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I did a bunch of small adjustments to the art. The one that's actually noticable is Robin's outfit at the end scene.

I also changed a few dialogue bubbles, mostly wording, but some of them I actually changed what they were saying. Like in page 12 Eileen used to describe Wade as "a bit of an asshole" because I originally was gonna make him do some mean stuff to Robin, but I changed my mind.

I also did some changes to how the conversation flows on page 8. If I'm honest I still don't like it, I don't think the jokes land very well and I was considering removing it since it doesn't actually add anything to the plot, it's just meant to show their friendship dynamics. But some patrons commented that they did like it so i don't know.

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K

You can futz around more with the text but I think whatever you choose, I like that it shows that they are a bit goofy when not being sexy :)

DeprivedArt

Yeah I like the general idea of the page, I just don't know if it feels particularly natural or funny. And I've already spent a lot of time editing it and I'm kind of annoyed at this page lol

K

Maybe come back to it in like a year’s time, see what you think then

K

That being said, I enjoy the other small changes to the text you’ve made :)

K

Sorry for all the comments, I just don’t want you to feel you are posting into an empty void… :)

DeprivedArt

The issue is it should be the final version by now because I have to post it outside of patreon. I've delayed it 2 months already I think :_)

DeprivedArt

That's nice of you but don't worry, I assume people are not commenting on this because they've already left comments on each batch of pages for this comic