Gex's Good Side [Potential alternate version, WIP sketch] (Patreon)

So, I doodled an alternate version of him hard for preferential and dirty reasons. I know there really isn't a downside to having multiple versions, but I want to know if what I have here... "works," I guess to say. Because it's supposed to be curving toward the viewer, that one finger is supposed to be pulling the skin down, and I'm not sure I'm accomplishing that look with what I have here.

Be honest! Does it work?