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Chapter 1599 (Patreon)

Published:
2020-11-29 06:07:56
Imported:
2026-06
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Alexander Dupree

Hey maybe use subtext to indicate what is happening rather than that kind of explanation that the brother used. Something like a comment about the operation they’re about to start that indicates what is going on without saying it.

Kevin Mendoza

Seems like a relatively large investment of time and energy put into this character wasted if he dies now. I thought the quest to find his brother was only just beginning.

Christopher Sigurdson
>>48566589

Yeah even saying Commander Shal seems too on the nose. When you revise this, just show Shal's prominent features: blue skin, extra eye, SPEAR.

Qybalt

Really like where you are going with this! Finding out the secret plot from Techet like that feels forced though. Hope to see whether or not Rand can feel the connection/borrowed weight from Raymund being severed! Maybe Rand will also see Shal after portalling in. Good luck for tomorrow

Demitrius Fogle

Man I hope Raymond gets saved but shit idk what’s gonna happen on this one

Krazy Kanaka
>>48566855

I somewhat agree, but it also keeps the reader on their toes when you lose someone your emotionally invested in. In this case I think its a fair trade.

Raiser

Shal vs Randidly coming soon to theatres near you.

Leaored

I call this bullshit. What the hell is that part where he is telling that his brother is stronger than anyone else?. That is pure bullshit.

Epeen

Oh fuck me, i cant handle this characters death at all. Why must you do this to me!

SunderGoldmane
>>48570469

Nobody knows what happens to progenitors after their test, techt could qualify as something similar. But it’s already been hinted at that people who get close to the secret that Edeaine and randidly have discovered end up disappearing, those people have to be powerful. They probably don’t have limits on how much aether that they receive from the system as well.