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Beta Readers Needed: Ends, Means, Laws and an Angry Ship (Patreon)

Published:
2019-07-09 00:11:25
Imported:
2026-06

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Oy.  I can't look at this anymore.  I think I've found most of the errors, but I know the second I look away, the errors will multiply. They always do.

So, I need people who can help with pacing (is there an area that seems to fast or too slow), continuity (do I contradict myself), grammar (did I put commas in the right places and conjugate my verbs correctly), and wordsmithing (do I have awkward spots or my favorite, use the same damn word multiple times in a short passage).

If you can beta read, please either leave your email here or send me your email (the one you want me to add to the Google doc) at litgal1@gmail.com


I think I need to go drink.

Comments

JS

I can 💕💕💕 jk035989@gmail.com

Nanette kerrison

Lyn, do you want the ships' names italicised? That's what I'm used to.

Nanette kerrison

note page 6: putting all the kids on the turtle - a ship's name - might it be better to change that name as it confuses with the nickname for the rownt? How do you want us to point out issues like this?

Lyn Gala
>>24551108

Oh crap. I had to strip out the formatting because Google kept choking on such a large chunk of text. Shit. They are italicized on the original document, but if you want to hit cntr-I, that's fine as well.

Nanette kerrison

there's a character called Tyt? I thought it was a misprint of tyce at first, and corrected them, but now it looks like tyt is someone else? perhaps change his or her name to something phonetically different to minimise confusion? (it it is a different char)

Nanette kerrison

this paragraph p 116: When grief twisted Joahan’s features, Tyce’s stomach dropped. Wirki and his brother were co-leaders of Foxtrot unit, and they handled heavy fighting. They were the first ones to advance during open combat, and if other teams got in trouble, they would tear through heaven or hell to save shipmates. It wasn’t more than six or seven months earlier that a member of Foxtrot set off a bomb in the corridor of a supply ship they were raiding to stop the assault unit waiting to ambush the boarding team. I don't understand the last sentence in the paragraph - why it is there and what it is trying to communicate.

Nanette kerrison

So finished that pass. I corrected grammar and typos that I noticed. It was easier to follow what was going on than when I was getting it chapter by chapter. My critical facilities were not offended or bounced out of the story by the pacing, word choice etc. The only point I wanted to add is that I'm assuming that you know Ama means "mother", right? And there are a couple of living Hindu saints referred to as Ama. I was also a bit confused near the beginning by her full name - I wasn't sure if it was the same person. Hope this has helped.

meangreanbean

Hi! If I may, I would also like to try my hand at betaing! (Would be the first time for me, also, I would be happy to be able to orient myself on others). I 'm reachable at hellweiss@gmx,net

Liisa Vesik

I've never beta read or been part of an ARC campaign. English is not even my first language, so commas are definitely not my area. But if another reader might help, I'll do my best. After all, I joined the Patreon crew after reading from the foreword that the third book may not have happened if not for Patreon - what a distressing thought! I'm sure I had pale blotches on my cheeks. liisa.vesik@gmail.com

Lyn Gala
>>24570848

You are more than welcome. I'll add you to the list right now and Google doc should send you the invite

Lyn Gala
>>24602622

I am always grateful for another set of eyes. So often I have unclear sections or weird language, and it needs smoothing during editing. I must admit that with Loose Id closing, I really thought my writing career (and this universe) had come to an end. I'm thrilled that supportive readers have proved me wrong.

Lyn Gala
>>24555150

I got in late from work and my brain is a little fuzzy, but right now I can't tell either. I think I need to reread that. Several times. Thank you for pointing me in that direction.

Ingeborg Aune

Hi Lyn, I just got back from vacation - two weeks in Denmark with my mother, my brother, his wife, their two children, my sister, her daughter, husband AND his parents! I need a day or two to recover (I mean, FAMILY!!!), but then I’ll get to reading. Can’t wait to get stuck in!

Lyn Gala
>>24836864

That sounds like fun. I hope you had a good time, and you're welcome to jump in any time.