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   The second of our Rebecca's Car themed batch, this is the inside of the vehicle, and the characters will be drawn in to fit the illustration. The Fighting his Past chapter entirely takes place here, and then there's also a scene from Show and Tell, Round Three that uses this location.

   The July budget's been a little strained by hiring new character artists to see if they're a good match for our project, so I'm going to put a messier/worn variant and a nighttime variant on hold for a bit. Rebecca's Car (Parked) is up next!

( Rebecca's Car | AnimeCon Harem Eroge | Rebecca's Car Parked )

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V01D

This is a good transition, and i actually think skipping this would end up being a bit jarring. Especially if they do sword fight.

Julien Fellegara

I don't understand why nobody try to explain to brian why he should calm down and let some place to steph. Good chapter anyway, but i think the plot is too slow paced, especialy with your slow release.

David Cohen

I think it good. These are 1st draft teasers that get consolidation at a later date into a 2nd draft chapter that will get refined. It is organic so it is expected to be a little slow at times while he feels out the direction / orchestraton needed and the various view points. If you go back you will see that areas that people thought were slow and scattered were cleaned up into excellent chapters with good pacing and good mix of view points. The teasers are the behind the scene view of a story in the making. Personallyot is what I like about it. Raw, unfiltered, and u get to see parts of the story that may be taken out later. It a lot like seeinga directors cut movie with the added scenes and the cut reel at the end.. Keep up the great work.

White Neko Knight

I personally don't think this one should have been skipped. Especially the parts where Rebecca asks if Chloe is alright and where she notices that Brian isn't as emotionally together/placid as she thought he was. They add just a bit more to Rebecca's character that we haven't seen yet, only mentioned. I am curious why Rebecca is so obsessed with making sure everyone (or friends at least) gets along, while Mara seems to be all for holding people accountable. Thank you for the teaser ^^.

Zeikfreid

I personally think that you should keep this bit. It adds more depth to Rebecca's character, and that is always welcome.

Damon Bynum

I’m a big tubby tabby fan and am hoping for more of her story.

Nick

I agree with Chris, this short chapter served as a transition. It works

Kirrocen

I absolutely vote to keep this segment. Doesn’t seem out of place or needless to me.

Nchalada

Skipping this would be a mistake, imo. Rebecca's viewpoint on what's happening to Steph and the Dreamscape is much better left in.

Eroyla Drago

This was good! It shows that Rebecca is needed to be the anchor in the relationship

Dang Fool

Sometimes you need to move on in the story and decide later if you should keep it. It's got great stuff.

Tyler Potter

Hey 4064 glad to hear that things worked out for you and I hope everything goes okay. I just wanna say that you’re doing amazing. I absolutely love it every time AH pops up on my feed. I love your writing style and love the characters you have created. Please keep doing amazing work

Joss

There might be some rework needed but I quite liked this piece! Definitely works as a teaser.

Chriton

I agree with the others posting here. I think this was an important transition and gives rebecca/mara more “screentime” which is almost neccessary. It also helps cement her as the calm bedrock for the group, and reels her into things when she was otherwise pulling away. It feels like rebecca really needs to feel needed and useful, at least subconsciously. So many layers to her character, and its going to be cool to see how she fits with everyone else.

Mkrayn

Great stuff. Links it together very well. And I always like it when Rebecca is uncomfortable: great drama.

MonsterGuy

Enjoyed this chapter a lot, thanks! Maybe it was explained previously and I missed it, but why isn't "Let's find a different hotel and call out of work Monday morning" not an option?

Kirby

Liked this one a lot. Only Emily's texts are a bit too much, she couldn't have written that much in such a short time, especially not while agitated and walking quickly through a convention to the parking lot. If yiu omit a few (only a few) messages and repeats it will have a better pacing and be more realistic.

Mundane

No one can explain things to Brian because Brian is not aware about any of the magic and breaking that to him right now would be extremely counterproductive. With his anger right now he would probably assume the worst and break away from everyone.

Mundane

I agree with the other brilliant comments here and definitely think this should be kept. I am not just saying that because of the adorable Emily texting either.

FortySixtyFour

There was a crosswalk they'd of had to wait at too.