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My Upcoming Short Film!!! (draft) (Patreon)

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2023-02-18 21:22:53
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2026-06
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I'm very proud to share this with you. My third directorial endeavor is about two knights — the last remnants of a once-promising crusade into the underworld. They deal with survivor's guilt in their own ways... while the end of their journey looms ever closer.

You'll notice that all of the VFX are absent. The mix is mostly terrible & even some lines and sounds are missing.

This is set to come out April 9th. I have until then to drastically improve my Adobe After Effects skills.

Until then, feel free to tear it apart! I know you're paying me here, but any and all feedback is appreciated. 

Files

Previews only

The Void King (unfinished)

Comments

Local187

Okokok, thank you for this. To me, the Void King is a cycle, like you said. The idea is sort of that, in order to truly play ball with evil, you have to sacrifice your humanity. Which means you become the very thing you've sworn to destroy. That whole thing. Very pessimistic, I know. Elia is essentially lost in the sauce — we're led to believe that he's morally the lowest of his peers. He would never take a loss to save another, yet that's exactly what his brother does to save him. Perhaps he's the last one because he's been sucking up all of the kindness and mercy. Its good to know that its a bit vague — I can still write and record new lines for the Void King, i'm contemplating that. Also, I think the King offering Elia a way out is sort of a rhetorical gesture. He says "your eyes betray you crusader," which basically means, "I know you won't take my offer." That was the idea behind the black flower. I was trying to make it symbolize innocence. And its crushed to foreshadow the outcome of the fight. But it lays on the table, which is sort of the Void King mockingly offering Elia his innocence back. Also, despite what I usually preach, this film takes on more symbolic dimensions. Which is not to say its exempt from making sense, but that I do take some liberties, blurring the line between character and idea.

Deborah

Hey, this idea is well executed. High concept and in just a few short minutes. And, of course, you’re free to ignore anything I say. You’ve got good shots and great performances. You’re right about the sound mixing, but I’m sure that’s fixed by now. I’m not a fan of recapping the backstory to the audience in monologue, because I feel that’s so often poorly done in today’s cinema. But that’s just a personal preference, and in a short film and on a budget, you have to get exposition in and out. And it works. The act of Elia becoming the void king is a fantastic ending, but it did feel a little jarring. However, with more editing and vfx, I’m sure it’ll become natural. Yes, it’s a decision he made without all the necessary information, but it seemed really sudden. I wasn’t sure until after the ending, which may have been what you were going for all along. Also, high five fellow D&D nerd! I would recommend adding your films to imdb--you'll need a pro subscription, but you can sign up for the free month and cancel before you're charged. I look forward to the final cut!