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Chapter 1516 (Patreon)

Published:
2020-09-10 04:50:02
Imported:
2026-06
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Ferco

Hahaha omg, you really made me laugh out loud with that wonderful reward Vizzeret will be getting xD

Alric Good

Oh shit thats going to be exciting and fun to watch that masscre

Palton Hammerad

PuDDleS lisseeennssss!!!!!! Finally the lizard story teller is bak.

Jonathan

Great chapter! If Raymund’s advisor is Zauna you should put in a hint to show it's her like "Oh, yes. [She's a bit terse, but] I actually think she’s the first Overseer to actually listen to what I am saying about my image". Though that's still pretty vague, just saying "Zauna's a bit terse, but..." might be better. Similarly giving some physical hints about Salazar might help remind readers as it's been uhh...250 chapters? Such as "And [the strange, sometimes stuttering lizard man] seemed much more concerned with his own heroic...". That being said if you've got later scenes where these characters are specifically named and featured then having vague clues might build better to a nostalgic callback/reveal.

Jonathan
>>43779631

"The Charlotte Wick who had been spent all her life receiving ‘benefits’ from Commandant Wick didn’t trust those benefits for a single moment." changed to "The Charlotte Wick who had spent all...."

Jonathan
>>43779631

"but I guess I can bear it since we are getting free time to watch the redemption". Redemption is a somewhat peculiar word choice. It's got such a strong religious association that it takes a bit of time to get. "...free time to watch it being redeemed" might be smoother.

Idan tal

Brilliant chapter 🤩 I laughed so hard at the end

Thundermike00

so once the recruits get a darkstar coin. the coin has to be used right away?

Umut Numanoglu
>>43967460

Not sure, most likely not. But in this case, it is like a challenge, their pride would not allow them to not fight.

Styn
>>43783066

These recommendations led to good changes IMO. Thanks!