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And... what if Chrysalis had won Chapter 2

A week had passed in the eternal darkness of the hive, an abyss without sun or moon where time was measured only by the incessant rhythm of bodies colliding against a fat, plush, purple ass. Twilight Sparkle lay exhausted in the center of the main cave, surrounded by a horde of now-adult changeli...

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Mike_

Your writing is getting better! But you're still mixing up "he and she" sometimes. In english it almost always refers to the subject, like Twilight or Chrysalis, not the actions taking place, as may happen in latin languages

Mike_

Oh and objects are referred to as "it" not he or she