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WHEW. I knew this was going to be a big one, but damn, just shy of 14k words. Part of me wanted to cut it in half, but the first part isn't enough for a Part, and the rest is basically one great big scene. I would have had it out yesterday, but I was up all night Saturday with a very very anxious German shepherd stray I found at the side of the highway. As a result, yesterday was just getting caught up on missed sleep. (Puppers is back with his owner and everyone is just fine. My cat's still a little miffed about the weird smells.)

Here we have the school week coming to an end, and Mr. Canon finally granting Abbie her wish by letting her grant him his. If teachers engaging in wildly immoral behavior with impressionable students is what drew you to this story, you're gonna love it. (If that sort of thing is objectionable to you, then, ya know, maybe unsubscribe because it ain't stopping any time soon.) I also think it did good responding to some of my own criticisms (which some of you I know shared as well), so I think we're getting better physical descriptions, and we also get to see a little more time with Canon and Taylor one on one. While the "Her" in the title has certainly expanded beyond just Taylor, she's still the original Her, and a fixation for him. I don't think this puts too fine a point on it (or maybe it muddies the waters even more), but anyway, there it is.

Next up I have a commission to produce, so we should have that by the weekend. In the meantime, be well, stay awesome. More to come!

Comments

WDB

"...a place so linked to dirty thoughts that it had its own showers to rinse the girls clean." Dude, what the HELL. That's too damn good of a line! You made stop reading your story because that shit *blew my mind*.

ukyo_rulz

I'm really liking the progress on this story. Literally no complaints. No suggestions. I'm just along for the ride.

Addiction

As always, incredible work with the dialogues. (Very jealous of that.) You definitely manage to get their personality and individual quirks across well. This definitely shows off your descriptions well, solving any issues someone might have had with it. As the people above me noted (and the people that will comment after undoubtedly too) some very imaginative stuff allround. Taylor's desires are still slightly opaque, though frequent rubbing has made parts more transparant. I'm happy Cassie is being embraced as a sister in fantasy by the Sterns. Also I suspect Taylor will try and force herself on her teacher if she doesn't get that dick soon. Quite enjoyed the shower overall, no fade-outs or glossing over events. Especially liked the emphasis on sounds too. We're in the plteau of the story, where no terrible 'oh shit' events are currently happening or are going to happen soon. From your desire for this to be more episodic, I assume there aren't going to be many after because that would upset the episodic part. That being said, I appreciate the dedication to updates and research (and thus maybe a little overarching plot?) provided by Officer Barbour. Side-note: Also as an ESL-speaker/reader: She showed up drunk and started drinking? Wouldn't that be Showed up drunk and continued drinking? second side-note: no post-deletion shenanigans, hurray

Ferrum1

I love how you're able to do such believable dialogue, but that also kinda means I really don't like the Stern sisters. Their nastiness just ruins the whole mood for me. 17000 words in this installment, and I'll bet I scrolled through at least half of it just because all the inane banter from those two was killing the mood. Hopefully, the next installment will have some unexpected problems to deal with now that our SRO has had time to mess around with the Serenex. I'm really looking forward to seeing what she might have done to her girlfriend!

Tanap

I have to point this one out. Page 10 paragraph 4 "With wok out of the way" . Made me laugh a lot for some reason.