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   “—There we go, think that did the trick,” a nonplussed voice from out of nowhere remarked.

   Tabitha jolted back to awareness with her sinuses screaming, and caught a blurry glimpse of a hand holding a white paper capsule covered with tiny black text. Her brain wasted no time connecting the overpowering ammonia inhalant in the air to the idea of smelling salts, and being roused back to consciousness in such a manner was a lot more unpleasant than she’d have ever imagined. There were three faces crowded around wherever she was lying, it was way too bright, and she felt completely exhausted, too tired to even dream about sitting up.

   “...Tabitha?” A woman asked.

   Tabitha tried to blink the bright blur into defined shapes and shift her position—her body felt stiff and heavily-laden, and her head felt strangely detached, seemingly anchored to reality only by a terrible aching pain that radiated out from the side of her temple. The woman spoke again, but Tabitha’s attention was bleary and wandering. All she could make out was that the voice was choked with emotion, and not someone she immediately recognized, which added to the strangeness of her situation.

   “Tabby?” Hannah asked in a meek voice. “Hello to Tabitha?”

   She knew that voice for sure, and it was coming from the smaller face, closer down to the horizon of muddled shapes that she was beginning to realize was her body on a hospital bed. I’m back. I’m BACK. Only knew Hannah in ONE lifetime, and it’s the life I wanted—the life I WANT, the one I was wishing for. Thank you, thank you thank you thank you...

   “Hannah...?” Tabitha managed out.

   Her own words came out as more of a breathless sigh than audible speech, and Tabitha wondered if anyone would be able to hear her. There simply wasn’t any strength in her diaphragm she could intone into her words to project them at any volume. The sheer effort of speaking was so impossibly taxing that it made her feel like she needed to black out and rest all over again.

   “She just said ‘Hannah,’” the woman exclaimed. “Hannah—that’s my daughter right here’s name! Tabitha recognized—”

   “Quiet please, quiet, let’s not overwhelm the girl,” the male voice admonished her. “Miss Tabitha, we’ve contacted your parents, and they’re on their way here right now. Would it be alright if I asked you a few questions?”

   “Hurts,” Tabitha croaked in her tiny voice. She wasn’t against answering questions, but her head was splitting and this seemed like a crucial thing to convey to them as quickly as she could.

   “Yes, I’d expect so,” the doctor murmured. “We took you off of—well, we’ll get some morphine in your IV in just a moment. You’re a very, very lucky girl—you’ve been legally dead for two days, now. You’ll have a very interesting certificate of death to show off. Can you describe your current pain for me on a scale of one to ten, with ten being the highest?”

   “Six,” Tabitha replied in a low murmur, fighting to keep her eyes open. “On it’s way to… seven.”

   “Six, on it’s way to seven,” the doctor repeated. “Good, good. We’ll get that taken care of for you. Do you know where you are?”

   In light of her recent—and confusing—experiences, that felt like a hell of a loaded question. Tabitha blinked with difficulty again, fighting to glare through the haze of exhaustion and eyeball her surroundings. She realized Hannah was holding her hand in a tight little grip, and it filled her with comfort. Tabitha tried to squeeze back, but there didn’t seem to be much strength in her right hand. Or anywhere.

   “...Springton General,” Tabitha finally answered.

   “That’s—yes, you’re in a hospital, Springton General Hospital,” The doctor nodded, seeming pleased with the measure of her faculties. “Can you tell me the last thing you remember?”

   Dangling in the darkness from Hannah’s voice. Smashing my head into the back of 2045’s MRI prototype in the University of Louisville Hospital. Escaping a series of memories and or nightmares via F-22, the Lockheed Martin single-seat, twin-engine, all-weather stealth tactical fighter aircraft of my dreams. Those awful girls, chasing me through the endless parking lot. I remember talking with Julie, and she felt so REAL. So real… There was—there was another timeline that started. Fuck, I think that WAS real, but my brain bleeding or some sort of damage… DISCONNECTED me? I timed out? Brain bleed. Brain bleed, because Erica Taylor—

   “Violence,” Tabitha mumbled, deciding to tactfully keep some things to herself. “Violence and pain.”

   “Violence and pain,” The doctor echoed, seeming a little taken aback. “If you could describe—”

   “Seven now,” Tabitha interrupted to report, squeezing her eyes shut and furrowing her brow. “...Eight, soon.”

   “Alrighty, everything else can certainly wait,” the doctor relented. “Giving you some morphine now. You’re going to feel very, very drowsy, but you shouldn’t be feeling any pain. Oh, and—welcome back.”

   He wasn’t kidding about the feeling—almost instantly, Tabitha felt like the sharp agony in her head was stifled beneath blanket after blanket of smothering cottony tiredness that completely buried her senses. Her waking thought processes slowed to a sluggish, exhausted crawl, sinking into a soporific muddle-headedness that made her surreal dreams from before seem to have been in vivid clarity by contrast. The following conversations occurring right by her bedside seemed to travel enormous distances to reach the semi-aware part of her mind in broken, disjointed sentences, and when the words arrived at all, they did so in a droning, nearly incomprehensible murmur.

   “————————————procedures for———”

   “———right to alert us as quickly as you———parents here by her side when she———— ither medical miracle, or misdiagnosis. We’re going to run another battery of tests to——”

   “———indication of—————?”

   “————————————”

   “——don’t want to———— ketchup and pickle only, please! Thank y———”

   “———————————————————recovery———”

   “———ssible that the instruments we have available here weren’t sensitive enough to detect brain activity below a certain threshold. There’s never been———ell them she was awake and alert, she managed to say a few words. Yes, yes, we———can’t tell anything else until———

   “————visitors, until there’s———”

   “——————?”

   “—stop that. Hannah Honey, give her some space. She needs to rest—”

   “————————————”

   “———know what else we can say. Up until this case, this was unprecedented, there was no———”

   “——bitha?!—————hear me?”

   “——Tabitha baby? Tabby, can you hear me? We’re all———”

*     *     *

   Mrs. Moore wrung the handrail spanning the side of Tabitha’s hospital bed in a death grip. Her eyes were still red-rimmed, her lips were pressed into a thin line, and her figure was noticeably thinner than it had been just the week before. Emotionally, mentally, and physically, she felt about as hollowed out as any one person could be. She’d had no appetite since it happened, and she’d spent several insensate days sobbing and screaming herself to the point of weakness and dehydration. Her husband hadn’t fared much better, seeming to age several decades in those several days and speaking only in clipped, terse sentences.

   Hearing that Tabitha had inexplicably woken up—woken up from being legally brain dead, was more than she could comprehend right now, and she was still terrified to believe there was any hope, that it might actually be true. Mrs. Moore was empty of everything else and still reeling—she wanted them to force Tabitha awake again just so that she could confirm it with her own eyes, and she also couldn’t bear to. She felt her heart breaking at the pain and suffering her daughter was going through.

   “Are you gonna be okay?” Mrs. Macintire asked, giving her a look of concern.

   “Soon as I can hear her speak again,” Mrs. Moore nodded quickly, tears erupting out of nowhere to stream down her face again. “As soon as I can see her awake again, alive again. Then I’ll be great. Perfect. Everything will be...”

   “I know exactly what you mean,” Mrs. Macintire patted her hand. “This whole thing terrifies me. I was sitting right there in the chair and didn’t realize a thing. If Hannah hadn’t happened to notice something was wrong, that Tabitha was having a nightmare—hell, if this brain activity deal was all a misdiagnosis, some sort of goddamned malpractice fucking fuckup...”

   “I don’t care,” Mrs. Moore blurted out, sniffling and trying to stop her breath from hitching up. “If I can see her again—if we can get her back, I don’t care about anything else. I’ll care later. I’ll be, I’ll be furious later. Right now I just, I just—”

   “She is back,” Mrs. Macintire reassured her with a comforting hug. “They diagnosed her as brain dead and instead she wakes up and starts talking! Everything’s going to be fine, with a little bit of time. Someone up there’s still looking out for Tabitha, and He’ll make sure she pulls through this.”

   “You’re right—you’re, you’re right,” Mrs. Moore nodded, wiping distractedly at her tears.

   With Sandra’s husband Officer Macintire transferred to Springton General for his recovery and Tabitha admitted to the adjacent wing, Mrs. Macintire and her seven-year-old daughter had been spending almost all of their free time here visiting in the rooms of either one or the other patients. The harmful what-ifs thinking about what would have happened if Tabitha had stirred near consciousness and no one had been there to see... were horrifying to consider. They’d taken her off life support because there’d supposedly been absolutely no chance of recovery. Mrs. Moore wasn’t feeling the rage and anger about it yet, but it was certainly weighing more on her mind each passing moment.

   Alan Moore stood off to the side, simply staring with a vacant expression. He’d been bottling up all of the pain of losing Tabitha internally and had been pushed well past the point of shutting down—Mrs. Moore felt ashamed that she’d been in no position to help him through it. They’d both just been completely struck dumb and absolutely lost—how do any parents anywhere cope with loss of this magnitude? They’d missed the Monday expulsion hearing, which came and went with little fanfare—only Chris Thompson was expelled, with the other girls each being released from their suspensions to return to school for a period of ‘academic probation.’

   Mrs. Moore couldn’t really bring herself to care about any of the bastards.

   High school bullying had passed well under the local news station’s radar, but assault and battery at a Halloween party that left a pretty teenage girl in a vegatative state did not, and when Channel Seven began connecting the dots they quickly seemed to realize there was quite a story to run. Tabitha’s involvement in the Springton South Main Shooting allowed them to dredge up old footage again, and several of the district schools pulled their entire student bodies out of class for a lecture on teen violence and the implementation of new zero-tolerance anti-bullying measures in the student code of conduct.

   Democratic Kentucky Governor Paul E. Patton released a statement expressing his regret and condolences, touting Bill Clinton’s recent First Annual Report on School Safety—a study commissioned between the US Department of Justice and the US Department of Education—as well as reiterating last year’s talking points regarding the school shooting in West Paducah, Kentucky. Between the political expediency of using the incident as another topic in support of Clinton’s School Safety Report and Tabitha Moore’s favored hometown hero status with the Springton Police… Channel Seven had the local communities at large worked up into a frothing rage at what had happened to Tabitha.

   Erica Taylor herself wasn’t expelled—the teen was instead transferred, to a Juvenile Detention Center all the way over in Breathitt County—unanimously expedited away from the increasingly hostile Springton crowd to await her court date. People were angry, and a deluge of supportive phone calls and letters arrived at the Moore household, each fielded and dealt with by Grandma Laurie, who provisionally crowded both herself and the boys into the small trailer day by day to keep an eye on her son and daughter-in-law.

   Elena’s father, representing the offices of Seelbaugh and Straub, offered his counsel and insisted that with the current circumstances, any and all charges they decided to press were guaranteed to stick. Mrs. Moore had been trying not to think about it—her thoughts wandered into dangerous ideas of murderous revenge whenever she didn’t clamp down on them tightly enough. She knew she should appreciate the assistance and attention of so many well-wishing strangers, but she felt nothing, nothing but loss and grief and disbelief.

   Tabitha CAN’T ever leave us. She—she can’t. SHE CAN’T, Mrs. Moore thought, squeezing the hospital bed’s handrail until she was clutching the bar in a white-knuckled grip.

   Her lovely daughter’s head was still wrapped in bandages, and the only indication that she’d ever returned to them at all was that she would now shift slightly in her sleep, gently cant her head to one side as much as the neck brace allowed. Tabitha looked small and frail, a tiny waif of a girl that barely filled out the hospital gown. They’d cut away the broken cast on her left hand without bothering to replace or splint it, leaving the ugly old yellowing bruises on full display. Though supposedly not brain dead now, Mrs. Moore stood solemn vigil, watching her with wet eyes. She wouldn’t sit down or relax until she’d seen her wake up for herself.

   You’re not even fourteen yet, Mrs. Moore began to cry again. Your birthday’s next month—you were about to miss your birthday, Tabby. You can’t miss your birthday. Fourteen years—there’s so much lost time, and I haven’t even started making it all up to you properly. 

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/// Going to consider this section a provisional one, I may keep, and I may scrap again and rewrite. This was originally going to start off with scenes showing the expulsion hearing, but after several days of researching procedures and sitting through videos of actual expulsion hearings... it's not viable to put into the story, at all. Not without completely divorcing the hearing from any semblance of reality.

   School district expulsion hearings may not be the most tedious and dull things ever, but they're definitely within the top ten most tedious and dull things ever. Firmly within the top ten. Trust me on this. The post's a day late, my first and second version of this were way too info-dumpy... and even this third go isn't much better. I need to still convey a lot of the information regarding the circumstances around the hearing and the media / public reaction, but I absolutely can't write out the hearing itself.

   I have a bit of the next RE:TT and a bit of the next 18 and Up written out, not sure which'll finish first. Going to clean up the teasers again and organize them into chapters at the start of March, just to give a heads-up.

Comments

Gary Coleman

That was Hannah, with her order of a Happy Meal

Sebastian Chow

Thanks for chap! Kept us in the lurch for a fuckin while there bud

Mazoyer

Well, it is not bad at all. Honestly maybe need a bit of re working but the idea is good. Having most events summarized inside Mrs Moore head

Mkrayn

I agree with Maz, this is good. Perhaps even very good. I'm so glad that Tabitha is back. Some more about Erica's situation, her sisters, and the cunt Carrie would be welcome. Obviously Erica is going away for a while. How 'bout her parents?

Paul Wirtz

Alright who wanted ketchup and pickle I need to know who to hate :-) Actually that section was a very good way to give impressions of whats going on without getting too wordy.

Michael Maor

You should keep most of this, it was quite well done, even(especially) the annoying fragmented comments. However if “———know what else we can say. Up until this case, this was unprecedented, there was no———” was supposed to be some doctor speaking you might want to rewrite or remove that. By the 1990s doctors were very cautious about those sort of statements, especially as people recovering after being declared dead was very much NOT unprecedented, and with the issues of organ donors making people suspicious about why certain standards for declaring a person dead were adopted.

Luis Costa

Well if you need some sort of vehicle for the information, a meeting between Tabitha and her parent's and Elena's Dad to decide what to do regarding the legal situation would probably work and that would be a good follow up for the gang's hospital visit.

Myob Myob

Not having a cast or splint or something on her broken wrist/hand/arm to immobilize it violates both standards of care and increases the pain and stress loads on a patient. Even a brain dead patient is not going to be handled that way since it opens the hospital to malpractice issues if anythIng goes wrong(er).

Myob Myob

Mayfield Clinic dot com has a good discussion on levels of traumatic brain injury, procedures and problems involved and recovery issues and times. That may help. Also, the Taylor family is going to get the million-dollar hospital bill for her care sooner or later. As described, Tabitha would likely be about two weeks-to-a-month post assault to not be cocooned in an ICU room with stuff basically hiding her completely. On arrival, she would have gone into surgery for hours, then ICU for days. Since she was breathing without support, at least her brain stem would have been functioning so without brain shrinkage, which takes a while, she likely would still have been described as comatose or profoundly comatose not brain dead.

Myob Myob

Rainbow Rehab dot com has a good discussion of comas, associated brain trauma levels, grades and tests for recovery stages/injury levels and anticipated levels of care and possible timelines for actions as someone recovers. A person coming to as fast as you describe is rather unbelievable for an injury caused by a Louisville Slugger to the head and arm . Even assuming Erica is not an exercise fanatic, that bat is a club with about a thirty-inch lever arm. That much mechanical advantage plus Erica’s demonstrated rage would be much more than enough to have shattered Tabitha’s skull on the one side. To do the surgery needed, Tabitha’s head would have to be shaved, pressure relief devices inserted, bone fragments removed, bleeders and clots dealt with, and possibly she would need to be put into an induced coma beyond what her condition was on arrival. Recovery to the point you describe is just not believable on the time scale you give. OTOH, a longer time scale, say several weeks to a month, makes her Mom’s slimming down believable too.

Myob Myob

This is from WebMD dot com and discusses bruising colors, stages and timing.

Myob Myob

Many Colors As you heal, an iron-rich substance in your blood -- called hemoglobin -- breaks down into other compounds. This process makes your bruise change colors: • It’s usually red right after the injury. • Within a day or two, it turns purplish or black and blue. • In 5 to 10 days, it may be green or yellow. • In 10 to 14 days, it’s yellowy-brown or light brown. It should fade away totally in about 2 weeks.

Myob Myob

Bottom line, JMO, you are trying to insert way to much medical detail. Also, the medical details you are trying to use for dramatic purposes are actually doing little but getting you into trouble by interfering with the audience's suspension of belief (certainly you are causing me problems). Trying to coordinate/compress hospitalization and healing times for dramatic purposes to everything else is not working in this case (again JMO). As a suggestion, keep the dream sequence as part of Tabitha's finally waking out of a coma and drop the brain death idea entirely. Maybe insert a short flashback by Tabitha's mom or dad - he's been awful cardboardy lately - internally discussing their fear and worry about her continued comatose condition and their uncertainty/terror that she would never wake up, wake up a vegetable or die. Maybe make that part of the bit after Tabitha in put back to sleep and Tabitha's parents are in the room. Keep Tabitha waking up during a visit by Hannah and her mom, maybe with Hannah's mom hitting the bed's call button then leaving the room to get a nurse when there is no response after a few seconds. Also, stage all this maybe three-four weeks after the attack. Catch the reader up on what's happened regarding people getting expelled, going to jail, being sued as you have done as an aside or internal conversation by some adult or other.

FortySixtyFour

Thanks for all the helpful comments and input, Myob Myob. I'll make some adjustments, but overall what I wrote is the experience I'm trying to convey. In real life, Tabitha didn't get hit by a girl with a bat--it was a jeep while crossing an intersection at night. Flew fourteen feet through the air (or so I'm told) and landed on skull. Dangerous blood clot in brain that doctors refused to operate on because of where it was placed. The girl with a bat was my best equivalency for relating my own personal experiences and the emotions behind them--that's what RE:TT is a vehicle for, really. What you're describing is certainly true for many others' aftermath with brushes with death, but those aren't my stories to tell.

Arcanist Lupus

This section works better than you think it does, at least for me. A little bit of info dump feels right here. After the emotional wringer you gave us in the last part, a little bit of telling instead of showing gives us a little space to rebalance and stabilize in preparation for what comes next.

Greg King

I agree with Lupus. I'm loving the story and haven't even started on the other stories. I've developed such an empathy for this senior turned youngster. Certainly the most unusual and interesting do-over I've ever read

Joseph

Rather surprised Carrie was not also expelled given she tried to lure Tabitha to her death.

Myob Myob

Thanks. The context lets me understand what you are trying do. Working without that context, I only saw that the injury mechanism, timeline and consequences did not match up in what you wrote. I now understand you are not trying to depict someone who ‘simply’ has had their head bashed in, which with modern care, is possibly survivable. Now though I understand that you basically are trying to write about someone who had some portion of their skull and brain essentially ground off as a consequence of their body braking to a stop head-first. That likely left that portion of their skull and brain smeared across the pavement. Motorcycle accidents and car-pedestrian accidents often look like that and regularly are fatal. ☹

martin Silsby

Hey mate, Enjoying it as it is. Thanks for your work.

Peter Drake

Still awesome. And if you're trying to figure out how to get what you want from the expulsion hearing then maybe just have someone else (Elena?) convey the important/dramatic bits to Tabitha. That way you get the hearing bits, and deepening friendship interactions at the same time.

HornsOfTheseus

You do realize that she recovered after dying in two different timelines and being sent back to the one where she was brained with a bat. Not sure why you think it was unrealistic that she recovered so quickly compared to the 3 timelines thing. Also a person swinging wildly with no skill isn’t super likely to get a direct hit so no her skull wouldn’t necessarily have shattered. In fact if her skull had shattered, she would just have died as it took like an hour to get to the nearest hospital.

Henrie Timmers

I agree with Peter Drake. Someone else recounting the outcome of events will allow the story to continue to flow. Please do not get lost in the minutia. Too much detail might make for a bigger book, but if it becomes tedious to read, you lose what is a great story.

Dale E. Kloss

Never got an email about this. Checked JUNK and TRASH folders- nothing in there. What's up ??? Need to have PATREON IT people investigate ??

TeamAONN.Com

The last chapter of this that you posted on SOL is what made me sub as a patreon... keep up the good work.

Peter Drake

I hope everyone is OK. Please keep safe. We'll get through this together. Big (virtual) hug.