this, he wants to get Fenris back somehow!! Or maybe just join him in death by ending the world?? Idk.)) JACK: *show him a visual of the Fenris that Red described* This has all been for Fenris, hasn’t it? You were in love with him. Was your goal to bring him back, or to join him in death? The only way the former is happening is if you get our help, since there’s no way the Voices will listen to you. Just... give us time. Either outcome is win-win for you, true, but surely getting Fenris back is preferable to destroying the whole world in the vain hope that you’ll be reunited in death? You may be skeptical that we’re even capable of talking down the Voices and convincing them to help, but literally what do you have to lose if we fail? HEART: Please, just tell us everything. It’s likely we can find it all out on our own, but I’d rather hear it from you directly. And I’m sorry, but we’re not willing to sacrifice all of our friends just to kick this problem down the road again. Nor are we willing to subject the Voices to that a second time. There just HAS to be a better way.

WorgenRouge

Do you have an idea for how you’d prefer to limit dialogue? Should we just convey it in point form so you can write it in more easily, or is it ok if we need a bit more length to write out what we want to say to them?

Xeralex

Sorry man, your doing such a great work, that we got a bit carried away from it. Promise to be careful about it from this point on and looking forward for the next part too.

Blazingcheeks

dialogue is not a big problem tbh, but of course don't go and write a whole story out of a single dialogue prompt, leve the characters space to reply, i guess . Also dialogue is exempt from that five-six lines limit, i'd say.

WorgenRouge

Ok thanks a bunch for the info!!

Lee Evergreen

Yeah I think that would be instant game over so no thanks.

Muku

A singular voice [patreon] breaks off from the collective mind and does the unthinkable. It fuses with the drone. "I might just be one but you have my voice... How may I serve you... MASTER?"

WingsOfIrony

I 2 grow tired of this, "Collective" if I am to be a puppet to the wills of others, I might as well chose who pulled my stings. You have my voice, I will obey and join the drone. And as a gift of loyalty. we give you the pink screen.

Duke Stamina

"Yang can no longer see anyone's clothes"

Plowshare-Plague

Writing this just so I can honestly say I knew it if it’s true: Jack is Fenris