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This is like day five of being back on the medicine I believe and I’m starting to feel significantly more like a human again and not a shambling pile of headaches and attention span issues. I’m not going to preemptively say I’m better before I see how things go but I’m feeling well enough to try and get some work done. Just thought I’d let you all know.

Don’t read this next part if yo haven’t read the outline/don’t want spoilers as I’m going to talk about my current thoughts on the next chapter.

I’ve been thinking on it and I believe I’m going to significantly tone down the incident from what was planned. I just think it’s too much melodrama if Mia is yelling at Zoe and Rebecca ends up crying, and I can get the same results without meandering in angst. Zoe will show more resistance and instead of yelling I think it will be better if Mia just gets dejected and dismisses her. Everything else would still be as planned and I’m not saying Mia won’t still stand up for herself, I just want to dial it back a lot from the big breakdown it was in the outline where it just totally ruins everyone’s day.

We’ll see how things go.

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Kusarscout

Personally I like the dismissal idea better. From what I've seen of the characters being dismissed would slam into Zoe's psyche a lot harder than being yelled at and it would look like Mia has gotten passed the "I'm Done." point where she feels like yelling. P. S. Didn't read the outline but this doesn't spoil much 😂

mhfap

The last few chapters just haven't vibed well with the trajectory that was planned lol. Vibes have been very cute and positive and I want to maintain that while still having drama, just lesser in scale.

Kusarscout

I can imagine Mia dismissing Zoe in a "I'm not mad I'm disappointed way" very easily. Would fit with her non confrontational (seeming) attitude with Zoe too 😂. Would also prevent adding a harshness and discordant vibe 🤣

rpgmaster1532

Very glad to hear you're feeling better. We're all here for you and we all appreciate you.

Spatula

I think the toning it down will actually help keep the pace that was set with the Zoe focused retroactive chapter. Like she clearly is trying to change and she feels bad. So a complete explosion would kinda ruin it and make it seem like Zoe really didn't have those thoughts of changing

Spatula

On top of Mia not really seeming like the type to absolutely explode, she seems more the "disappointed father" type. Like she doesn't explode just expresses extreme disappointment.

mhfap

Both comments are correct. Essentially I didn’t feel the previous plan made sense for either of them and would be out of character. We do know Mia explodes though, just only at the twins. She certainly wouldn’t if Zoe is showing clear signs of wanting to improve but is struggling with her addiction. Passive aggressive, yes, but not yelling.

mhfap

Thank you, it’s going quite well I’m happy to say.