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Stripper With a System (29-32) (Patreon)

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2026-08-13 00:24:23
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2026-08-13 05:37:28
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Alright! Slightly later in the day than usual, due to some minor power outages slowing me down a little, but the latest Stripper With a System release is here! It clocks in just shy of 11,000 words, and is taking the Author's Choice slot for this month, which means another update will be coming for it on the 28th as well.

Just in quick review, last month saw a poll for the next summon, with 'Susan Storm' running away with a massive edge over all other options (47% versus the next highest of only 18%). That honestly surprised me a little, as she's long been a slightly divisive character for Marvel fans. Still, apparently she isn't so for people on this Patreon, so expect to see her featuring heavily in this release ;-). Including in a solo lemon, since I looked back and realized it's actually been a fair few chapters since I added one...

There will be another poll going up tomorrow, a rather quick one, for the first addition to the pairing of the story. Frankly, I'm expecting the answer to be a rather firm 'yes' to adding Kara, but I'll run the poll anyway just in case. You lot did surprise me with some of the reactions to the Why Was There no Truck?! poll, after all.

For now, enjoy the new content for Stripper With a System! As always, the new stuff is attached here, and only here for now. I update the master files only after the final release of the month for any given story, so as not to complicate my own already complicated Master Files :-). Author's Notes will follow in the follow in the comments when I have a few minutes to right them!

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Novus's Fanfiction Works

This comment is for author's notes! Beware spoilers! And if you want to comment on one of them, please do so in a separate comment NOT nested here, in order to keep these orderly!

Novus's Fanfiction Works

Chapter 29: A/N 1: Tela Vasir is a bit of an interesting enigma. What little we know of her says she was honestly probably closer to a model Spectre than Shepard, if we're being honest. I've decided to flesh her out with a few bits and pieces, which will hopefully turn her into an enjoyable secondary or tertiary character... A/N 2: For the most part, though, this chapter exists to show the wheels in motion on the Broker side of things, showing how much having an information network can change things. It also lets us see a bit more of Lucy and Bruce, who don't interact with Rylia as much. Also yes, Bruce is still extra levels of paranoid and a workaholic.

Novus's Fanfiction Works

Chapter 30: A/N 1: A bit of a different situation with a Summons! I wanted to toy with seeing it from their side of things just a bit, though I'm not sure how well that turned out. It did, at least, serve to start pulling the thread of how different this particular Susan Storm is... A/N 2: ...Which I obviously then follow up on. I'm genuinely unsure why a lot of commenters in the poll got stuck on the idea that this Susan wouldn't have the experience required, when I made it explicit she was a heavily AU version. I guess maybe people thought when I stated her powers became unstable that such happened immediately? She still doesn't have quite the same level of experience Picard would have in leading larger teams, but she'd genuinely been around the block a few times and has a pretty close to perfect skillset. Including giving them a bit of early political expertise from someone familiar with multi-species diplomacy.

Novus's Fanfiction Works

Chapter 31: A/N 1: Soooooo...reading all the information we have on the Batarians and their culture? It actually made me hate them EVEN MORE than I already did just from playing the games. Seriously, even most Orcs look less fucked up than these guys. That, however, also made them a good place for Rylia to start poking political points with her Streaming. No one likes them, so it wasn't a aggressive target...but her bluntly using Shadow Broker information (which she will cheerfully tell the investigators that she 'bought from the Shadow Broker' when they inevitably ask) is going to salt a few open wounds. A/N 2: So, almost certainly SOMEONE is going to ask why Rylia is okay with the idea of starting a war when resources are going to be needed for the Reapers. The answer is actually pretty obvious, though. The Reaper issue is still over a decade out and starting a semi-major war NOW would force the currently peacetime-and-stagnant R&D complexes of the various races into gear early. She's not going to truly push for it, but she's not going to cry if, suddenly, everyone is at least partially on a war footing and spending money on military upgrades and development. Doubly so since it would let her naturally slip into military contracts that would be useful later, as an up-and-coming company with a lot to offer. A/N 3: Back to Susan! Despite her observation in her lemon section (or right before it) I have no idea, at this point, if I'm going to set her up with Rylia. It's honestly just as likely that she gets together with Bruce, or even one of the other older Asari.

Novus's Fanfiction Works

Chapter 32: A/N 1: A wild Liara has appeared! We don't actually (so far as I could find) have a specific date for her graduation from Serrice University. However, it's implied by her defensiveness about her age that she's likely fairly fresh into the field when she's encountered. As she's running a solo dig and doing it effectively, though, it's also implied she's probably not RIGHT out of the university in ME:1. Thus, I decided to stick her in her 'final few years,' which means very close to graduation for an Asari. This let me both bring her in early, and matches up with the timeline fairly well. As it would have meant she was possibly a decade or so into fieldwork by the time of ME:1. Considerable experience for normal people, but still too much of a newbie for other Asari to take her and her theories seriously.

Ototsu_Yume

Fantastic chapters, I enjoyed the news segment quite a lot, I'm rather curious how the various agencies will react to it, especially given the amount of classified or outright unknown information she dropped on them, the Salarians are definitely going to be all over her like a bad rash trying to locate her sources. Thanks a lot for writing, great work as usual. :)

Novus's Fanfiction Works

If you check the author's notes, I pointed out how she's going to answer the question when someone inevitably pointedly asks her about her sources. She's just doing to shrug...and say she bought the information from the Shadow Broker. Which is not only ironically mostly true, but completely within her visible means. She can even excuse some of her black project budget under paying for the information :-p.

Alex Wierzbicki

is the Cyberpsycho Maelstrom dude who’d liked doing fucking puppet shows for street kids a thing in game?

twilightwanderer

Thanks for the update. It was nice to have a check in with the Hagalaz crew at the start. Rylia going political will certainly have some interesting impacts. I'm glad to see Tela will be getting some development, and it's also great to see Liara; I'm still hoping we'll also get some early Wrex, maybe even Thane as well.

twilightwanderer

For typos, Hagalaz is consistently misspelled as Haglaz, and there're ~5 cases of "archeo-" instead of "archaeo-" in various words. Also, Susan refers to her "admittedly quite plus living arrangements" and I'm not sure if that's a typo, or just slang I'm not familiar with.

Novus's Fanfiction Works

Hmmm, probably not Thane, since I think he's currently playing super-secret assassin for the Hanar. Wrex is a good reminder for me though, he should probably already be working for the Broker, so making use of him would be good. Guiding him in certain directions could be useful... Typos. Uggggghhhh, I've just discovered that archeo and archaeo are both correct(ish) because of American English versus everyone else. It's STILL mostly archaeo for American English, though, with the other being an uncommon but technically useable simplification. Which...means the word process didn't flag it -_-. There were enough instances of it that I corrected them and reuploaded immediately, rather than waiting for the Master File update like I usually do. So thanks for pointing it out. As for Susan's comment, it was supposed to be 'plush' and it somehow lost a letter without be noticing. Fixed that too.

Novus's Fanfiction Works

Not as far as I know, no :-p. It just sounded like something weird enough to happen in Cyberpunk. He was actually inspired by a scene from Tangled, with the big bandit that collects ceramic unicorns ;-).

twilightwanderer

As far as Susan goes, while I like this take on the character and I'm interested to see her develop, her introduction does feel rather abrupt, in a couple ways. Narratively, every prior Marketplace recruitment has been prefaced by an on-page discussion of the choice/choices, so going from the very short tease of a discussion at the end of the last post to Susan suddenly dropping in is a change in procedure. Meta-narratively, as this is fanfiction, we the audience have certain understandings and expectations around pre-existing characters being used. While all the Marketplace recruits vary to some degree or another from their most common canons, getting to see their selection from Rylia's perspective, with her similar expectations to the reader (or even with shared universe recruits in the case of Kara with Bruce), has allowed for some recalibration in the readers. Lacking the discussion ahead of time then removes that recalibration assistance. Additionally, from just a technical standpoint, putting the data dump where it is and how it is just feels kind of clunky, and like it acted counter to the goal of getting to see from Sue's perspective right off the bat. It's not particularly clear what's Rylia's thoughts versus what just third-person narration recapping the discussion they're presumably having, and either way it means that Sue as a character ends up out of focus in her own introduction. It's not poorly written, but it could definitely have been executed better.

twilightwanderer

One more thing with Sue, on the topic of pairings, if you want to pair her with Bruce or a matron, it might be worth adding several years to her age, or at least clarifying the timeline. You said she got her powers at 23, worked with SWORD on-planet for a few years, then in space for another year and a half, which as I read it would put her around 28-29 at the high end (probably more like 27 actually), much closer in age and maturity to Rylia, Momo, Kara, or even Liara (relatively speaking) than she is to Bruce (in his 70s mentally) or a Matron with centuries of life experience (and even relatively speaking probably averaging in their forties). I feel like unless you want to lean into the extreme age gap, she probably either needs to be aged up at least a decade, or have those pairing options dropped. Just to toss out a few idea seeds for closer in age, I'm pretty sure Anderson's in his early 30s at this point; if Nihlus is already a Spectre, he's probably at least in his mid-20s; Liara could even be an option in a few years once she's established herself on a bit more even footing with Sue (and there's no more power dynamic); heck for maximum lulz, Hannah Shepard's probably in her mid-late 30s at this point. Again, if you're okay leaning into a significant age-gap relationship, that could be interesting, I just wanted to point out that that's where it currently sits.

twilightwanderer

That's the idea with Wrex, and good point on Thane, I always forget he started out specifically working for the Hanar and went independent later (I also didn't realize until after I posted that he's still in his early 20s at this point). Also, one more typo I forgot to point out, "Abigall" instead of "Abigail."

twilightwanderer

Finally, since you mentioned administrators, I'll toss out a few ideas. I feel like Pepper may be the obvious, but she's more C-level executive rather than project manager (at least MCU Pep is), and Momo's already covering that role with Bruce as backstop and mentor. Sticking with Marvel, though, I think a version of Dr Octavius (Otto or Olivia, dealer's choice) who never went criminal and stayed in academia or industry could make for an excellent project manager/department head, able to handle the administration while still contributing scientifically. On the more strictly administrative side, albeit still experienced with aliens and high tech, you have Walter Harriman from Stargate. I don't know how much Worm fanfic you've read, but I've seen a couple stories where Taylor has particular administrative skill, and there's several ways she could be taken to fit that role. Finally, for a really off the wall option, if you're willing to consider a real person, I've got to pitch Simon "Si" Ramo, co-founder of TRW and father of Systems Engineering

SpiritFoxAlf

How expensive would getting quantum entanglement tech for teleportation be because that would easily solve their personal long distance issues.

Johnny Smithers

I had the thought that some Star Wars characters would make good summons. A Jedi would be a great diplomat summon. A semi-precognitive super empath already experienced managing a far more complicated galactic diplomacy scene. Mass Effect’s dozen-ish races is a lot less than the hundreds to thousands in Star Wars. Obi-Wan Kenobi, the Negotiator, would be a good pick. Can also go with pretty much any Jedi Master, really. Might be a little tricky to get the alien ones an in-setting background, though. A version of Padme could also work. Ryla could help her discover that sci-fi sex toys and lesbianism is much better than angsty obsessive husbands who accidentally murder you.

Lictor Magnus

Thanks for the chapter! All the talk of archeology made me wonder if they can acquire the land on Eden prime where Javiks bunker is. Eden Prine shouldn’t be that developed yet since it’s only 16 years old at this point.

Johnny Smithers

Star Wars would also be a good fit for a military summon. Interstellar war is literally in the name, lol. One of the less evil versions of Count Dooku might be a good fit. He can have an aristocratic sense of personal honor, combined with a ruthless pragmatism, depending on the interpretation. Maybe a true believer in the Separatist cause who joined the Situ because he saw it as the best path to correct the massive flaws in the Republic. Thrawn might also be an option. He’s more amoral and ruthless than really evil. On the good guys side some Jedi Generals could fit, maybe Rahm Kota. Could also do a Leia who got involved with the military side of the rebellion rather than the political, to have a sexy option

SpiritFoxAlf

Qui-Gon Jin would be my pick from Star Wars.

Aeden Emrys

Thanks for another great bit of chapters 😁! It's great to see Susan joining and things are moving forward, with several interesting irons in the fire! I look forward to reading much more of this greatly interesting story of yours and I can't wait for the next updates!

Novus's Fanfiction Works

The problem with that is that Rylia doesn't actually know where the land in question is. She knows it's SOMEWHERE in the vicinity of the main colony, but they found the ruins there while extending a monorail out into a new area away from the city. Meaning it could be anywhere within a dozen kilometers (or more), with no indication of direction. She'll eventually start prodding the most likely areas, trying to figure it out, but for the moment she's letting sleeping tigers lie. Finding it early without being VERY quiet about it somehow has a strong chance of triggering Nazara to go active a lot faster, and the last thing she wants is to cut into the time the galaxy had to prepare.

Novus's Fanfiction Works

Okay, so just a reminder (no, I'm not blaming you for forgetting, I haven't brought it up a lot. Just once in-universe and a few times in comments), but the single largest limit I placed on the Omniversal Marketplace is 'No Magic.' The Force qualifies, meaning that any Jedi/Sith brought over would be stripped of their powers. Which would render most of them crippled and very unhappy, since their entire life and religion revolves around it. Most of your reasoning for them falls apart because of that. OTHER characters from Star Wars, who aren't Force-sensitive, may eventually make an appearance in the Political or Military roles. Bail Organa, Garm Bel Iblis, if they are still being subtle. Riyo Chuchi, Hera Syndulla or Ackbar if they stop caring about blending in. Are just some off the off possibilities that might appear in polls for either role.

Novus's Fanfiction Works

EXTREMELY. There's nothing like it in the ME techbase, and almost any techbase that does have it is generally on the far end of 'seriously advanced.'

Novus's Fanfiction Works

Wow that's...a lot. Let's see if I can address most of it. Susan's Entrance: Yeah, there's a reason I said I wasn't sure how happy with it I was. It was an experiment, and the results were a little less than I'd hoped for. If I were to do it again, I'd probably so a side-story of sorts that showed Susan's perspective on the station, meeting with the Omniversal Market rep and getting a better insight into her situation. Then have her step through the gate and switch back to the main story. Unfortunately, major rewrites aren't exactly something I have space in the writing schedule for. Possibly sometime I can fix it as an extra. Sue and Pairings: Actually, nope. Susan is canonically into significantly older men. She was in her early twenties when she married a mid-forties Reed Richards. You got her age about right in your estimate, but if I went with her canon interests instead of an AU version, that would mean she'd cheerfully be into someone in the 40s or 50s equivalent. Which is roughly where Bruce's physical age is now, or where even an older Matron would be for an Asari. Hmmm, most of those administrator ideas are...more scientist than true admins or managers. Pepper actually probably comes the closest, as she wasn't really SUPPOSED to be a C-Suite person, originally being Tony's assistant that he kept forcing to stand in for him when HE was supposed to be doing the C-Suite stuff. She eventually became decent at it from a sink-or-swim sort of way. Better options from Marvel would likely be...let's see...various versions of Nick Fury, MCU Black Widow (post-snap when she was acting as a world-wide crisis manager), Magneto, Charles Xavier, or Emma Frost. All three of whom managed their own factions. That's just from Marvel, though. I've been trying to branch out a bit from just Marvel and DC with options a bit, even if it hasn't work out very well so far :-p. Lucy I added on top of the actual winner, so Momo is the only non-Marvel/DC character who has won her poll so far...

SpiritFoxAlf

Have you looked into Fallout's technology I know they have some really good Teleportation tech. Another fic I read is using it for the Entangled Proton style teleportation.

twilightwanderer

Regarding Sue's intro, I was just trying to give some feedback and outside perspective. If that's not helpful, just let me know. For pairings, I know there's a canonical age gap between Sue and Reed, but all I had to go off here was some level of intimacy with the (presumably) younger Kitty Pryde. Bruce also doesn't seem like he'd be interested in someone 40+ years younger than him (deaged or not, he's still got 70+ years of life experience (I almost added emotional development, but it's Bruce, if anything his slow emotional growth might actually be a point in their favor, lol)). Personally, significant age-gap relationships (especially younger woman-older man) are something I think need to be handled carefully for me to buy into them, but as always it's your story. Regarding administrators, I misunderstood the intent. I assumed from the context that the desire was more for a project manager/principal investigator/department head type who sees to the logistics of research and development while retaining enough technical knowledge to understand the needs and guide the processes. If you're looking for more general administrators (and avoiding the big two comics and your other primary settings), the first person who comes to my mind is Elizabeth Weir, initial leader of the Atlantis Expedition, from Stargate. Ben Sisko (DS9) and Susan Ivanova (Babylon 5) also come to mind, although I don't know either of their source materials even as well as I do Stargate. Nezu fro My Hero could be another strong option, especially if you lean into a bit of the fanon characterization. Jack Ryan or Jim Greer from the Clancy novels might make good choices if you want someone more intelligence focused (although Jack was president for a bit, so he's got a decently broad base). Maybe someone like Leo McGarry or Josh Lyman from The West Wing, if you want a more political focus (I'm leaning more to the staff side than the politician/diplomat side here, since that will presumably be its own position to fill). A bit more off the wall, but Dr Cuddy from House is a solid administrator (if mostly focused on medical and academic systems), and as a bonus is used to riding herd on oddballs and mavericks.

BobyCola

just out putting it out there feel free to use or not, seem to fit with the story: you need biotic batteries, that biotics can use to use to augment, enhance, and prolong their biotic abilities for work, play and combat (use with mechs to make mech size effects). may even help powers grow for those with weak levels. Biotics energy is eezo energy converted by the biotic's body to a "raw" biotic energy that is safe to reside in the body, then refined by their body (or Amp implants) into a "refined" usable biotic energy for abilities. the build up to orgasm cuases the body to generate more of the "raw" biotic energy, with the actual orgasm releasing the "raw" biotic energy buildup. this released energy could be captured by the sex toys into a "raw" biotic capacitor/battery. When enough energy is collected the "raw" biotic capacitor/battery can be sold to a "Erotic Delights" refineries to be condensed, combined with others "raw" biotic capacitor/batteries energies and the refined to biotic batteries of different sizes. from plucky Maiden level to Matron and top Matriarch levels, to mech sized or even ship sizes of batteries. Later could release/develop in field recharging direct from "raw" to biotic battery. this would turn those not of combat oriented being still war resource critical, with all those Asari..

Novus's Fanfiction Works

Hmmm, I don't think that's actually how Biotics works. There's never any shown instance in the games or other media where Biotic power 'runs out.' It appears to always be either a throughput issue (how much you and your amp can put out in any given moment) or a physical stamina issue (as using biotics strains the body).

BobyCola

could just be different thought processes. the "raw" is the fact you are a biotic with the energy inside you (doesn't have to be finite) and part of the strain on the body. the "refined" is that throughput. so the battery would be an additional channel of throughput bypassing the body strain of that additional power. could have sworn saw something with untrained or young biotics having random/accident releases before training and emotional out bursts. sense all Asari are biotics and trained early, it would be easy to over look these early lapses in training. then with orgasm its just the thing that happens(training helps control/reduce it) especially when its really good one So if the masters of biotics say those outbursts are just training issues then no one thinks "these female orgasmic releases, maybe we can capture them for something at scale"

Sadalfa

Liking the way the story is going very much! Just a quick question: Why build a secret industrial base on Hagalaz? It’s still connected to the Mass Effect network. Wouldn’t it make more sense to build it somewhere off the network, so that only they could currently access or find it? As far as I understand it, nobody but them currently has an FTL drive capable of reaching and exploring planets outside the network. Just wondering if there’s a specific reason for choosing Hagalaz that I’m missing. Or is it "just" the already working mines? Looking forward to what Susan will get up to / find, once they are on mission.

Novus's Fanfiction Works

Two reasons: 1) It's an already surveyed world that happens to have a LOT of the metals needed for shipbuilding and such. There being some old mines to hide within is just a bonus, with the majority of this reason being that its a largely untapped, technically habitable (if unpleasant) world they can use for their needs. 2) Because it's already on the Relay Network. They aren't intending to advertise their ability to use FTL outside the Network until much closer to the Reaper arrival, if they do so at all. Doing so would not only cause a lot more panic than they'd like (as it would invalidate all current defense plans) and, more importantly, clue the Reapers themselves in that someone might be poking old places. Unless it means a major boost to chances of winning, they don't want to clue the Reapers in that they should be looking at all those spots off the network where the Plan B sites are hidden. As a result, MOST of their ships for the Terminus Plan are doing to be Relay using ships, with no alternate FTL, as they wouldn't be able to hide it if every ship had it.

The Foreign Traveler

FINALLY done and done for August! Edit 1: …see “if” for… …see “it” for… Edit 2: “I” was quite… “It” was quite… Edit 3: …evacuated “too”… …evacuated “to”…