year project (questions...) (Patreon)

Hello everyone, I hope you are well.

I have a much bigger project than what I normally do, which is to make a comic that tries to tell a good story unlike the fanservice comics that I usually make.

As such I have written the summary of the first intro chapter of this comic that I want to do. and I would like to know if you would be interested in helping me improve it.

In addition to giving criticism and indicating narrative errors, being able to complicate things with some character designs, names and other things.


A quick summary: "it's about a girl who discovers a magic school, where she wants to go when she grows up. As you grow up and participate for the first time in this faculty, you will realize that the wonderful place you wanted to go as a child is not as you imagined." history Nsfw with tf content references



If you are interested in knowing more about my project, I leave you the text with the first 8 parts of the intro chapter.

If you read it, I would like you to be honest with your opinions, in addition to giving me a grade between 1 to 10, of interest in the story.

Spanish version
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1LrNUTDerFsCjOs29G3TbJXcr10aQkPCmfY6u5rxrVf0/edit?usp=drivesdk

English Version
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1QJv8nZg0emgG3VoL3_VbxWQa8nVb363Trfi5KNnTPfo/edit?usp=drivesdk

(Keep in mind that it is written to be converted into a comic. and many of the names are not defined.)
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