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Here’s another short scene I’m adding into the printed version of Volume Two. This one comes fairly early on in the book. I realized I left it kind of obtuse that the smoke the wolves can smell comes from Oren’s forge. I wanted it to be a bit easier to connect the dots by showing Oren, you know, forging. Also, impurities in the metal will be something I come back to in the future/Volume Three, so it doesn’t hurt to mention it earlier.

When I lay out pages, I focus on double-page spreads with a print edition in mind. I like to have cliffhangers on the right hand side in an effort to keep people turning pages, and then spoilers/big plot moments/reveals usually land on the left. When I add pages like this, I need to do in an equal and opposite way so it doesn’t screw up every double page spread further down stream, as it were. So, sometime next month I’ll post the last additional page I added to Volume Two, which comes during Rask, Egg and Lichen’s field trip!

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Felidae

Love the added content and context! Can’t wait!

Microgrampup

I’m happy this page makes Cotton’s attitude towards Rask more understandable. I thought Cotton was acting the way he was because he simply didn’t like Rask and Egg “taking control” of his spot based off what you said in Deviantart “ Cotton doesn’t see the predators as part of “us” and rather a growing minority in a space he thought he had control of. (Lesson being: Don’t be like Cotton, control is an illusion and culture is fluid”. This sort of made me dislike cotton more than Hemlock, as I thought Hemlcok at least threatened Rask because she clearly cared about the safety of the prey animals too much to give living with their natural enemies a try, while Cotton acted the way he did simply because he felt like he had less power over a certain area of the Hollow.

Flann Moriath

Love this additional scene, it provides some great extra context, and I especially love Oren’s response that “Deciding the worst is inevitable only makes it harder to outrun.” It shows how Oren is arming those in the hollow not just with “teeth” but also with mindset and hope. I am really looking forward to learning more about Oren in the next volume, and seeing him get a bit messier as a character :) Keep up the amazing work as always <3

Larthan

I feel like "passed" should be "past" - but I do like the expanded dialogue making things clearer :)

Paper Wings

I adore how you do dappled lighting ❤️

Looweezah

They keep fearing what will happen when Rask runs out of options, but what would happen to them if they get threatened with starvation? No berries, grass, flowers (Yes I know they store), what would they do at their lowest point?

Luckyclaw

I think that's Cotton's flaw, and one most of the prey in the Hollow has-- narrowmindedness. Sprig laid out the fact that prey are capable of violence when supplies are low, and Oren's addressed the hollow by pointing out that their society has had to overcome interspecies rivalries before. A recurring message and theme of Oren's Forge is that "prey/gentle" and "predator/ferocious" aren't the dichotomy that the characters in the story believe they are.

Luckyclaw

So, imo, the answer to your question is apparent. When starvation is on the line, desperation could act on the prey just like it could act on Rask and Egg. Cotton's fear of predators is causing him to fixate on them, and not turn that question on himself.

JeffMakesGames

215-A makes me happy. Oren has trust in Rask not to eat anyone at this point.