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Break for Feedback (Patreon)

Published:
2023-11-05 18:11:01
Edited:
2023-11-11 17:10:18
Imported:
2026-06

Content

I'm sorry to do this, but I guess I went overboard with those four chapters yesterday. I know missing a day is bad, but I figured that moving forward with not fully baked chapters is worse. The normal schedule should resume tomorrow and we will get into monster fusion stuff I've been waiting a long time to include.

But since we're here, I want to take today to give some general info and solicit feedback.

Chapters 1 through Chapter 113 are what I've imagined as the first real arc of the story and the first book. The next ~100 chapters will be the second, and I intend to continue in that format if the readers are here for it. Book 1 establishes the world, Kai's powers, the heights of the setting, and the true stakes of the monster incursions.

Book 2 will take Kai and Zae Zin Nim into new territory and have a different sort of arc. Kai will move from grasping his power to mastering the deeper rules. Won't spoil much more than that. During this arc, there won't be much opportunity to return to Goralia, but it will return later in the series. Obviously we'll eventually get back to the Frontier once Kai has the power to learn more.

Everybody reading along so far, what are you looking forward to in this story? The core cast will always be moving forward into new lands, but would you prefer we see more of the previous supporting cast? There won't be much reason to return to Monskon City in the near future, but the supporting characters could easily play a greater role in the story via travel or a new home city. This is a point where your opinions could influence the series substantially, so speak up.

In any case, the plan is to keep focusing on daily chapters while I can keep it up. Thanks for your support.

Comments

jj_4567

All good man, don't rush yourself, having such frequent chapters is always great but it's the quality of your writing that keeps me coming back.

Baconwargod

Youre good man take all the time you need. Im still impressed you churn out daily content of this quality. And my two cents is I liked the supporting cast up till now but Kai was right I think hes out grown that place and those people. Inafay may keep up some what but its pretty clear kai and zin are geniuses so I dont know. I like your world so I am just excited to see more of it. And also to see the ship sail with Kai and Zin but that will come I know.

Desertopa

I trust the quality of your writing, and I'm pretty confident that I'll enjoy whatever you come up with, but the thing I think I'm most looking forward to is the introduction of new cast members and dynamics. So far, the core cast who seem likely to stick around as regular fixtures is pretty small, but I'm assuming that as they travel around the setting more, Kai and Zae Zin Nim are likely to meet other characters who're likely to become significant features in the story. I don't know if it fits your vision, but one thing that I would personally find interesting, which has already been explored a bit so far, but might also fade away as the cast moves on to new locales, is the development of significant lasting characters who're not any flavor of cultivator or combatant. I feel like cultivation stories in general (for all my limited experience with them) tend to build this sort of impression that in the grand scheme of things, only powerful cultivators really matter, and the rest of the population are just chumps who exist either to be tossed around or reward the real important people with their adulation. It seems like Zae Zin Nim has absorbed something of this attitude through her upbringing, and I think it'd be interesting to see more developed characters, not just people who never had the privilege of opportunity to become cultivators, but intelligent people for whom it doesn't make sense as a lifesyle, and see how the protagonists might interact with them.

Traellium

You wrote those chapters in real time? I thought you had a secret backlog or something. I'm more interested in the progression and magic aspect of the story. From what you said the first book was about gaining a foundation and learning his skills. The next one focuses on improving, combining and consolidating gains. Which I like see. My feedback would be to just include more chapters that delve more into the main cast consolidating their gains and insights. Zin Nim and Kai helping each other theory-craft on how each of their powers worked, and testing them out was really satisfying to read. I like when they breakthrough or gain new insights in the middle of combat but I would also like to see progression outside out it. Gaining strength and versitility through creative applications of their powers (like Kai gaining a sort of psudo-flight by combining some of his beast abilities etc) rather than just dumping more raw power into it would also be welcome, though I feel like you are already planning and heading that direction. Overall just want variety in how the progression is parsed. Also will there be dao's or edicts in this? and is the plan on synergizing it with his beast abilities?

Diarmadhi

yeah, i’ll echo some other things i saw here, but i think focusing more on the mechanics of the magic system and going for a slower pace might be useful. i also really love Raz, so i hope we see more of him!

AnythingAtAll

ZZN has to be a mainstay in the foreseeable future. She's not only a fun character, but she plays off so well with Kai's personality. I don't know what your plans are for Juray, but if there's a character I'd love to see get more of a spotlight on, it's her. I realize it may be impractical though, considering Kai and ZZN's journey is only going to become more dangerous. But if it's in the cards, I'd really like for her to play a bigger role.