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The first few moments of the battle were an explosion of blazing light and firing Skills. Galan’s personal Lance was the best of the Order of the Long Sleep, and even with Ectar down they weren’t a force to be taken lightly, not even by a [Paladin].

Lothar punched a fist of golden light that separated into a hundred beams of energy to fly at them from all directions, but an [Untiring Protecting Knight] caught them all with the same Skill that Rhun had, assuming all the damage onto his invincible tower shield the size of a door. Three of the light beams struck Brin, and he didn’t feel a thing. 

A [Knight of Arms] returned the volley, throwing several dozen swords, spears, and axes at the [Paladin], some real and some pure constructs of mana. Lothar swung his sword into the ground, and the shockwave knocked them out of the air. The same shockwave would’ve ended Brin, but Rhun jumped in front of him just in time and weathered the effects. His own exhausted Lance couldn’t hope to help against someone of Lothar’s power, but they wouldn’t be a liability. Well, maybe Cid could still fight.

His [Untiring Knight Captain] charged towards Lothar along with three of Galan’s men. Now that he was looking for it, he saw the same perfect form and the same trails of white from some of Galan’s [Knights]. They’d also mastered the blade, as Cid had. 

Lothar met them all. He didn’t use any visible Skill to block and parry their [Knight’s Charge], but countered them with raw steel and a strength beyond imagination.

Then Galan’s [Knight Lancer] charged. The lance itself was clearly a masterwork of magical technology and the [Knight] himself was built like Hedrek. Lothar threw up his giant golden shield. The [Knight Lancer] charged straight into it.

The shield broke. Jagged pieces of holy force broke off, falling to pieces and then erupting in flame.

For the first time that Brin had ever seen, Lothar dodged.

“Lothar! What is the meaning of this!” Galan roared. “Why have you turned against us? Hold fast, please! It’s not too late to–”

“Why have you turned against me?” Lothar yelled in response.

He leapt, and then in midair seemed surprised when the force of gravity began to take hold of him again. He rejected it, kicked off the air and reversed his course. He moved straight towards Brin.

Rhun held his shield to block, Cowl ran forward to help meet the blow, and Aeron pulled Brin out of the way with such force that he felt some bones break.

Lothar’s sword fell. Rhun held fast, supported by Cowl and no doubt the other [Protecting Knight]. Lothar brought his arm up again for another blow, and Rhun separated his hands to show that his tower shield had been split in half.

Galan’s [Knights] moved in, and managed to harass and distract Lothar long enough for the [Knight Lancer] to get in place for another charge. Again, Lothar dodged it, though this time he jumped back, glided far into the air and landed lightly on a jutting beam of wreckage. He looked perfectly at ease, though that really shouldn’t have supported his weight.

“You’ve betrayed me. You’ve betrayed the gods and the light. Traitors.” Lothar called on his power, and a giant golden sword formed in the air above them. That was a dragon-killing Skill. This entire area would be devastated.

Looking around, he noticed that Sir Ectar was still alive and stable. When stabbing him through the chest, Lothar had hit a lung rather than the heart. He’d given himself away; if he really thought they were traitors he would’ve gone for the kill. He was already beginning to doubt.

Brin didn’t think that Arnarra had really meant for Lothar to turn on the allies after the battle. No doubt she’d given that order as a negotiating tactic, and meant to revise it to something more plausible afterwards. Maybe if the Lance hadn’t shown up, that’s what would’ve happened. Brin would’ve gone invisible and retreated, and Lothar would still be confident in his captivity. No doubt Brin would spend the next several years or decades going over which outcome served the greater good and whether Anwir’s sacrifice was worth it.

It wasn’t time for that now. Now, Arnarra was dead and Lothar was left with nonsensical orders. He was already seeing the cracks. Brin just had to stick his grubby fingers inside and pull them even wider.

“You’re the traitor!” Brin shouted. Absent his illusion magic, his voice came out quieter than he would’ve liked, but Lothar still heard it.

The giant sword above them lost some of its luster. Some of the holy energy around the edges became corrupted and turned to flame.

The [Knights] scattered. Lyssa pulled Sir Ectar onto her shoulders and jumped away. Brin tried to run as well, but he moved too quickly and his ankle snapped with the sudden force. It was Govannon who noticed first and carried him away.

Only Galan didn’t flee. When the sword fell down, Galan rose to meet it. He swung his mace from the side, as if to break the giant magical weapon. There was a flash of light and a crack that overwhelmed the ear protection in Brin’s helmet and left his ears ringing. When he blinked the sunspots out of his vision, he saw Galan on the ground, unmoving.

Dead, if he were any other man, Galan groaned and rolled to his feet. He felt around for a weapon, and finding nothing, caught one out of the air, thrown to him by his [Knight of Arms].

Lothar turned to Galan, an odd mixture of feeling in his eyes. Relief that his friend wasn’t dead, and sorrow, because now he would have to kill him again. He leapt into battle, and Galan fought with his men to keep  him at bay.

“Listen! Listen to me, Lothar! Use the [Light of Truth] and tell that I’m not lying. You’ve been a traitor from the beginning. You’re Arcaenean, by birth. You were tortured, twisted, and formed into the perfect spy,” shouted Brin.

Lothar pretended not to hear, but his power responded. What once were pure spears of light were now blistering missiles of flame. Where before the world itself seemed to support and protect it, now he lashed out against it as viciously as the men around him.

“You have to listen. You–”

“Lies,” Lothar said confidently. He punched another golden fist, and again it separated into many beams of power, but this time the beams belched and smoked in the air. Also, this time every single beam was aimed at Brin.

The [Protecting Knight] came from behind and wrapped Brin in a hug, the tower shield in front of them. Brin felt the hot wind as the power crashed into him, but nothing else. When the [Protecting Knight] stepped back again, there was a pained tremble in his steps.

“Not lies. Use [Light of Truth]! You know–”

“I know that you believe it,” said Lothar. “You’re mistaken. The gods put the truth in your very name, so that I could not be misled.”

The [Knight Lancer] charged again. This one wasn’t [Inexhaustible] and every [Knight’s Charge] cost him its price in stamina. This time, he was just a tad too slow. Lothar parried the enormous lance with his forearm. Then, when the [Lancer] got to him, he punched the great weapon out of his hands, and then grabbed him around the helm and pulled him down into his knee. Once, twice, three times, Lothar drove his knee into the man’s face, until others from the Lance attacked from all directions at once.

Lothar fought them off again with supreme Skill, but the temperature was rising. The armor on Lothar’s arm where he’d blocked the lance was now burning freely, and all of the Skills he unleashed were now more flame than not.

Lothar’s power was dimming, moving from pure and holy to mundane fire, but he was also losing his restraint. This fight had started out as a disaster and soon it would be beyond recovery.

The worst part was that Brin knew he could be doing better. He was dancing around the edges, not willing to say the full truth. Because how could he? He’d basically be saying these things to Aberthol, and that kid didn’t deserve any of it. He didn’t deserve to live with the memory of what had been done to him. He deserved to be the [Paladin], running around acting like a big dumb hero.

He closed his eyes, not willing to watch the reaction of the man he was ruining. “You’re not a [Paladin]. You’re nothing. You’re a victim. You were pushed to the edge and then past it. She hurt you until you gave up. You suffered, and it was too much. You surrendered, you failed, you lost, you–”

“Lies!” Lothar cried, but there was little boldness remaining in his voice, and a lot more hurt. Brin still couldn’t watch, but he could feel the heat rising. It was like sticking his head in the oven, only then and again there was a big burst of heat like a firecracker going off near his face. He smelled burning hair.

“And then she used you even after that. Throughout all the good you thought you were doing, all the while you were being used. You were guided by your enemy. Your [Witch]. Your mother. You’re a [Broken Doll], Lothar.”

Since Brin had his eyes closed, he didn’t see what happened. He only knew that Lothar shouted. Then there was a wave of force that knocked him off his feet. He hit something, and then something else.

Both arms were broken. His ribs, his ankle, and who knew what else. There was nothing wrong with his magic, though, so he called upon the glass in his armor. He tightened it, to hold himself in place, and then used the armor to climb to his feet.

Lothar stood in the center of a ring of [Knights]. Fewer than there used to be. The [Knight Lancer’s] helmet was broken open and his lips had been torn away so he grinned a skeleton’s grin. Another [Knight] nursed a badly broken arm, twisted and bent backward, with a bone visible through the armor. Sir Ectar was still prone, and another [Knight] had joined him with a stomach wound. All of them were alive, and with a good [Physician], they might all make a full recovery. Of Brin’s own Lance, none but him had wounds they hadn’t arrived with. Galan was a better leader than him.

Lothar himself stood defiant. His armor had greatly dimmed, his helmet was gone, and his long golden hair had been burned short. His sword was broken, but he gripped it with both hands. Even as Brin watched, his body seemed to lose its strength, and he sagged, nearly going down to one knee before forcing himself up again.

“So it’s true,” Galan said sadly.

“I-I’m sorry,” said Lothar.

He drove his sword up to his throat. Galan used [Knight’s Charge] for the first time this battle. He arrived in time, and stopped the sword with a closed fist around the sword.

Brin had been wondering if evolving [Inexhaustible] into [Inextinguishable] had removed his ability to use [Knight’s Charge] over and over without tiring. He still didn’t know. Galan didn’t show an ounce of tiredness, but he also might’ve just been that tough.

“I see it now, Galan. I remember who I was. Who I am. My name…” He laughed, but it was really a sob. “My real name is Lionel. I’m just as he says.”

“You are my friend. Whatever your name,” said Galan.

“Still? After all this?”

Galan glanced at his [Knight] without lips, who said, “Ih ahhi ah ih.”

It was a horrible display. Saliva mixed with blood and dribbled down his chin, but he endured it with aplomb. High Vitality might be as much a curse as it was a blessing.

Lyssa stepped forward. “It’s not for the guilty to decide if they can be forgiven. That’s for the injured parties to decide.”

“Is it truly?” Galan asked.

“It is,” Lyssa nodded. She looked at Lothar through the sides of her eyes as if he were interrupting a private moment. “I care not about this wretch’s fate. If any among you deem it necessary for this man to die as recompense for your injuries, then step forward and slay him at once. Otherwise, we will find another path.”

No one stepped forward to take Lyssa’s offer. Even Ectar raised a weak hand to shoo the question off.

Lothar shook his head. “We can’t take that chance. They might still be able to catch me again. They can turn me again. I won’t go back to being a slave.”

“We’ll find another path,” said Galan.

“You don’t understand. You don’t understand her power,” said Lothar.

“Arnarra is dead,” said Brin.

“I’m talking about Arcaena. I met her, after a manner of speaking, many times. You do not fear her enough. None of you do,” said Lothar.

“I think I do,” said Brin. “But you have all the best minds in three nations on your side. We’ll find a way to keep her out of your mind.”

“I think…I think I’d rather die,” said Lothar, voice growing weak. There was a childlike quality to it now, as if little Lionel were finally speaking up.

Galan gazed at Lothar for a long moment, then slowly, he unwrapped his fingers from around the jagged edges of Lothar’s broken sword.

“I won’t force this choice upon you. But I hope… No, let me say instead that I believe in you. Even now, at your lowest moment, or rather, because it is your lowest moment, I still believe in you.” Galan took a step back.

The entire group held their breath while Lothar made his choice.

Lothar huffed out a despairing laugh. “And if this isn’t my lowest moment, what then? I have so much lower to sink. Will you still stand by me when I no longer have a Class that bends all my thoughts to the good?”

“Always,” said Galan.

Brin saw what was happening; he needed to stop it. He wasn’t sure what would happen to Lothar’s Class now that Arnarra was dead, whether he would stay a [Paladin] or revert to [Broken Doll], or something in between. But he was nearly certain that Arcaena’s control over him was over. They could have the best of both worlds. He said, “You can keep your Class! All we have to do–”

“No. If you keep a [Witch’s] gift then you are always in her power. I can do this instead. I, too, swore an Oath of Last Resort, you see. Two words, repeated three times, that I thought I would never say. I surrender. I surrender. I surrender.”

Lothar fell to the ground, unconscious, like a puppet with its strings cut. That metaphor became more apt the more Brin thought about it.

You have won your second war. You have been instrumental in your faction’s success. Two achievements have been upgraded.

Warbound (Legendary)

Range penalties for casting light, sound, and glass magic are reduced. In battle, you can cast near any allies as easily as from yourself.

Knightly (Epic)

+20% to all attributes while fighting without subterfuge -> +15% to all attributes while in combat.

[Call Light through Glass] leveled up!

[Shape Glass] leveled up!

The bonus to [Warbound] was either only marginally useful, or a complete game-changer. He’d need to figure out the System’s definitions for “allies” and “In battle” before he could say for sure.

As for [Knightly], it only served as a reminder that he’d been getting a big bonus to his stats ever since they’d thrown down that Eveladis. Now that combat was over, he felt himself grow suddenly weaker, something he hadn’t even believed was possible.

[Battle Fury] had picked up to its maximum during the fighting as well, which meant that after thirty minutes passed, he would be utterly wrecked.

Brin lay on the ground, willing [Scarred, But Healing] to work as quickly as it could before the timer ran out.

Galan’s Lance didn’t seem overly eager to get moving, despite how they had wounded to tend to. The battle was still raging all around them; no one had told the undead horde around them that the war was over. None of the undead approached them, however. They must’ve seen how their fellows were swept away in golden fire the moment Lothar approached, and now the rest were seeking easier meat.

About two minutes before his [Battle Fury] timer ran out, the Eveladis finally wore off, and Brin summoned Invisible Eyes to scout the surroundings again. It was difficult to concentrate with all the pain in his body, but it was even more difficult to do nothing but dwell on it.

The three armies had engaged the undead in full now, and they were systematically marching through the city and destroying every trace of resistance. Galan had made the right call to wait; it wouldn’t be easy to get through that.

He found Davi, almost by accident. He was in the center of a small group of a hundred soldiers, singing them on to victory and glory. His face was stained with soot and streaked with sweat, but his voice didn’t tremble. 

While the armies marched in orderly lines and established areas of control, a few risk takers and [Scouts] had gone ahead. Zilly was with those.

Just as his eye found her, a level 37 Vulkovek burst from hiding and pounced on her, but she got away with a [Dodge] and a [Dash] and a hearty laugh. The undead worked together with the wolfman to run her down, and she led them on a merry chase down the wrecked city streets. She turned a corner, and three men pounced on the Vulkovek, chopping it to pieces. Three [Scouts], and Gerin among them. His half-brother really had kept his promise to look out for her.

Brin swept his eyes onwards, scouring the city, and soon they found the place that he was really looking for. Near the base of Arcaena’s citadel, there was the crater where they’d found the tunnel, and the little pass where Hedrek had made his last stand.

There were bodies on the ground, but none of them wore armor of Meaty’s make. Brin swept his eyes onward. He strained his consciousness to summon more. Until…

No…

“What was that, Brin?” asked Cid.

Brin tried to speak, but [Battle Fury] had run out. He couldn’t breathe.

“Oh, damnit! He’s suffocating in his own armor! Help me get this off him!”

Brin loosened his grip on the magical glass in his armor, but his attention was on the scene in his Invisible Eyes.

No, no, no, no… they’d left him behind and…

“Breathe, Brin! Breathe tell me what’s wrong! Did you see something? What did you see?”

“H…” Brin started, but it was too much effort. He had to get this out, but he couldn’t even breathe. His ribs were pushing into his lungs.

No, no, no… way. No freaking way. How in the actual hell, Hedrek?

Brin took a deep breath, ignoring the piercing pain, and then pushed it out, as loud as he could.

“Hedrek’s alive! He’s still fighting! Galan, you have to help him!”

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Hedrek POV chapter up next.

Translator's Note: In the Theranorian dialect in which Lothar speaks, "I surrender" is one word. From this a reader may deduce that Lothar did indeed follow the tradition of choosing an Oath of Last Resort that involves uttering a single word three times. His dialogue was adjusted to reflect the necessities of the English language.

Comments

Crow Says Caw

Extra chapter let’s goooooo! If anyone can save H it’s Galan. Knights to the rescue 🏇 TFTC!

Fusion

Peak

Hypnotical

Awesome chapter, thanks!

Alan

My boy Hedrek is still alive!?

Hypnotical

Fighting alone, behind enemy lines, for HOURS! We are witnessing the birth of a legend!

Tadas

Must have picked up [Inexhaustible] or similar. He didn't have exceptional stamina before.

worg

Thanks for the chappy =) nice to see. But he didnt gain a level ??

Tadas

I wonder what is the knight trying to say "Galan glanced at his [Knight] without lips, who said, “Ih ahhi ah ih.”"

Sam

Thanks for the chapter. I think this was probably the best end for Lothar. Still feel bad for guy even if he is an ass. I am glad Hedrek is still alive. Think this sets up a tower arc quiet nicely as I am assuming Brin will be unable to be a knight because of the curse

Jerkface

So what’s coming after the war arc? Magical academy arc? Brin needs a vacation, a therapist, and a hug.

Sam

Hugs might break his bones

I Is Patron

Brin used Talk-no-jutsu. Its super effective!!

Jerkface

Pretty sure it’s “Still, after all this.” But I absolutely read it as “it is what it is” which is much funnier to me.

Gabor Elem

We know curses can be broken, or turned into a boon. I'm pretty sure the latter is what is gonna be the goal for this one, but that will take a lot of effort, and would be ideal at the tower.

Gabor Elem

I think levels are more about personal combat. While his contribution here was important, it wasn't really a battle, as there was no defeat message.

Steven

Lothar lost his class and levels. So Brin helped defeat a classless dude, no xp.

Steven

Hedreck is alive, hell yeah.

Strawhat Steve

Brin forgetting he can talk with magic: Brin took a deep breath, ignoring the piercing pain, and then pushed it out, as loud as he could. “Hedrek’s alive! He’s still fighting! Galan, you have to help him!”

Sam

Yeah sure. That is what I am expecting, just imagine he need to put being a knight on hold while he recovers

Strawhat Steve

He forfeited his class and levels so he's no longer a threat as a combatant, but he's still alive.

Strawhat Steve

An odd mirror with the [Paladin] from the past, defeated by being turned against his friends.

Eric M

No, he is back to level one, and the system would assign him an appropriate class. Hopefully he gets something kinda peaceful like farmer or farrier.

Nyroe

I don't understand. I thought the goal of the War was to defeat Arcaena herself. And while we now know that is a title passed down between witches, isn't she still out there? How can the war be over if the leader of the other nation is still alive/ hasn't surrendered, her armies are still fighting, and the city still isn't completely captured?

wanderer117

Break the curse won't take effort, just time. Scared but Healing also breaks down curses

wanderer117

Brin didn't fight Lothar in melee so he didn't get his usual 100% boost

Andrew

Thank you!

Grish99

The leader is running away the generals are dead the army WILL loose and the capital will be captured by the end of a day. The war is won and brin wont be participating anymore so some god probably just gave a go ahead with the tittles.

Steven

Yeah, Brin is probably in shock because Battlefury wore off and he has like 3 vitality left but it's still jarring that he wouldn't use sound magic here. He used light magic to see before while blind, and the evelandys explicitly wore off already.

CentaureHeart

It was a war against a nation and the capital is lost. Doesn't mean there can't be more wars though.

Adunn

I kinda hope theres a decently large timeskip now. Brin needs to age up a bit lol.

worg

You seem to forget all that is class is delusionnist. He just made someone broke for his illusions now. He's also just delusionned cid to be a master swordman. And I dont say anytthing about the fake army for the curse. If it did not give any class XP, I don't know what will give him any. You don't need to battle all the time to get XP !

Ran

It would be interesting if he gets Paladin on his own merits... but he earned a more peaceful class.

wanderer117

Does he? Can you unpack what you're hoping for from a time skip? More romance/adult vs the slight romance/teen we've had so far. Something else? More diving into glass tech?

wanderer117

Maybe the witch nation in the wastelands is New Arcaena. I doubt it because what witch would give up the grudge/power from losing a defensive war but it's a possibility.

wanderer117

Would it be more or less bad ass if Brin calls out that Hendrik is alive, then asks someone for help since he can't breath in his armor.

wanderer117

Once you give up a class (by breaking an oath) you can never get that class again. Like how Scared One is no longer available for Brin.

wanderer117

There has been heavy foreshadowing that Brin is headed to magic school (although given the ages of students it's more like magic university). I would be amused / it would be appropriate if one of his class slots is just therapy.

wanderer117

I like "It is what it is" better too.

Justin Young

Brin really needs to hurry up and get that Recovery general skill.

Adunn

Little bit of everything. How old is he now? Like 16?

Ferrin

TYFTC! I've been enjoying this arc immensely. Also, while I'm as excited as everyone that Hedrek is still up and swinging, I'd like to call attention to the bit about halfway through when Brin was about to fall and be exposed, and the first person to notice and rush to help him wasn't Cid or Cowl or Rhun, but Govannon. He's come a long way since his introduction.

Ferrin

Still 15, I think. Although it's not entirely clear how long it's been since his last birthday, so he could be closer to 16. Having a chapter or so dedicated to a timeskip montage would be nice though, I think. At least once we're past the major aftermath of this arc. Giving Brin some time to reconnect with people that've been good to him, heal in body and mind, figure out a plan for the curse, and spend time on non-war related things for a while would be good before we go straight into whatever's next. Plus, if memory serves, most people in the Tower are around 18 or older anyways - a year and a half or so to bring him up to ~17 before we go there wouldn't be completely amiss, assuming that's the next goal.

Justin Young

Do you think way that Warbound advanced has something to do with maintaining the Conduit spell for so long and with so many "Allies" channeling through it?

Nouseva Valo

My ques is that [Arcaena the coalition of wills] needs the [corpse of paladin] inside the fortress have anchor to living world in form of [broke doll] holding [Paladin] class for said corpse. to Leach energy off it to empower curse holding themselves active and alive. Now that Lothar or Lionel has given away he's class. new paladin cantient need to step inside and made a "open wound over the world"

BubblyGhost

Hidden achievement in there I bet, forfeiting a buncha classes. Not at all applicable to the story but I still bet I'm right

BubblyGhost

Everyday we get closer to turning Brin into a big computer. Solar powered with a reduction on sound/light/glass casting at range? Mhm, forget all these legendary classes, bro is gonna be used as fantasy Internet

Patron1kj6tz

Legendary Class [Living Server Farm]

Chien Do

Lothar: you are mistaken Brin: touche, my dude, touche. The joke in his name is too good. So on point with his Class. Also, is author a language lover like Tolkien, who make the language first, then build a whole world, then a story around said language?

Cyrus

Uuuh, ending seemed a bit out there. Shouldn't it be more of a croak or rasp then a full on articulated sentence?

thomas johnson

Won't that push him to become a doll? recovery + past trauma= doll?

Justin Young

I don't think you can have the broken doll class if you've recovered from your trauma. Plus, he had mentioned trying to merge it with his scared but healing title. I don't think it would affect his class in that way. Doubly so, as he isn't Aberthol, it's not actually his (Brin's) trauma.

David

I've been looking forward to brin learning magic at the academy for so long now. He's a knight through and through and now it's time for mage time. Brin the archmage?

BBjace

Well that's just like, your opinion, man! I've dropped my fair share of stories before, but never felt the need to comment like this. How has the story been ruined for you? How would youhave corrected it?

Leo Yankovic

We say what always should be said to these kinds of comments: Bye!

Swinter

Well, bbjace, since you are asking the question: I would have done one of two things: 1: I would have had Brin sit on the sidelines of this "end game" conflict entirely. Including his Lance. They are Hilariously out of place. They're under-leveled and under-experienced. That any of them survived at all is simply due to plot armor a mile thick. There's no logical reason Brin would have been the only one to go with Lothar. Even if it's just the "seemingly" only one. It breaks immersion completely because, while Brin is now very powerful compared to a commoner, it's like bringing a gun to a fight with thermo nuclear warheads. It's even worse that Brin *somehow* achieves anything other than being in the way of the real fighters. They're up against Arcenas elites, while Brin is just... Mediocre. He could *barely* force one of Arcenas lieutenants to flee right before the Aberthol chapter, by using every trick in his book to fool him, and now you're telling me he can go toe to toe with an army of her elites including multiple witches? Bullshit. His entire lance has a years worth of experience, going up against multi-decades of it. It stretches credulity to the breaking point the way things are. If they got to sit things out, yeah it'd suck, but Brin could still have watched it and got to See how outmatched he'd have been. And we'd have a clear sign of how far he still has to go. His levels are in the 40's. What's the point of having levels around 60-80 if they clearly don't matter? His next three dozen shiny new levels aren't going to be meaningful. 2: Frikkin foreshadow *why* the setup is so stupid. Show us, as readers, why every single army leader is so insane as to send a level 40 young adult into a fight that by all means should kill him. And when taking this approach, make it actually tense. Make Brin actively *almost die constantly*. Stakes. Make it tense. Not... Oh yeah, Brin's breezing through everything and acting like he owns the place. He should be pissing his pants with nerves that a stray blow could take his head off if any of the overpowered monsters attacking him decides to pay full attention to him. And to copy in what I said a couple of chapters ago: I love a good payoff. But I'm not feeling it here. The entire story is from Brin's point of view and the fact that we as readers have had no real opportunity to intuit even half of these events are... Disappointing. The whole 'trying hard not to think about it' also honestly feels wrong. It's like the whole 'try not to think about a pink elephant' challenge, just to inevitably force someone to think about one. Thoughts aren't controlled that way. Maybe if it had been set up properly. It could have been a running mystery as scenes start with Brin putting memories in glass, and forcing himself to forget them. We as readers don't know Why he did it, nor What he put in them. But it would have given a Very convenient excuse for how he could now have everything triggering. It would fit Extremely well with the skillset that's been on display, and would have been a superb mystery. Plus you'd get some epic flashbacks here as he re-absorb the memories from the glass, and we get to see all those little moments we've missed where this entire thing is put together. Without that, this is all coming without setup and feels sloppy in execution. TL;DR: I want some logic and consequences in my wish fulfillment power fantasies. Not bullshit deus ex machinas.

Strawhat Steve

In one of the earlier chapters on RoyalRoad he said in an author's note that he came up with a few words and maybe language conventions then freestyled from there.

Tyrone

Don't mind me. I'm just sitting here refreshing Patreon waiting for the next chapter.

Bub

im ok with brins age right now but i would be up for a timeskip. for me (and likely Adunn too) it always comes down to two things; a) 25 years worth of plot, training arcs, learning and stuff happening in 3 weeks, and b) a 2 year old reincarnate talking to and interacting with 40+ year old veterans as an equal. This story doesnt have either of that in spades and so honestly im not too bothered with brins age right now, we've had a small but good portion of mini-timeskips recently in book 4 and a little in 5 so while its pretty crazy that all this has happened in i believe 2-3 years, its not a pressing matter for me because we've had a decent stream of couple week long or 1-2 month timeskips. the other issue is again not too much of an issue here. Brins 15 as of now which im happy with, 14 felt weird but 15 feels a lot better if not entirely complete. character interactions are still written as if brin is maybe 17 or 18 ish, but i can explain that away in my head with "oh some people know his true age and also the cultures different here". in a lot of stories these things are ultimately dealbreakers for me or significantly impact my enjoyment of the story, but for this one i feel as if the impact is ultimately unimportant and not really felt all that much. sorry to type out this huge text wall lmao