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Graham’s declaration triggered a round of interested murmurs throughout the hall.

He reached into his robe and pulled out what looked like a jagged dagger, except it was made entirely of shiny blackwood.

“Professor, is that a wand or a knife?” Jane asked. 

“Yes,” the professor responded, which only made the murmuring louder.

“You can’t fight her, Professor,” Jane’s friend added.

“Yeah, that’s not fair to Arielle,” someone else said. “You’re a trained fighter, and she’s not.”

“Alright, calm yourselves, my little insurgents.” Graham put both hands up. “I specified that this is not compulsory, correct? Arielle does not have to take this fight, and it will not affect her grade in any way. This is simply extra credit.”

“Still," someone behind Ari murmured, and from the din that ensued, it seemed like nearly half the spectators, except Arielle, had a complaint. Some thought it was unfair for Arielle to be given this opportunity when they weren't, and others thought that the difference in power between Graham and Arielle was too much. She didn’t get what they were all so worried about. It wasn’t like Graham was actually going to hurt her, and his stats showed that he was a Level 149 Adept. Was there something she was missing?

"I for one am looking forward to this," a new voice said, and Ari recognized it as Wulfric's. He was standing on the fringes of the group, his lofty view likely excellent above all the heads. What was he doing here? Wasn't he a third year?

He winked at her again, and she frowned, turning her attention back to Graham.

"Oh, and I forgot to mention,” Graham said cheerily before he gave his signature clap. “I appreciate the...extraordinary turnout today but everyone, clear the hall for this fight. It's going to be a private evaluation."

“What?" That triggered near universal complaints, so loud and boisterous that Arielle put her hands over her ears.

"Oh, come on, Professor. That's not fair!"

“Life’s not fair,” Graham said smugly.

"But why?" A different person asked. 

"Because I said so," Graham said. "Now, see yourselves out. Anyone still here in the next minute and anyone who tries to steal a peek gets an automatic demerit. Got it?”Grumbling punctuated his sentence, and someone said. “You’re such a biased professor.”

“I know,” he responded. People finally started moving at that, although from the look of things, they weren't too happy about it.

Except Jane. She looked ecstatic when Graham told her, "We'll finish your evaluation tomorrow."

"Okay," she said cheerily. "No rush."

“Do the same rules still apply here?” Ari asked after everyone was gone.

“Of course,” Graham said. “This is a friendly match. And our magical standings aren't that different. After all, I'm merely an adept." He put his hand on his chest and fluttered his eyes when he said it, then chuckled, which confused her. Was that meant to be a joke? 

“I have already gotten permission from your Guardian to make this offer.”

“Elric is allowing this?"

“Yes. On one condition. That it’s just me and you and that I share all my findings with him." Graham pointed his wand at the door and locked it with a simple spell.  

She nodded. If Elric wasn't worried, then Arielle wasn't either. “Okay then. I’ll do it.”

Arielle wanted to ask if the only person who had ever beaten him was Selena. Ari didn’t think she was as good at combat as Selena. She wasn’t as fast or as strong and didn’t have the same battle instincts. However, Arielle knew that her cores were more balanced than Selena's and, unlike Selena, she could see the fundamentals of whatever spell was thrown at her. That should help her here. 

However, she was also operating at a disadvantage. While Graham knew a lot about her fighting style, she knew almost nothing about his. She also had to be careful not to do anything too questionable. 

It was hard to tell what Graham's build was from the essence surrounding him. There was Massa, Luxa, and Calor, but Luxa and Calor seemed attracted to him in almost equal amounts, which likely meant that his Luxa and Calor cores were perfectly balanced against his Massa. 

So what was his lean? 

She'd hadn't seen him cast all that many spells, so she couldn't tell. Currently, she suspected a variety of different builds that would behave differently in combat. He was probably fast and probably used some kind of insight. 

Beyond that, she would simply have to wait to see how he did. 

The second she stepped into the circle, it expanded, nearly filling up the entire midsection of the room as the rest of the surrounding circles shrank. Arielle was once more distracted by the Vacu floating above ground temporarily, then back under. 

She watched them, lulled into a trance by their rhythmic movement. 

That was until she heard the sound of the wind in her ear. 

Her gasp was interrupted. Graham was, somehow, right in front of her, grabbing her by the scruff of her robe and tossing her through the air. Luckily, her reflexes had her saying, [Telekinesis]" and the spell snapped together in time to catch her body right before her back touched the ground. 

She then switched over to "[Levitate]," allowing her to straighten and float longer while giving her professor a shocked look. 

Graham tilted his head. “Not bad. Well, technically, you are outside of the circle now, but I’ll allow you this once." 

Arielle blinked at him. She was still somewhat stunned by the past five seconds, feeling like she had been hit by a whirlwind. 

Graham, however, seemed casual about the whole thing as he said, "How about this?  I’ll give you three separate chances. If I'm able to toss you out three times, then you lose. If you toss me out even once, then you win."

That seemed like unfair to him, but since it was his proposal and he was a professor, she let it go. 

“That's fine, but you ambushed me,” she said. “I wasn’t even ready when you–”

She didn't get to finish her sentence.

Once again, he charged at her, at the speed of a blink. 

Before she could call out a spell, he was right in front of her, grabbing her again and tossing her to the other side circle.

Once more, she caught herself in the nick of time, but he didn't give her space to celebrate her victory, because he was coming for her again, faster than she could track.

“[Blink]” she said, but the blur representing his movement arched in the direction of her escape, getting there before she did.

How?

How did he predict which direction she would go in?

His hand shot out again, and she attempted to adjust her spell in real time, attempting to weave past him, but she was too slow. She got tossed. 

[Levitate] wasn't fast enough this time. The tip of her toe touched the ground.

"That's one," Graham announced as she floated in the air, lingering higher so that he couldn’t reach her. 

“Don't go too high,” Graham commented. "You're out of bounds."

“You never rang the bell,” she said, frustration in her voice. She didn't like this; how disorganized the whole thing was. He hadn't told her they were starting and hadn't given her time to prepare, thereby using the element of surprise against her. How could she have already lost a round in less than thirty seconds? Because Graham cheated, that's how. "We didn't officially even start yet."

“And who said every duel had to start with the bell?”

“Those are the rules.”

“Are they?” Graham cocked his head. “Did I say there would be such rules in this fight?”

Arielle thought about it. “You said–”

“Your objective is to get me out of this circle without physically hurting me. My objective toward you is the same. However we get there is our business.”

Yes, but there had to be rules to follow or it would become just another messy fight. "Okay, but still we should–”

He once again didn’t let her finish. He jumped at her, shooting through the air with, "[Forward Charge]."

This time, she had sort of been expecting the ambush, throwing up "[Air Shield], as she dodged him, but he seemed to sense the boundaries of the shield. 

He did a front flip over it, grabbing her shoulder, and Arielle's heart skipped a beat. She felt the jaws of defeat once more, so she punched out reflexively, nearly getting him in the nose. 

“Oh,” he said as he grabbed her wrist. “Now we're fighting dirty."

"Sorry," Arielle said. "[Kinetic Push]"

“[Wind Channel]," he said nearly simultaneously. 

It wasn't a spell Arielle knew well, but it seemed to funnel the wind from [Kinetic Push] that Arielle had cast at him, toward his feet, allowing him to remain suspended, too. 

She could rechannel it back, but she didn't have a spell in mind for that, and he didn't give her a chance to think.

Right as he threw her again, she targeted beneath his feet and said, “[Spell Breaker]."

His sudden loss of balance not only ruined his throw, but it also had him plunging straight to the ground.

There was a sharp intake of breath, and Arielle righted herself in the air and waited for her victory.

He denied her of it. 

He was supposed to hit right outside of the line, but somehow he landed with both feet within the circle, his body nearly falling out, and flailing until he suddenly adjusted his balance once more. 

Incredible. How could a human being recover that fast? 

It must have to do with that Luxa-Calor Combo. 

"You're out of bounds, Arielle," he told her again, which was unfortunate. She would have preferred to plan her next moves in the air, but he didn't give her time to do that.

She dropped to the ground again, about to plan her next moves, but couldn’t even catch her breath before he was closing the distance between them again.

“[Blink]!”  Arielle cried out, but he shook his head even before he caught up to her. 

“You are too predictable, Arielle,” he told her. 

Conversely, she thought he was too unpredictable, or rather, he wasn't giving her the space to predict him. He was surprisingly hard to read. He'd barely used any spells, and all she knew was that Calor Luxa orbs remained at the same part of his body, drawing closer to him the longer the battle went on. 

As though they were affixed there. Perhaps that was what was helping him with his speed and reflexes, and not the attributes. 

Or maybe they both played into it. 

Her mind raced to sift through the plethora of spells she could use. Repel would work, but she wasn't supposed to know how to use that. The reverse vitality spell she’d made for Lyra would slow him down, also, but she would need to adjust it so it didn't kill him in the process.

Then there was the issue of targeting. She had to be able to target him first, for any of the spells to work. It would be difficult because he was too fast.

 Unless she could somehow ensure that anything that got within a certain radius of her would be slowed down. Kind of like what she had done during her fight with Selena. Those spells would help her now, but they took some time to cast. 

Time he didn't give her. 

All she could do was run from him as he came after her, but this time she added [Air Hold], which trapped him temporarily, and [Kinetic Push], which shoved him away from her. 

Not far enough, though. Not outside the line, just to the very edge as he'd used [Air Channel] once more to redirect the energy. 

Arielle frowned. What was going on? His casting speed wasn't faster than hers, but he was managing to outcast her because he cast his spells right before or right as she cast hers? 

He landed shakily, smiling as he stared up at her. 

“Not bad," he said. “Since you managed to do that, I’m going to give you a hint. You think too much."

Arielle frowned. She didn't like that critique. It was too close to what her teacher at the schoolhouse had said. 

“You have a wonderful mind,” he clarified. “But sometimes you need to learn to shut it off and just fight."

“That makes no sense. How do you fight without a mind?”

"Fighting is sometimes logic over instinct and other times instinct over logic," Graham said. "I’ve seen you fight. You're very good at the first type, but not so much at the second.  You observe first, then you make predictions based on those observations, and then you tailor your offense on that, basically. And that’s all well and good if you know your opponent. But there will be times that you have no idea who your opponent is, and they don’t give you any time to observe them. They go for the kill straight away. What will you do then?”

Arielle thought there were probably a few spells she could use against Graham. The problem would come with explaining how she knew those spells. 

For example, a constant repel would keep him away from her, no matter how fast he was. The Sensate-combo she'd used for Selean would work here too, but it needed time to be activated. 

She had to plan her next attack–

Graham was in front of her. He grabbed her by the scruff of her robe, and she let out a little cream.  

“You're struggling with listening to your killer instinct,” he said. “I’ve watched you enough to know your next moves. I know that right now you’re probably thinking of activating that spell that you used to catch Selena’s knife. You’re also thinking about perhaps targeting me with an anti-vitality spell.”

Arielle's eyes widened, shocked to her very marrow that he'd read her like that. 

“Now you're wondering how I know what I know. My perception is really, really high. One of my skills is that I can read my opponents like a book, even from one micromovement. I know exactly what you’re going to do before you even figure it out yourself."

Well. That was disconcerting.

He tossed her out of the circle, and she caught herself in the air.

"The only way to surprise me is with an instinctive maneuver." He raised his eyebrow. “Are you going to give up now?” 

She shook her head. She was going to win. She had to win. For Maus. She just had to stop thinking.

…..how? That was impossible for her. 

Or maybe she just needed to think differently. What would Brom do if he were in a situation like this and met someone who was faster than him or better than him?

Well, Brom would cheat. 

Arielle decided to simplify everything and break it down to the basics. 

She needed to keep up with Graham’s speed. She also needed him not to touch her. 

Perhaps there was some combo where she could–

He charged at her again, and she barely dodged in time.

“You’re still thinking, Arielle," he said as he moved.. "React.”

She did. She didn't have a choice. That dodge hadn't been triggered by her conscious action. Truthfully, she had only been thinking about a repel spell, and the orbs had snapped in place at the last minute to keep him away from her. Hopefully, it hadn't been a dramatic enough reaction for him to notice...

But maybe it had.

Graham didn't give any reaction to it. He only shot towards her again.

Even as it happened again and again, her spell forms triggered by his relentless hunting. She decided to pretend that she'd made a spell called [Speed Match], a spell that enabled her to match up to her opponent's speed. She would use that as an excuse for how she stayed ahead of his attacks. 

She wished she could come up with a cleverer plan, but she had no chance to think about much else but the relentless, repetitive combo.

Dodge. Dodge. Dodge. Attack.

Yet somehow, without any conscious thought, some of her spells were building in real time, fine tuning, adjusting. She didn't have time to observe it, too obsessed with not getting caught up, but the orbs added another repellent layer at his most frequent touch points; her shoulder, her arm, her ankle, and her wrist.

She just hoped it was inconspicuous enough that he didn't feel it.

When he tried to touch her, his hand would shift just enough that he would just about miss her. Even if he did manage to grasp her, it would prevent a strong grip.

With those changes, Professor Graham might not recognize the silent spell-casting.  He might simply assume it was his grip, messed up by the sweat that now dripped from their bodies. 

Arielle's heart raced. She didn't know what she was doing, her brain not having time to think. She couldn't even track him properly. Once he appeared in front of her and she screamed, and held her wand out yelling. "[Earthen Grasp]."

He was still too quick for her, but it almost got him. 

"Not bad," he said, and Arielle panted at the slight reprieve, feeling like she had been running forever. Though they had been at this for several minutes, Graham didn't seem winded. His talking voice was still steady and he seemed to be enjoying himself. "You're awakening. Now that’s more like–"

This time, it was her turn not to let him finish. While fighting, Ari tugged at one of the orbs on his feet and he stumbled back. 

Arielle dashed.

"[Air Hold]," she declared, and it hit him faster than he could counter.

Or it should have hit him. 

He simultaneously cried out, "[Primal Instinct]."

Though his back was turned and there was no way for him to see her attack, he reacted as though he could see it. His body contorted to avoid the hold, completely bending over backward and avoiding the clean sweep that would have been.

She gaped. “How?”

The orbs were not just on his feet now. They were all over his body, concentrated around the key pivoting points therein. One interesting thing was that Luxa-Calor dominated Massa just a little, but they were kept stable by multiple triple bonds.

“Primal Instinct is a trait of my bloodlines," Graham said as he came at her, trying to grab her while she dodged him. "It boosts my adaptability, and in moments before impact, it temporarily rearranges my stat, pushing my life force into speed, dexterity, and constitution."

Fascinating. 

Did that mean that he lost strength at that time? If life force was being redirected, then it had to be pushed from something to something else, correct? She wondered if it would–

Before she completed the thought, she was flying through the air. This time, she didn't catch herself in time, hitting the ground with an 'oof!'

"That's two," Graham said. "You were doing so well and then you let yourself get distracted."

Arielle swallowed as she picked herself up, regret swirling through her body. This was really bad. She had lost two out of the three tries she was afforded. She couldn't afford to lose again.

For Maus.

Graham crooked his finger. "Come here."

Ari hesitated. For the first time, she was actually scared to step into the ring again. It felt like so much riding on this and she was at a serious disadvantage. She could actually lose this. She didn't want to lose.

"We don't have all day Arielle," Graham said and cocked his head. "Are you scared?"

She swallowed and nodded.

"Good." He grinned and in that moment, he looked like an imp sent from hell.

A part of her wanted to run away, but Arielle straightened her spine. Mossbornes did not run from battle. She would not run from this one.

She steeled herself and walked into the circle.

What came next was a frenzy that she herself did not understand. It would be difficult to describe any other way than madness.

Running. Chasing. Attacking. Blocking.

It all blended together in a series of jagged motions, one spell flowing into another before she could form the words cleanly. She did everything she could to survive and win. As he jumped at her from different angles, dodging her attacks, she enhanced them. She became faster, better. She couldn't even tell what spell she was casting and why, but one by one, they jumped off her tongue. [Spell Breaker] [Kinetic Push] [Air Tentacle]. She threw everything in her arsenal at him, one after another, not letting him recover, as well as tampering with his bloodline ability. 

She tried to keep him away from her, but he broke through the medley anyway, his sharp dagger-ish wand shooting out for her, like he was about to stab her.

But it didn't happen.

One of the spells, and she wasn't sure which, cast from desperation hit him in the chest, and he was flung out of the circle. 

He still tried to take her with him, grabbing her robe, but she had enough foresight to cast, "[Earthen Grasp]" at her feet, cementing her in place.

The robe ripped and he went out of the circle alone.

It took Arielle a second to realize what happened.

She was still in motion, swinging her wand, the next spell on the tip of her tongue, her mind still caught in the haze of battle.

And then she realized...

"I won?" She almost couldn't believe it, but slowly it dawned on her. She pumped her fist in the air. "I won!"

"That you did.” He straightened, wiping his forehead. 

 "I beat you!" she declared, bending over to hold her knees out.

He smiled despite being ragged on. "You did really well, and I think you're getting the hang of what I'm trying to teach you.  But that was only phase one." He twirled his wand in his hand. "By the way, sorry about nearly getting you with the dagger. Were you scared?"

She shook her head. "I knew you wouldn't hurt me."

His smile slid off. A troubled look passed over his face.

It was punctuated by a knock on the door, and Graham waved his hand to unlock it. An annoyed-looking Woden came in. "Hello, Woden. Arielle, Woden here is going to take us to Phase 2."

AN: Sorry for the delay. Read over again and changed a few things last minute.

Comments

Javad

Woo

EclecticReader

Thanks for the chapter. when she came after -> when he came after

Hauke Sattler

I wonder if Graham noticed her silent [Don't touch me] spells.

Garnet of Flame

Time for Ari to fight some chair monsters!

Marshel

Oh man, I'm hoping the next chapter is from Graham's perspective. In the middle of the duel, he might not have noticed Ari's silent casting, but with his increased perception and not actively participating he might start seeing things that maybe he shouldn't. Great chapter.

mezeka

Woah. Stage1 unlocked. Stage 2 commencing. Fun! TFTC!

Marshel

Of course, onedayokay, should follow their own plan and ignore me. :) I am sory of envisioning a character arc for Graham. I'm also wondering about Elric and his "associates." I'm very much enjoying this story and I look forward to each new post every day. Also, for this chapter, I'll point out that Graham is only half right about why Ari is thinking too much. The [Speed Match] fake spell is a good hint at Ari just trying to not reveal too much.

Orca

Typos & similar only phase one." There was a knock on the door, and Graham waved his hand to unlock it. An annoyed-looking Woden came in. "Hello, Woden. Arielle, Woden here is going to take us to Phase 2." (one and 2 should both be words, or both be numerals) rearranges my stat, rearranges my stats, used for Selean used for Selena

Erebus

Thank you for the chapter 🙂

chumponimys

Wait so his whole gimmick is his insane perception and her strategy is to try to sneak things by him? I feel like if his perception is as good as he's bragging it is, he must've noticed all of it, right?

Antony Claughton

I find it hard with his perception that he didn’t pick up on the silent casting. Or that she did ‘something’ and the spell he had unraveled. Of course, he could have been exaggerating his perception.

Arkennys

This was bad. It was bad both in idea and execution. I'm not going to go through every bit of exposition and setup, but Ari winning against Graham simply doesn't make sense. It's so deeply contradictory to the previously clever and complex writing that I'm willing to drop the regularly misused to the point of meaninglessness, dreaded "plot hole". I'm talking about the loss conceptually, regardless of how it's written. Also, it is just a fundamentally bad idea for the story - it keeps delaying Ari's realisation that she's a clown and needs to be serious, it makes the world less realistic and believable, and it's without tension. The two phase ruleset from the last chapter instantly made me think she will win, structurally. For the execution, even if the story wants to become less serious and Ari needs to win for some reason, the writing doesn't work. Graham starts out confident, offering the 3:1 handicap, but after the initial ambush he never achieves anything again. This makes him look incompetent. Even if Ari won, it should have been closer. Graham is moving so fast Ari can't track him with just her eyes, yet the duel is said to take "minutes". That's too long of a time relative to their speeds. It's also entirely stupid on Graham's part. He wants to push Ari to act on instinct instead of thinking, then he gives her minutes, plural, to think. So little of interest happens in that gap that the narrative doesn't even show it, it's just handwaved. As it's presented, the duel ends up reading like a comedy skit, with Graham chasing Ari around for minutes in circles. Benny Hill much? Then there's Graham's style. He repeatedly boasts about being adaptable, but Ari clearly figures out how to handle his charges after the first few. Yet he never pulls another trick, doesn't have an alternative tactic, nothing. He spends the whole time running at her like a lobotomized troll, without any mixup. Completely pathetic on his part. He has the fancy wand knife, which is never mentioned again after he strikes a pose with it. It's so silly. On one hand, I praised the teachers for being mostly good teachers. So Graham calling out lessons and explaining what's going on during the duel is respectable. On the other hand, it only works if he wins. Losing to Ari makes her overtly smug and arrogant. It defeats the purpose of the exercise, which makes him stopping to lecture counterproductive. This was a situation where giving Ari a solid beatdown and explaining the lesson immediately afterwards would have been more effective. They can still have another spar a week later to check if the lesson sunk in. But it would have had a chance to sink in that way. With this outcome, Ari has no incentive to change, because she was proven right. She has been consistently and intentionally ignoring lessons she doesn't like for a solid while. Having her somehow take this lesson to heart despite the win would be outright out of character for her. She just doesn't work like that. Good advice that she doesn't like might as well not exist for her. So, yeah. The only way this makes even a shred of sense is if Graham lost on purpose. But that's also contradictory to his goals and damn stupid and pointless in its own right. The admirable nuance in Ari's characterisation is wasted if the OP power fantasy takes priority when it matters. I thought this was about taking that trope and doing something special with it. The character writing is truly exceptional and excellent. I firmly believe based on comments and reviews here and on RR that Ari and how well written she is are the key factor for why this resonates with so many people. But the events of the plot keep undercutting her.

Josh

Graham's point isn't to humble her, it's to teach her something she's lacking. And he did. She doesn't have to learn every bit of it at once. He wanted to teach her to deal with people who can read her planning, so that she has to find a counter to it, which she did. Possibly more importantly, he needed her to stop being distractedly contemplative to the point of stringing things out, and she *certainly* had to stop *that* in this fight. She finally started taking it seriously. That's part of why he gave her a deliberately manipulative reward that is exactly what he knows she most desperately wants. Knowing Ari, she's going to let this battle live rent free in her head for a while, and keep thinking about counters to what she learned. Ari is very good at "the same trick won't work on me twice".

Arkennys

What you are saying is nice, but that's not what the writing gives us. That's my secondary point about the execution not working, even if I concede Ari winning being a good idea somehow. She's still thinking about how to hide her true skill, making up fake spells to explain her OP cheat powers, and coming up with an elaborate multi-step plan to win. She's considering how her magical slipperiness might be hidden by sweat (which is idiotic in itself but it's reasonable for Ari to think that with her lack of experience) and so on. All this explicitly over the course of multiple minutes. After the initial ambush she's entirely in control and dominating the fight. If she wasn't trying to hide, she could have won at any point *after* the initial exchange. Graham had nothing on her except surprise. The conclusion is still: being OP > everything else. Skill, experience, grit, cunning? Irrelevant. Except Graham doesn't really display any of that. Supernatural aspects aside, I've seen bar brawls with more finesse than what he shows here. He has one way to fight, which is very direct, and he never even slightly varies it. With the build up of his adaptability, the duel reads like a joke. If Graham wanted to make his point he should have kept that same level of pressure up as what puts Ari off balance at the start. He doesn't. He lets her recover. She's not daydreaming about unrelated things, but she's isn't acting on instinct and scrambling. She's not really reacting. She's still approaching the fight with the exact mindset Graham calls out as bad. The tone shifts after the first section. Ari being flustered is something we have multiple examples of in the writing. Even in this chapter. But she's not in that mental state after the start. She's not written like that. If that's what I should think, the delivery fails. The version of the chapter your comment implies would be better, but that's not what is written. This flight living rent free in Ari's head is baffling. She won without changing her approach and is blatantly gloating about it. She has failed to learn simpler lessons from stronger examples. If this is what changes Ari, I will hate that even more. The writing of the fight completely failed to convince me of the lesson Graham wants to teach, and **I agree with it**. Ari drawing the right conclusion from this pathetic, underwhelming display that accomplished nothing except blindsiding her by deliberately ignoring established rules in school duels would ruin this subplot. What we are getting with this chapter is Ari yet again failing to face a meaningful challenge, and subsequently failing to learn anything. Anne putting her in an earth prison making her drop her wand was a bigger hit than anything Graham manages to put on her, and she shrugged that right off.

Osiris

Sports

onedayokay

Graham isn't going all out in this fight at all. He's not winded or even really trying. He pauses at several points and even does the thing where he just talks (giving her a chance to ambush him). Even with that, he does succeed in beating her twice. However, if he does go all out, all she will do is lose and she will not learn anything from the fight. His point was to trigger a 'primal instinct' which kinda happens when Arielle starts desperately flinging spells at him at the end because she wants to win. He doesn't cast any spells really back at her, because there's no point in her just losing, all she will learn from that is that he is fast. Arielle's primal instinct isn't all the way there yet, which is why she's still thinking during the fight. If Graham had taken advantage of that, he would have simply tossed her but he didn't giving her a chance to fight back. The point isn't Arielle losing. If she loses, all she learns is that 'Professor Graham' is faster than me and better at fighting than me.' That's not the lesson he's trying to teach. What instead he wants 'I need to beat Professor Graham by every means possible' which is kind of what starts to happen. Arielle isn't entirely there yet. It's a gradual process and so these sessions will continue with Graham upping the ante and increasing his strength and threat level every time. She won't get there instantly, and it's not something that's triggered by fear in Arielle's case (or at least not by fear of death). There has to be something else at stake (Maus getting expelled) which is why it's different here and she's actually taking the fight more seriously than others which was mostly just fun for her. This wasn't meant to be an explosive realization day for Arielle as I think that cheapens her problem. She's not going to realize it all at once. It's going to come to her in bits and pieces. Also, to Graham, if she loses also she will not get to phase two, which is the whole point of this fight. Though I will go over again and see if maybe there are things I can work on and clear up with the execution. Maybe make the fight longer or introduce Graham's perspective.

onedayokay

Thank you! And it is both. She does over rationalize sometimes but she has a good reason for it.

brainrot.elemental

> If Graham wanted to make his point he should have kept that same level of pressure up as what puts Ari off balance at the start. He doesn't. He lets her recover. For what it's worth, my reading of the chapter was in line with what onedayokay says. Graham isn't fighting seriously and isn't trying to make a point. He's trying to get Ari to fight instinctively for once. Not to convince her that it's important, but to teach her the feel of it. Graham's "style" in this fight is not his actual style, but a challenge designed specifically so that Ari has to reach a certain reaction speed to pass. And that succeeds, because Ari passes as soon as she starts casting spells without knowing what she's casting, but no sooner than that. That said, the theme of the last ~20 chapters was "Arielle needs to learn fear". And the exam was supposed to address that. But it kinda doesn't, and the lesson ends up being about reaction speed instead. So I see where you're coming from.

Arkennys

Thank you for the response author-sensei. I just want to start by saying: I'm not asking for random bullshit unrelated to the plot. I'm not complaining because I want Ari to enter into a polycule with Lyra and Maus and then to read a five chapter, extended, extremely graphic sex scene. I am confident that even if my criticism is incorrect and stupid, at the very least it is addressing real and deliberate aspects of the story. Ari's issues with attitude have been a long-running subplot, and this chapter doesn't deal with it properly. I don't even really see it as a first step. Contrast this with the ending of chapter 74, where we get from the Dean: "We have noticed during her fights that she has a particularly dangerous, fearless approach to battles that will not serve her well" Elric reinforces this by thinking: "Vittoria had also presented Arielle's fearlessness as a problem, and coming from Vittoria, that was saying a lot." This is the lead-in to the exam. I wouldn't call the ending of chapter 74 a cliffhanger - cutting off without letting us know what they are planning is obviously the correct choice narratively. We should find out alongside Ari, that's much more effective. But this is *serious* setup to hopefully start dealing with a profound issue which is affecting Ari, and this chapter doesn't deliver on it. If the true purpose of the whole thing is phase two, I think you might be better served structurally by just reorganising this underwhelming duel. Depending on what phase two is, even just directly flipping the order of the two might work better. What you are explaining about Graham's approach is a more nuanced and elaborate version of what I summarised as: he is losing on purpose. When I suggest Ari losing, I'm not asking for Graham to obliterate her in two seconds flat, without Ari having a chance to even process it. But someone with his experience and mastery specifically in the domain of 1v1 duels should be capable of controlling the fight enough to both serve as a teaching experience and to win. I'm also not asking for a moment of epiphany where Ari instantly figures it out and changes her mind completely. I fully agree that it would be cheap! Please note, while my top comment was certainly harsh criticism, I also included meaningful and sincere praise. Your characterisation of Ari is **fantastic** and turning her on a dime like that would be awful. That's not what I'm suggesting at all. I've also specifically praised your fight choreography before. The battle with the trolls was brilliant, and I said so at the time. Let me acknowledge that there is a severe fog of war present. As readers in her PoV, we know Ari much better than Graham. To an extent, it's understandable that he wouldn't have the same insight into her psychology as us. With that said, let me start with the things *we* know. This isn't an exhaustive list, just some hopefully illustrative examples. - Elric tells her he has money and is happy to share - Ari ignores it for her own reasons and does her own thing, which causes trouble; - Elric practically begs her to keep a low profile, and after the charm guy even gives a very detailed and explicit explanation for why - Ari only nominally follows this advice, but whenever it suits her, discards the idea completely; - people warn her about Selena, she plainly gets the information about what will happen - Ari decides that Selena is sincere in only wanting to play (this isn't neurodivergence, this is intentionally ignoring what her friends are telling her because she likes sparring with strong people); - Ari *says out loud in dialogue* that hiding things from Elric and going against his advice caused both of them problems - the conclusion she draws is to hide even more important things even more aggressively. I just don't believe that when her teacher says: "hey, your fighting style has issues, let me demonstrate it in a duel" and then Ari dominates him completely without changing anything about her fighting style, that she will take even a single spirit orb's worth of a lesson from this. She's extremely stubborn about not taking in information that doesn't suit her. The fight ends with: "Arielle couldn't resist boasting." Is this the attitude of someone thoughtful? Someone who has even an inkling of having learned something new? Her ego is continuing to balloon out of control, and as Graham lost on purpose, it's not even particularly deserved. If anything, she learned the opposite of the intended lesson. Now for some things Graham knows: she comes from a non-magical family and only very recently got into magic and spellcasting. She clearly has incredible natural talent and this rapid rise in status has obviously gone to her head. (This is something I like!!! It's good!!! Neurodivergence or not, no teenager could get Ari's power and not have ego issues. It's good writing.) She is not merely undefeated, but nobody ever even actually truly fought her. She has issues with her combat attitude. Drawing the conclusion from all this that going easy on her and letting her be all smug about getting a win on him will somehow serve as corrective action is just confusing. Even with his limited information, he should know better. Ari desperately needs a loss that she cares about (e.g. failing to secure Maus' continued attendance - as far as she knows, anyway; I'm pretty sure Maus passed on his own already), and this was a prime opportunity to provide that. Graham has shown a distinct willingness to poke at the inflated egos of young masters before, but he isn't applying it to the one student of his that arguably needs it the most - instead setting up a lesson that will allow her to draw all the wrong conclusions. About Ari and the idea that she changed her approach in this fight. If Graham had gotten her to even very slightly awaken her "primal instinct" that would be good, but the writing doesn't support it. Broadly, I've said during the "lack of fear of death" chapter that Ari internally being deeply emotional is wonderful, and that you do an outstanding job of capturing it. Recent examples include her joy at being a "best friend" and annoyance with Maus for taking a huge risk on his duel. These are very sincere, deep, emotional responses. Look at the first half of the fight versus the second half. You are very, very good at capturing her emotions and conveying them to the readers. Before Graham stops to monologue, Ari is clearly upset. After, the emotions in the writing are much more flat. She *feels* in control, calm, like the flow of the battle has shifted. The part of the fight where Graham was trying to push her into awakening her instincts was over the moment he started yapping. If the idea is that she's still desperately scrambling in the second half, I think you should adjust the prose. You are amazing at capturing the nuances of her mental state, and second-half-Ari is firmly in "beep boop solve the fight like a math puzzle" mode as she is written. Again, the comparison against the first half of the fight in this same chapter highlights the different tone clearly. Even though I yapped a lot, I tried to summarise. But perhaps if I go into more line-by-line detail, I can highlight better why this chapter doesn't land. You say in the comment: "kinda happens when Arielle starts desperately flinging spells at him at the end because she wants to win" But I don't see this in the chapter's text at all. There is only one line that indicates anything like this: "she couldn't even tell what spell she was casting and why, but one by one, they left her mouth" Even though I understand this is supposed to be canonically true, in the context of the chapter and how it was written, I literally don't believe this. I'm sorry. This sentence just parses as flat out untrue in the story. It's not only a prime example of not doing "show instead of tell", but the parts of "show" we have contradict the "tell" part. "That dodge hadn't been just her doing. (...) the orbs had snapped in place at the last minute" This might be trying to imply that she's reacting on instinct, but the spirit orbs have displayed rudimentary sentience, both with her and Lyra. Interpreting this literally, that *Ari* wasn't dodging on instinct and rather the orbs helped her out is completely in-line with the lore. If this is supposed to indicate that Ari is starting to cast at her true, utterly insane speed, out of desperation, rewording it would help. The mystery and the focus on the orbs as living things makes this very ambiguous. It could very legitimately be the orbs doing her a solid, without her input. "She decided to pretend that she'd made a spell (...) She would use that as an excuse" She is explicitly thinking about outside of the fight things. She's still distracted and not fully locked in on the battle. "She wished she could come up with a cleverer plan" This means she has a plan, just not as clever as she would like. Again, this still fundamentally the same approach. She's doing planning mid-fight, not *reacting*. "'in the back of her mind, she was building the spell in real time, fine tuning it, adjusting it" Full-on academic Ari. Zero instinct here. If anything, her being able to keep dodging Graham's attacks while "in the back of her mind" doing spell calculations, that proves she isn't under enough pressure. This is the opposite of what Graham wants to happen. "He might simply assume it was his grip, messed up by the sweat that now dripped from their bodies. " This is more outside of the fight thinking. This isn't about how to not lose, or even how to win. She's thinking about implications. This isn't how someone "desperately flinging spells" acts and thinks. "Once Arielle had her defense down, she also began refining her attacks." Methodical, structured. Zero instinct, zero reaction, textbook classic Ari. "This time, it was her turn not to let him finish." At this point the shift in the fight's dynamics is fully explicit and unavoidable. Whatever lesson Graham tried to teach, it's fully over. "One interesting thing was that Luxa-Calor dominated Massa just a little, but they were kept stable by multiple triple bonds." Academic analysis of the spirit orbs. Not immediately practically useful in the fight. "Fascinating. Did that mean that he lost strength at that time? If life force was being redirected, then it had to be pushed from something to something else, correct?" This is still Ari thinking about stuff that's not relevant to the duel. She still has time to ponder. There is even attention called to it: "Normal Ari would have deliberated on that longer, but this Ari didn't have time. She had to end this." This highlights my point. The difference isn't what she is doing, only the extent. She does deliberate, and the only difference is that she does so for less time than usual. Ari isn't shifting how she fights, only how much effort she puts in. There is no real indication that in the second half, she's off balance, flustered, or reacting on instinct. She's doing her usual "fights are a fun puzzle to solve" routine, only she's expending 80% brain power on it instead of the usual 20%. That's a quantitative change, not qualitative. This is why I say the duel is teaching the wrong lesson. Ari won by just doing what she was already doing *even harder* instead of being forced into any kind of change. A small change, even a gradual one, would have been nice, but the writing doesn't convince me that it happened. The opposite, really. "She put everything together." This sounds entirely deliberate. We are told a few sentences before that she is "refining her attacks". This reads like the logical culmination of that, her plan coming together. This is the start of the paragraph where we get: "she couldn't even tell what spell she was casting" But by starting off with "Ari putting everything together", it absolutely sounds fully intentional. The first and second sentences contradict each other, and the second sentence is the *only* point in the fight, after the initial ambush, the suggests Ari is anything but fully composed and in control. And since these are in conflict, I'm going to believe the one that matches up with everything else leading into it. Note how many examples I can cite directly from the text of Ari being distracted by not imminently relevant things and planning out the fight and her approach to it. This is all from the second half. Now compare it to the first half. We get things like: "She could rechannel it back, but she didn't have a spell in mind for that, and he didn't give her a chance to think." This is directly saying Ari is trying to think of something clever and uniquely Ari, but she's not being given the time. She *tries* to think, but gets interrupted. This doesn't happen in the second half. The section between: "She watched them, lulled into a trance by their rhythmic movement." and "“You are too predictable, Arielle,” he told her." is tight and fast paced. Effectively zero speculation and thinking on Ari's part, just a rapid description of the flow of battle. She's believably off-balance and reacting here. There's basically no interruption with lengthy thought processes about immaterial details; she's focused on the fight fully. Then after Graham calls her predictable, we get the first large chunk of Ari trying to engage her big brain. Graham seemingly gives her a little breathing room here, but then shuts it down and calls out her mistake. This is where the duel stops for chatting, and then the second half begins which I quoted extensively from. With the shift in pacing and Ari's thoughts, the two halves are very distinct in mood and feel, and the second half after the conversation comes across like completely standard behaviour for Ari, merely having to put in a bit more effort than usual. So the fight ending with her desperately flinging spells she isn't even sure about - that just doesn't ring true at all. It's a hollow statement that is contradicted by a significant portion of the preceding battle, including the details that this second segment had been going on for "minutes", further emphasising the reduced speed and intensity, and Ari's newfound ease of keeping ahead of Graham. Actually, the distinct difference between the two halves of the fight could be an intentional point Graham is making. The writing reflecting a choice he is making in-universe as a character. "See, I put you under pressure when I wanted to, then I eased up to let you fall back into your old habits". However, if this is even intentional on his part, Ari is incapable of picking up on this type of nuance. That is her single weakest skill. With her additional lack of battle knowledge, Ari realising that the two halves of the fight were very different and that said difference was entirely at Graham's discretion is impossible. She can't learn anything from noticing the change, because she cannot notice the change. This same structure might have been extremely instructive to a person deeply immersed in fighting expertise and sensitive to "real" world non-narrative subtext, but that's absolutely not Ari. Like, this same duel might have taught Riorke something deep, but it's wasted on Ari. Now for the other half, Graham. This ties back to what I mentioned all the way above about how chapter 74 ends. Graham hypes up this fight far too much, for no purpose. Sending all the other students out at the threat of a demerit, showing off his fancy wand knife, giving Ari a 3:1 handicap, pausing to confidently monologue mid-battle, the whole "I'm merely an adept" thing, which implies either that his stats are fake, or that *he* at least knows stats are not everything. It doesn't matter if his personality is that of a drama queen; narratively, all of this along with all the build up in previous chapters sets expectations and makes promises about the story. Which then all falls apart as he acts like a total clown in the fight. The only part that was necessary to get Ari on board was the "save Maus" credit. All of the rest are just trolling by Graham, which us readers fall victim to instead of Ari, who doesn't particularly care about any of it. You put substantial effort into setting a tone, only to knock it down in a really unsatisfying way. If Graham did this exact same duel, verbatim identical, in a random class one day without any of the over the top theatrics leading into it, I would immediately be much less stressed about it. But you went out of your way to hammer home the point that this is crucial for Ari's development, and put in noticeable effort to build up to this scene in particular. And the scene is weak in that context.

onedayokay

@brainrot.elemental. That's fair. I planned on putting the fear part in the next chapter.

onedayokay

@Arkennys. I think I see some of your points. Perhaps what I was trying to portray wasn't done as well in this chapter. I'll probably work through it within the week, fixing spots and lengthening the fight to truly show the intentions.

Conviter

so i dont really understand why they havent been teaching her these fundamental concepts about fighting for real before? like it seems like all the lessons so far have just been Arielle stomping some random classmate and then just sitting there for the rest of the lesson. This type of 1 on 1 coaching is imo something that should have been done way earlier.

Anthony

"Did I say there would be such rules in this fight?” --- Yes, Graham, you expressly did. --- “Do the same rules still apply here?” Ari asked after everyone was gone. “Of course,” Graham said.