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EDIT: This version of the story has been discontinued (please see this post details). 

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someguyaround

Oooh, I'm liking the personality of this Jasmine gal so far, she seems like a real keeper. I would say I'm a little confused as to what point exactly John got flattened to the floor, though. Also, it looks like for the 'previous chapter' link at the beginning, you actually just linked chapter 1 instead of the last chapter.

squishme

Thank you, your feedback and corrections are awesome! He was flattened by Chloe in the previous chapter, but I added a sentence to denote that again for clarities sake. Also fixed the link, and some other typos.

Conor

Wow I had somehow missed this update! I'm VERY glad that I took a look, this was a really enjoyable chapter, great set up for more :)