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https://www.dropbox.com/s/rgzvp57iz2nkr0w/Sithrah2_proofread.pdf

Hi patrons!


Here is a private dropbox link for you ONLY! Please don't share this with anyone online. :)


This is kinda exciting for me to be at this stage now. But it's also very nerve-racking because I just know there are details that I'm overlooking or missing or typos or something. Usually I send my finished books to a few close friends to help me proofread but this time I figured you guys might want to be in on the action. :)


So here is the full book of Sithrah 2 (minus the extra content). If you could take an evening or morning to read it through and see if you can find any problems with it then that would be super helpful. You guys are my official proofreaders! It seems like every time I get notes from someone, there is something pointed out that everyone else missed so I figure the more eyes on it the better.


I went through the whole thing and cleaned up the faces that were bothering me too. I recolored the library scene and cleaned up young Dino a bunch. I tried to make older Dino look a bit older to match what I have been doing with him in book 3. I tweaked some of the dialogue and wording in a few places too. 


Let me know what you guys think. Please just comment with your notes so that everyone else can see if it's been addressed. If you have a bunch then you can always just send me an email with the notes too. J@coffeetablecomics.com


Thanks so much for your continued support here on Patreon too. I couldn't be doing this without your help and support!


And please don't share or send this PDF to anyone. It's for your eyes only. :)


Talk soon!

Jason

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Jeremy Rowland

Check the typeface on page 46 ("well, anyone with about a hundred miles"). Also, consider replacing the double hyphens with Em dashes "—" (Unicode U+2014). On page 17 the proper grammatical phrase would be "really good" but maybe you're trying to capture the character's own colloquialisms. I haven't been following the updates so this is my first look at the book, great stuff!

Patrick Davidson

On spread #11, there are 2 instances of using an ellipsis within a question. “So Dino… Do you trust me?” and later “So I ask again… do you?” In the first “Do you” the “D” is capitalized. In the second instance, it is not. I would think you might want to keep these uniform. Anyone have any thoughts here?

Patrick Davidson

On spread #10, there is a sentence [“That's why I brought you here.” Says the voice.] Might be better as ["That's why I brought you here," says the voice.]

Nick Allott

I didn't notice any spelling mistakes, but like Jeremy said, the typeface for "well, anyone..." on page 46 looks off. I may not have noticed if I wasn't looking for mistakes though.

Jason Brubaker

You guy! Thanks for all the emails and lists of things you caught! Plus your comments here too. I will wait to look at them all when I am ready to compile all the notes and address them one by one. That will probably be in about a week or two after I get a few more notes. :)