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Getting somewhere!

I actively tried to speed up the pacing in this chapter. I think I've been slowing it down a lot, because I've been reading Stephen King a lot lately, and that dude's prose linger and drag on for aaaaaages. My writing pace still lingers, but I manage to get through some pretty huge story beats faster this chapter. Let me know how it reads.

I was also tempted to add a whole section here, exploring Jeremiah and Azamel in depth. That could have easily hit 30k words, over 2 chapters. While Jeremiah and Azamel may be characters my imagination wants to explore, I realized it was a nasty case of author bias. Authors love to explore their side characters, even when it's to the detriment of the reader. 

You'll see where, when you read the chapter.

Edit: I haven't missed doing a check for a bookmark note left in a chapter in months. I forget this time, and left one in! FUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUU--it's a minor note, thankfully, just a detail about the fire spreading in the area. I've updated these uploads to have it removed. Scary to leave one in though, cause they sometimes have spoilers! 

Comments

TeDureShi

MAYOR leap here. But not me sensing a fight between Jack and Daniel (if he's fast enough) and ultimately a three-way battle between Anni (if she's on time), Jack and Daniel. Interesting thought no?

AniNovu

I was tempted to try and squeeze in more resolutions in this chapter, but enough stuff happened already. I didn't want to rush this moment.

Memoryleak

Pace was exactly what it needed to be, got some(a lot of) satisfaction with the last bit right there to be picked up(resolved hopefully?) in the next chapter. As for exploring side characters it could be done as one off stories after the main MLV is done if that is something your interested in doing. Would be interesting to see more ofJen’s/Gloria’s/Maria’s/Gary’s background. Speaking of Maria, can’t remember if this was mentioned but how long was it between Lucas’ arrival to the city to the purge?

AniNovu

Thanks. Next chapter will definitely resolve a lot of things. And I kept things vague about when the other elders arrived in Dolareido. Ann, Tony, Daniel, Jacob, and Viktor showed up in Dolareido around 1800~, probably late 1700s. Lucas, Michael, and Maria showed up sometime after that, likely in the late 1800s.

AniNovu

I think my readers will kill me if I introduce another action scene in Part 7.

AniNovu

And the purge occurred during the mid/late1960s.

Memoryleak

Also, nice to know old Jack can communicate when new Jack is at the wheel. Been a few chapters since he took over and wasn’t sure if he could since he never spoke up.