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windjammer

Consider the following corrections: 0042: "The tables have turned, haven't they?" or you could just say "The tables have turned." 0044: Consider changing to "I think that's enough". 0046: I'm not sure on how best to change this, but this could be rephrased. Consider changing to "For a moment, I thought about putting something in the hole to stop the flow." 0054: Consider rephrasing to, "I'll leave it to her and get the hell out of here!" 0060: Change "She remembers me someone!" to "She reminds me of someone!"