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Okay, I am editing/revising Chaos, but I thought I would run this by you guys and get some feedback:


Kilian Kildare is a soldier—a man who knows how to fight the witches and vampires who take the gift of magic and twist it into something dark. However tragedy after tragedy has stacked up, leaving him struggling to find his place in the Army that had become his home. Now he is a vampire, ostracized, grieving, and alone, so an offer to join an elite unit should have been the answer to prayers he no longer dares to say. However, the transfer comes with new dangers.

A demon is loose in the world, one not bound to its witch master because it slipped the leash and killed the summoner. So now the only barrier between the demon and a world unprepared for the pure veil magic that it can wield is the weak flesh of a man Kilian had once known. The demon hides within the host, seeking a way to either kill or corrupt Stephen before escaping into the world. Kilian has to guard a man he would rather save and when Stephen and the Army end up on opposite sides, Kilian has to decide which side to take, a task made more difficult by the fact he doesn’t know who is protecting the world and whose actions might expose everyone to destruction.

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SigrunC

I like it. Only thing I would suggest is to say a man he once knew rather than a man he had once known. And maybe break up the very long last sentence into more than one.

Tish Lopez

I like it as well! It's compelling. It draws me in as a reader and makes me want to read more.