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Book 2 slight overview + book 1 thoughs? (Patreon)

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2026-05-29 14:33:30
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2026-08
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If you have any thoughts or feedback on book 1, please leave it in the comments; it would be very helpful for me.

This is just a post to basically say that now that book 1 is finally over (there will be no pause or anything between one and two), I wanted to say that there were some things I did not like about it and would work on book 2, being the side characters and the world building, which I will be focusing on from now on a lot more.

I have never gotten this far into a novel since I usually quit around the fifth chapter, so this feeling of finishing something is honestly quite new to me.

I will go into book two, and any books onwards, with the thought of surpassing myself, not necessarily through action and even despair and shit, but by exploring other sides of the story.

Thanks to everyone for reading and sticking to this story till now, despite the numerous hiatuses it went through. I know it wasn't easy since it has happened to me multiple times to quit a book that I really liked due to the slow updates.

Again, thank you. If you weren't here, I would have quit this like any other story I had done.

Comments

Isaac Martinez

🍿🥤 Nothing. All is flowing just right.

That Guy Kye

If you don’t mind I’m curious on what aspects of the side characters and world building you don’t feel lived up to your standard?

endy

I'm really glad to be along for this ride. This story feels really fresh and I've opened every update the second I saw it. Something that I noticed with Amy going through the nightmare is how she got progressively more dissociative and burnt out. The depression and slog of the arc (in terms of tone, not writing) was present and suffocating in a way that really worked for me. I hope Amy gets some time to, if not be happy, at least connect with the other characters in a way that helps her. Which is also one of the reasons you saying the side characters will be more important is exciting to me. Zayd came out of left field for me as a really interesting character, and I'm still a huge fan of Lain. I'd like to know a bit more about what they want, like, dislike, etc. Something that allows them to carve out a semblance of normalcy in the absolutely fucked world they're in. One note that, from your comment coming out of your first or second hiatus, I think you already agree with: the reader comment chapters are both really interesting as a narrative device and super dense. How do you plan on approaching those in the future? I think you could get away with fewer comments or hand-waving groups of them through narration if you wanted. Anyways, thats too much typing from me. I like this story a lot and I'm glad you stuck with it. Party on, see you next book!

M

Firstly, congratulations! Finishing is a huge accomplishment and its a pretty darn good book! I'm really looking forward to seeing where you take it next - hoping for a peaceful arc so we can really get into how the characters have adjusted to their trauma and newly dramatic relationships!

Erik Hansen

The early parts of the book were a long time ago, so I've lost specific details. Keeping this relatively concise. I might have v/strong opinions on the demons gift to Amy depending on what happens; I'm worried it will heal Libris full stop. If it helps accelerate healing, or gives limited manga viewing w/o doing an update push on Amy's powers I'm probably fine with it. If it is unrelated to Libris, perhaps something to help Amy vs the Goddess, I'll await with anticipation. I've enjoyed seer jousting. You write it well, especially since you always have the option for Amy to jostle the pinball machine. Though she can't cheese it to hard for fear of ending up on a metaphorical dissection table. I really like the manga chapters, feels like a believable forum thread. I think, if approached from the right angle, the lack of development for the supporting cast in book one can be spun as Amy being prejudiced against the world from her time as a a critic AND being stuck in furious survival mode. Her paying more attention in book two, especially to Lain and Iris who blindsided her by siding with her on the Abbadon question makes sense. I really loved the whole library arc. I thought the themes running through it were trust, doing/not-doing what's expected of you, what ends justify the means, etc. With the death of Crow's dad, Amy probably has lost the ability to pre-game the next arc as well as shoving a big wedge in the party of heros. Our girl is so villain coded, what with making dramatic vows she will keep at any cost. I can see the manga readers torn on whose philosophy is right. Crow has nobler behavior, but Amy is less willing to suffer injustices of inaction. Crow's dad, just dying out of nowhere, and due to a nearly tied vote of his circle of friends, is in theme with the grittyness of the source world, and I think will lead to some interesting moments in the future where Crow is interacting with Amy and Amy's own relationship with her source world parents.

dragonflew

Honestly just like what many others here said, I feel like the characters being less developed at the start were very in line with the theme of the story what with Amy knowing them simply as cliche characters from an equally cliche manga. After losing Libris, that was definitely an opportunity to connect more with them as Amy was mainly only conversing with Libris 24/7. And you used that opportunity well imo with the solo scenes with Lain, Crow, Lyra and Iris in the nightmare arc. I feel like more development with the side characters will definitely come naturally as the manga progresses, and perhaps Amy will have a more balanced relationship finally being connected to both actual people and a book lol. Crow feels the most one dimensional to me so far, as his personality really feels like just what he is: the edgy protagonist of a grim gritty manga. So maybe we could have more twists to his character? It does make sense right now that he's like that again due to the theme of the story, but with things evolving this way he'll have to finally feel like a real person to Amy and the readers even more. Also very curious about Lain and the implications of the gift to her, she seems very autistic coded as of right now. Overall though book 1 was really perfect for me! The pacing and how things developed made a lot of sense, so I have no doubt Book 2 will be great. I heavily relate to the feeling of never being able to finish a book; I myself am still in that era lol. You and this story have inspired me a lot in regards to writing so I'm definitely glad to be here for the ride although I came a little late, and I'm looking forward to book 2! Keep up the great work, Love$!

Stardog#202

one hot and one cold point: it's been a minute since i've read the earlier half of the story, but i got the feeling that libris could have used a tiny bit more development, maybe even by virtue of more time to understand them. kinda like how it's very fitting to have flat-seeming-to-amy protag group characters in the beginning who later demonstrate themselves to be quite real, foresight as amy's ability could seem like a lazy choice whereas it actually matches her personality quite well (pretending by following a script). talk about abilities which exaggerate one's character flaws; the others will probably have a hard time reaching amy when she can literally manipulate fate to avoid them, so i'm excitedly anticipating the results of that.

sleep4r

The beginnings of the book were a long time ago for me, now that book 1 is finished I'm just going to reread everything from scratch. Might be asking for too much but maybe some SoL filler so Amy could catch a break? After everything it'd be nice to see the aftermath from her actions affecting her relationships. Opinions must be divided af and when we get to see the readers POV explode it's going to be insane. Like Iris and Zayd (maybe Lain?) spending more time with her due to camaraderie from their shared experiences, Amy vs Crow factions subtly influencing the academy vibes, hell I wouldn't be surprised if Amy finds a way for her to get some of the cheats that has to be lying around somewhere. At the very least Amy has elevated herself to a deuteragonist while pushing the righteous (Crow) vs practical (Amy) agenda. Wish I could knock myself out enough to see book 2 done atp the wait is killing me

Cellinia

Congrats on completing book 1!!!! Can't wait to see how book two turns out. As it is now. I have no notes beyond what others have already pointed out. Ending book one with Amy breaking away from her dependance on Libris is a good spot I think, as that leads into book two being more about Amy connecting with the others and no longer forcing herself to deal with everything alone.

Velyne

I thought that the characters seeming 2 dimensional was intentional, since the story is told from Amy's perspective. She can't become more curious while life is on the line, but they should flesh out as Amy's grows and cares more about who they are. Your story is one of my absolute favorites.