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Business Week: Story Intro Poll (Patreon)

Published:
2024-02-10 18:00:06
Edited:
2024-02-10 18:48:48
Imported:
2026-06

Poll

Business Week: Story Intro Poll

  • Intro was a positive, drawing into the story 15
  • Intro was a slight positive 5
  • Intro was completely neutral 5
  • Intro was a slight negative 4
  • Intro was a negative, turning away from the story 0
  • Ambivalent or mixed reactions 1
  • 2024-02-09
  • 30 votes
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Content

This is going all the way back to the beginning of the first book, but I wanted to revisit it. As you likely remember, the story begins in medias res - there have actually been two versions of this, one at the time of Kai's banishment and one at the moment his monstrous abilities awaken. 

My intent with this was to present a mystery, giving the reader half the clues and letting them put the rest together. I think it also gives the early sections more focus, making clear that they're moving within a plot structure.

This has been a controversial decision for a few, based on comments on the first chapter. I think I've given too many opinions already, so I won't say more about my stance on this. There are some things central to my ideas for the story, but I'm entirely open to changing my mind on this one.

For those of you who are following and supporting the story, what effect, if any, did the introduction have on your desire to try the story? The poll is anonymous because I want to get all opinions.

Comments

CalicoNSFW

Will give my two cents on this : I think it was good fro a couple of reasons. First, and you point it out, it shows a structure, a plot going towards something from the get go. And I tend to prefer stories with structure and a goal in mind, especially when there are good to great stories (on RR for instance) that lack structure and thus drag things out a lot. And second, this intro also set up the tone of Depthless Hunger. How Kai isn't fighting against foes, but fate itself, and throws himself towards danger with effort and discipline... but mostly the desperate hope that maybe, maybe the promise of power isn't just a promise, and there is something in his reach he could grasp.

AnythingAtAll

I don't like the intro that read like a summary of the events leading to his monstrous awakening while I'm neutral on the one that jumps straight to the fighting. The summary-like intro had always read to me as a bit amateurish by the story's standards. I understand the tone it was going for, but it dumped so many out-of-context events dramatically that I was left scratching my head more than anything. I didn't care about the characters or the plot at that point so it had the opposite effect of pulling me in. The intro that jumps straight to the fighting is functional, but lacking impact. If I were to pick up the first book and read that intro, I wouldn't lose interest, though I wouldn't be pulled in either. Again, there's the issue of being dropped into an event that isn't interesting enough to hold my attention without context, but to a lesser extent. There's a lot of fighting, some important event looming over the characters, but I'm mostly just thinking who are these people and why should I care about them. The story answers those eventually, but it does take a while. I didn't start getting truly interested until after the Hunter Trials end, which is too long. I don't know how to fix this, but I think a more subjective start would be better. I didn't care much that Kai was fighting, but I did think there was potential in how difficult it was to take down a dog that looked like it was turned inside out. I thought that was quite a striking description, and how much Kai struggles to take down his enemy despite being outmatched sets the tone of the series quite well. I'm thinking of opening lines that show how uneasy and wary he is of danger or one that emphasizes just how grotesque the monsters are, instead of one that jumps straight to the action. Again, I thought the part about the monster looking like a dog turned inside out was effective. Kai is here to train because these monsters are horrifying abominations that are out to kill people. That is a very good impression and immediately gives context that frames the Hunter Trials properly, which I always felt was lacking, and even the rest of the series. I don't think that fixes the problem entirely, but it's an intro that'll personally interest me more than the current one.

Kyle Cunnane

As someone who just recently picked up the story and gotten up to date; i think you handled it perfectly already, using the spoiler tag. I personally skipped it the first time i read the story, and have since read it to add some context to my second read. But just having the option was very refreshing! I do agree with the other comment though that it maybe shouldn’t be as much of a summary, though.

Alex Galaitsis

I skipped the little intro. I didn’t want spoilers beyond the blurb for the story