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on full display page 17 - 23 sketches (Patreon)

Published:
2022-06-17 22:30:33
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2026-06
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it's been a busy week! I finaly took the time to finish writing the ending to this story X) and I thumbnailed to page 27. and these are the 7 sketched pages I completed!

I look foreward to finishing these >:3 I think next week is just going to be 2 of these pages. and then the week after that is the €5 exclusive.

you can find all the sketched pages over here: Drive Link 

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Garbage

ah, this is so good!

Richard Adam

Oh boy, it’s getting really good! I just new the new post would be today. Can’t wait to see these finished

Diego P

Hope Martin gets to touch a boob by the end of this XD

Brocade

Oooh, this is getting so good!

Xfiles

It's looking really great and cute! Looking forward to seeing the finished pages! I did notice 2 little things about the texts in the pages. Page 17 panel 4, the way "agreeing" is written makes it confusing to read because it reads like "a greeing" Page 20 row 3, "eachother" should actually be 2 separate words so "each other". I make that mistake all the time ^__^ Keep up the great job you are doing!

Kyle Price

The second sentence in the first panel "for the" is repeated twice. Loving the comic so far as always with your work!

RedFlames

Oh boy, this is getting racy, isn't it! Looking forward to those finished pages as well c: Aaand to add some bits of proof-reading on top of what people have already brought up: page 17: - top/middle: the "right tobias?" could probably use a comma before or even on both sides of "right"? And for me I find it hard to follow this dialogue, why's she spoecifically addressing tobias? Plus his response doesn't seem to fit either... maybe I'm missing something - end of page: "Oh my, Adam!" (comma) & "its" -> "it's" page 18: - "we loaned the fancy camera" should maybe be "borrowed" or "rented" depending on if it was for money or not? It seems loan isn't super common as a verb and would usually also be used for "loan _to_ someone" instead of "_from_ someone" but idk! - "even had a friend over, huh!" could probably use the comma :3c - "quallity" -> "quality" - "youknow" ...I know you do like doing this on things like "thankyou" because of how spoken dialogue flows(?), but looks odd to me, maybe make it "y'know"? page 20: - "catagory" -> "category" page 21: - "s-shes" -> "s-she's" - "just not from Sophie!" is probably fine but could also be "just not Sophie's!" in this context page 23: - "voila" is not wrong at all but could be "voilà" if you're feeling extra fancy :p

Funkybun
>>86107581

thankyou!! I will update this all when I get to it. I gotta remember to change voilà when drawing the page because the font I made does not have that character XD