At Least YOU Like It [WIP, colors + detail] (Patreon)

Sergal is 99.5% complete! This one took a lot shorter than most fully-detailed works do!

So why is it still a WIP? Because there's still a couple things here and there I'm not certain of. Not many with the base picture, but the text version is kinda... awkward, I think. Here's the thing: the story came before the picture, and I wanted to provide it WITH the actual pictures because I felt like it provided so much context to the scene and the character involved, this sergal with a really fat glans. I underestimated how much text there would be, though, and baking it into the picture in a way that wasn't too jarring was a challenge that I don't think I really succeeded at. I already trimmed a bunch out, but I feel like what's left is very necessary-- even the very short lines that are just pressing for or confirming information because they imply it's a subject he's not eager to discuss. Essentially, I'm not very willing to cut out any more text because I feel like removing any more would diminish the impact of the conversation.

Unfortunately, there's still just a LOT of text, it's small, it's hard to mesh with the background, so I don't think there's ANY way it won't look awkward. But I also don't want it to be something that a viewer has to look to a description to read, because I feel like it's important to his character.

So I want to ask you guys: do you like the story? Do you think it develops him and the scene enough that it warrants such a version of the pic that includes conversation? Does the text just make the pic ugly? Do you think it'd be better if I moved the text off to like, panels OUTSIDE the pic, or would that be even weirder-looking and leave too much negative space above his legs? (And yes, I know the story is kinda sad, but it's supposed to be! The whole point of it is to make the viewer want to hug him and teach him to love himself!)

I really am seriously interested in hearing what you think before I move it to early access!