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Fateful vacation Part 22 (Patreon)

Published:
2023-04-14 09:05:33
Imported:
2026-06
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Hey there! Here is the next part, it seems Ashley is finally becoming who she's meant to be😋 And if you guys see any mistakes you can freely point them out in comments, that's a lot of pages so I could miss something.

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Lebruh-

Whew!🥵

Virtua2nsanity

Mmmh, I don't understand why she gets the mantra wrong ? Also there are some mistakes in the bubbles, otherwise, great!

Bjorn

It could be so fun to add something with ashley and her ex-girlfriend to find out that she was looking for him but couldn't find him. That could be a shock for both of them. Then we could show that ashley can't fight her new nature even if she try, and we could discover that everything had been planned since the beginning by ashley's ennemy when she was still a man, to take ashley's girlfriend for him/her. Then this Guy could keep ashley as a fuck toy and make his/her ex-girlfriend pregnant. That could be fun 😁.

Virtua2nsanity
>>106334680

She thinks "I love being Tommy's gf....etc" but before that, the mantra is "my name is ashley...etc"

LilTKit
>>106334680

The mantra is not that short, you can notice that she's repeating pieces of it through a few pages

Virtua2nsanity
>>106334680

Yes yes I saw that no worries! Do you mean to say it is the same mantra she's repeating? She mentions a mantra twice, and it seems like the first one somehow gets turned into the second one.

Solaufein

Love this comic so far, and this chapter was great! Since you asked for mistakes to be pointed out, I put this together: https://www.diffchecker.com/uCtxEXWx/ Original text is in orange on the left, corrections in green on the right. Would you be interested in more of this type of feedback? I'd be willing to go back and do it for parts 1 through 21 if it would help.

LilTKit
>>106343411

Yep, thank you, it really helps a lot. There're so many of them, I guess my English is still far from decent level😅. Yes, if you can check all the parts I'd be only glad, the story is coming to an end so it's right time to fix all the mistakes

Solaufein
>>106343411

Ok, I'll start working on corrections for the previous parts. And don't be too hard on yourself. The dialogue is still easy to understand and you're much better at English than I would be at any second language. ;)

Aurélie Trave

what a chapter !!! i love your style, stories super happy to be supporting your work! !

Mike R Pen

Thank you for creating and posting. Love her look and love that she swallows.

Otl

Will there be more to this story or is this the end. Btw really love your art style.

jam

Genial!! 😍😍 eres increíble me encanta, sigue un poco mas😈😈😘

Annabel

Wow, what a night Ashley had! The art is splendid as always and I love seeing Ashley get completely lost in her mantra. Almost makes you think she really wanted this all along 😘