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Weekly Feedback Post and Scheduling Update (Patreon)

Published:
2025-07-27 18:34:17
Imported:
2026-06

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Greetings:Most of you are new here, while some of you have been here for a while. To newcomers, welcome. I hope you're enjoying Deathless. I hope the same for older readers, but this update will go over the state of my older stories as well.

The first item is weekly feedback. It's just a place for you guys to leave comments about what you feel is working or could be improved upon in the writing.

Now, I've already noticed some issues I'm trying to fix. Some inconsistencies and errors in levels. Some awkward dictation jank (the initial drafts for these chapters are dictated, so when you run into something weird, that's not a prompted thing, that's the dictation being messed up and me missing it a bit). Also, the overall flow of the paragraphs. Basically, any kind of feedback you want.

Now, for TTF and Godclads, I'm sorry I haven't been posting as much there. I want to get a bit back on the ball for Godclads first due to how much stuff has been building up there. I will be trying to improve my writing proficiency, and will likely try to deliver on TUES THURS SAT AND SUN at the very least. TTF will remain as is for now.

Deathless will continue posting at its rate for the foreseeable future, but know that I am trying to improve all sections of the process. Anyway, this is just a brief update. Stay tuned for more words.

Comments

Lucien Jay

I assumed it was dictated based on some of the typos, which I can definitely comment on more proactively. But overall, especially considering the pace of releases, I have no complaints. The story remains incredibly engaging, and I am curious to see where how it continues!

LUXRUS

Deathless is chemically engineered to be a weapon against LitRPG enjoyers, and the posting schedule makes it addicting as hell. I think it would be a good idea to show what non-combat classes are capable of, i.e. a Legend in Physics or Philosophy would be very interesting.

James Faulkner

Your posting schedule for deathless is insane and I love it lol. All my other subscriptions are starting to look paltry in comparison 😂

Baged

You asked for feedback, and in my experience, criticism tends to be more helpful than getting your horn tooted. So despite the fact that I love your Deathless series, I’ll focus only on the negatives in this feedback. Much of it may sound petty, but I still think it’s worth mentioning—if nothing else, just to give you as much critique as possible now that the opportunity presents itself: It really feels like you don’t reread your chapters before posting them. There are a lot of “she”s that should be “he”s, and occasionally you mix up characters in dialogue scenes—Adam will sometimes become Can Hu, or just “Gate Hu.” In almost every chapter, you split a wor d or a sentence in the middle by breaking to a new line. Many of the side characters sound the same in the way they speak, with no “unique” speech patterns. As if they all (except for the orcs) had the same ethics/grammar teacher in school. You’re far too fond of the word “strife.” I get that it’s a core element of the System, but using it 4–6 times in a single dialogue scene can feel a bit excessive. Shiv is in the process of rediscovering himself and his place among others—I’m totally on board with that. But we often get deep psychological analyses of his thoughts, and I’ve found myself thinking: “Isn’t this the third time this personality trait of Shiv’s has been brought up and analyzed by the friend group in the last five chapters?” And just to end on a positive note: At this stage in your story, it’s already been clearly established that Shiv is a monster from others’ perspective. What you did with Gold-01 was top-tier fan service. It gave me chills to hear from another character’s POV just how badass the MC—who we readers are so deeply invested in—comes across. More of that, please.

xXMetrinSlerbaXx

For deathless, I have noticed much more grammar mistakes etc. in the patreon versions of chapters than on RR. It's still mostly fine, just a bit distracting at points.

Singular

I see collections for ttf and deathless, but not godclads, any particular reason? Hard to see what is godclads or navigate the series

Singular

Re: no unique speech patterns, I would add to that a little, the similar patterns of speechlessness “i….,but…” type responses or response types across characters is kind of repetitive and not unique after the first few iterations. Which is regardless of side characters or MCs

Scarhand

I'm assuming your other stories are on kindle? I'd kind of like to catch up on those. Do you have links?

Rayse

Considering you're writing so many novels, this is an incredible amount of output. No complaints, just impressed.

Brady

To be open and honest, your writing pleases me almost sexually. However, we must discuss an issue that I can see cropping up. Will Wight is guilty of cutting all of the “unnecessary content” out of his books by choice,” yet the number 1 complaint that I see is that his stories don’t have enough time to breathe. I understand Shiv is favored beyond favored, but I need to know that he is a man beyond the suffering. I love the action, but the chapter where he discovered philosophy is perhaps my favorite. Just be aware that your readers don’t need constant action. We love the world and characters you create. The action that you do write is fantastic though.

Ashen-Shugar

Exactly it's great change of pace

MrSnap

FYI. Tentacles don't have bones. They are purely muscle. I noticed that you described bones in the tentacles of two creatures: the Jealousy and the Court Leviathan. Unless these creatures have peculiar quirks that require them to have bones in their tentacles. If so, then the tentacle becomes a tail or a hyper-articulated arm.

DagNabItAll

Chapter naming is sort of confusing. Ideally the chapters of each of your series would be easier to separate at a glance.