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Crimson Rebirth Ch13 (Patreon)

Published:
2026-09-15 02:14:06
Edited:
2026-11-03 03:16:20
Imported:
2026-11
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Enjoy lads! I posted the chapter of "A sage in a Magical World" down below, and I will be uploading the "Phoenix Hero" tomorrow!

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Crimson Rebirth Ch13

Hey lads! Here's another wonderful chapter for you all. Please enjoy!! Start: Breaking into a sprint, the group headed toward the Emiya-Pendragon residence, hoping to find refuge as quickly as possible. Asia allowed Issei to drag her along, her eyes drifting down to their clasped hands wh...

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Between Calm and Storm

Honestly this last chapter seems really rushed and sloppy. Raynare and co were already low-diffed by everyone they faced. So why on earth would they be regarded as a threat by any of them? The biggest issue with dealing with them in the original series was getting authorization to take them out. Now Azazel has incentive to just take 20min and grab them and dump them back at home base. Nobody actually seems to be negotiating Issei or Asia joining Rias's peerage, which is a 10,000 years of servitude deal. Rias hasn't actually offered anything outside of the basic: you get to be a devil and have more power deal. In exchange I am your master and own you. Both Azazel and Riser are just casually walking through all security measures. Riser especially should not be able to just teleport himself into the ORC club house, it has wards and security designed to stop that specifically without authorization. You skipped past any consequences for Rias peerage lying to Artoria about what they were doing with Asia. Asia doesn't even have any reason for becoming a devil in the first place. Shirou and Artoria haven't even been offered anything by the 3 Factions in exchange for any sort of alliance. Everyone is acting really dumb and out of character, both Shirou and Artoria are getting walked all over. You should try and look over this chapter again. It is the worst one so far.

Demon_Knight939

this is certainly some very constructive criticism, which I appreciate, I'll reread the chapters since if you're right (which I definitely suspect you are), i'll need to rewrite a few sections, but thank you for bringing this to my attention😎 I'll need a few days though

Between Calm and Storm

Thanks, and no need to rush. The big things are: Artoria and Shirou just letting themselves get used. Sure they will help out and are heroic, but anyone can see that Azazel is there to spy on Shirou and Artoria, and they are not actually needed for dealing with this. No reaction to Rias's crew going behind their backs and lying to them, while trying to recruit someone under their protection/ make them a servant/ slave for 10k years. That should be dealt with before any time skips happen. Pulling something like that on people who are doing you a big favor is a slap in the face, and should result in a big argument. The ORC and Shirou's house were already stated to have bounded fields or wards in place, they should actually do something. Riser had a pre-approved vist in the original series, so he was authorized to open teleportation circles, but now he should not be able to enter without permission as the engagement is off and his visit was unscheduled. Asia's only became a devil in the original series, because she was dying, and didn't want to lose the first and only friend she made. She will need genuine reasons or a generous contract if she is to become a devil in this one.