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Teaching Her A Lesson, Part 22 (Patreon)

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2020-09-18 23:29:13
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Onwards! I had a great vacation last week with my annual week o' D&D. (And nobody unleashed a malevolent AI to suck me into a virtual reality RPG, so... bonus?) I gave myself a day to settle in, and now here we go with part 22, the aftermath of Canon's termination. Some musing on this installment follows, though I'd recommend reading the new chapter first, coming back to that second, just in case.

MUSINGS

There is still a significant extent to which I am winging this thing. I forgot how fun it is to just let my characters do what they want without pushing them into plot points. Canon and his ladies certainly seem to have a knack for blundering into plot points of their own without my intervention, anyway. Honestly, when I had Abbie ambush him at Gooses, it wasn't until after that I thought, man, wouldn't it be funny if one of his buddies caught it on camera? Then... OH MAN WHAT IF THEY...?! And while it's kind of a dickhead thing to post, I've seen people do worse, so I thought... why not. He's been so fucking reckless, he deserves to be caught by *something*.

Coming out of part 21 (wherein Horen catches the girls in his room and reveals her researches), I was like... shit. Did I just totally fuck up my main character? Like, did I ruin his life on a whim because it felt like that's what that fusspot Horen was always waiting in the wings for? Man, am I an idiot? But then I thought about it procedurally (and spending a week's vacation with my public defender friend helped), and I was like... yeah, maybe not? I don't know. As of this moment, I genuinely don't know if Canon's going to save his job, stay out of jail, or not. There's certainly ample evidence of his crime out there, but will they dig that deep when the counternarrative is so thoroughly corroborated? I honestly don't know how good Shipman is at his job, or if being a good detective translates into an arrest or a lack of arrest.

It's heady. Maybe irresponsible? But I like that it feels natural, and it's fun to let them play. I know there's been many comments about how stupid and sloppy Canon has been, and it's really true. I worked in schools for most of a decade, and you'd have to be a complete idiot to think you can keep crap like this invisible. But then, he's also a guy who never dreamed that his naughty thoughts would translate into naughty deeds, and now that they have, suddenly all those thoughts are possibilities, so... it'd be stupid *not* to live them out, right? (Right?) Sure, the sex is good, but work sex is better -- but it's also a great way to blow a good thing, you fucking moron, you lucky stupid clod and blah I just don't know what the guy's going to be overwhelmed by next.

Anyway, here we are, limitless possibilities, more to come, and happy Friday!

Comments

Addiction

Read and enjoyed, like you probably read before I quite like that this flows naturally. I'd be dissapointed if there were no obstacles or consequences to things. Mostly because you're writing's 'smarter' than wish-fulfillment and you can always spot some of the things beyond the horizon through the stories' underbrush. That being said, I'm eager to see where this new thread will lead. And also impressed that you wrote this in one day!

WDB

"Yeah, us girls are all hot, boobs and pussies and an excuse to bandy about the term ‘nubile’ in your head and whatever." *EARLIER, IN CANON'S HEAD* For a guy with a contact list full of nubile sex slaves, that was one hell of an achievement as far as I was concerned.

WDB

Really excellent chapter, mostly in the ways it's elevating the emotional components of the relationships. Like, there's *so much tension* coming into this chapter: Canon's freedom, Canon's job, the press, his social standing, all of it. But the chapter ends up spending way more time on Canon's guilt over what his freedom may cost the girls, and how his feelings for them have deepened. I love that? I love the *morality* of Canon in this one, where Oh Shit This Is Going To Ruin The Lives Of Four Women is treated as an actual regrettable outcome, not just collateral damage for Canon's safety. It's a way of reframing this situation as something that isn't just some binary Win/Loss (or Pass/Fail) for Canon alone, but something that could have life-altering consequences for Tabitha, Cassie, and the Sterns. I love that the story treats that so seriously. It's sweet, at a time where Canon could be completely selfish about his own skin. And that's part of a turn in this chapter that I also loved, where Tabitha and Cassie and (probably!) Taylor combine into a connection that *means something* to Canon, something more than just fucking. These women, this predicament, it's something Canon feels emboldened by, enriched by. He's become a version of himself that he doesn't want to lose, and it's because of how he feels when he thinks about these women. (Which, man, for all of y'all who think Taylor's on the outs: Canon spends a *lot* of time with Tabitha thinking about Taylor. Just saying!) I like that so much. I like these characters somehow finding something emotionally fulfilling in the chaos of brain-altering chemicals. This was just... it's a very sweet chapter, which I wasn't expecting. Really really liked it.

Ice Bear

In fairness, I got back from vacation late Sunday and took Monday to reacclimate and dog/kitty snuggle, so it took me four. It would've gone faster, but I kept deciding I needed time to think over what the tone/process should be re:charges, and I think I like it better than when I started and it was too maudlin and desperate. Might have been a realistic possibility, but lame tone. And yes, wish fulfillment is LAME. I wrote a piece forever ago under a different pseudonym using the Master PC device, because it's an easy vessel and I was less gud at coming up with my own stuff, but even then I did this whole thing where some doddering old jerk who was retiring from teaching thought it the MPC attachment was the school's new gradebook software, and he was all annoyed they were making him learn it for his final days, so he got all pissy in the comments and wrote all this shitty stuff that, of course, had hilarious and sexy consequences. Was way more fun than the typical, even if I didn't write it especially well.

Ice Bear

Dude. No joke, I did not do that nubile thing on purpose. I think the word was in my head because I cracked some super inappropriate joke using the term the other day, but it sure worked out nicely.

WDB

Maybe Tabitha's just so well-versed in MC-erotica tropes that she felt confident in her choice of words? Tabitha pledges to Ice Bear's Patreon CONFIRMED

Darryl Erentzen

LOL I guess I never commented here before or I might have picked a cool pseudonym... whatever. Nothing to hide.

WDB

Ha ha, good for you! And welcome aboard! You've got great taste!

ukyo_rulz

My favorite thing about Canon is that he can't help himself. He *knows* calling Tabitha over is a bad idea, but he does it anyway.

Jason

TBH I was a bit scared that if I criticized Canon in the comments you might take it personally, but I was curious after chapter 21 if Abby's spray intentionally made him ditzy.

cuzimhavingagoodtime

How would you feel about linking that? I'm pretty sure I would still find your writing readable and hot up even up to a pretty substantial hit in quality. I'd love to give it a go if your willing.

Addiction

Four is still impressive, I don't finish shit. :p And better to take your time and make it good than to rush it and be unsatisified. From my persepctive it sounds like a humble-brag though. :p "oh yeah, I could have finished this sooner but you know, it needed to be perfect" and here I am sitting in the wreckage of a billion unifinshed stories I just can't sit down to write. (not implying you intended it as such, just trying to think out loud while writing). I am most impressed, is what I'm saying. That story sounds good to read so I'll echo Bob's request above. Wish-fulfillment can be great tbh, if only for a few chapters and it can be brought well. (There's no bad stories, just bad execution and all that). That being said, their pattern is exceptionally boring usually, every chapter is a flowchart: introduce new girl -> apply control method -> Have sex - potentially introduce to harem and have sex -> Sex overflows into new chapter and the chart starts again. There usually no personality in the hypnotized or fucked islly girls, they're all some variation of worshipper or identical slut with few exceptions. Anyway ran over, apologies. Also I aprusely apologize for the terrible structuring of my initial post. The person responsible has been sacked. (it was because sleep deprivation).

Addiction

If you got to pick, what would your cool pseudonym be, we could probably just refer to you as that if you'd like. :p Also yes, Tabitha is great. Though my favourite of the whole bunch is still Isa. :)

cuzimhavingagoodtime

OK, let's get the unmitigated praise out of the way: Tabitha is amazing, her entire scene was amazing. She stole best girl out from Cassie with this one. Fucking bravo. So getting my thoughts out on the plot events, current and future, there's one important thing that comes to mind: This is not a particularly realistic story. A bunch of plot events have a pretty big helping of - well if you want to be uncharitable it's unrealistic railroading, but I prefer to think of it as magical realism. Things that don't make sense without a intentionally twisting the way you perceive it. I honestly don't think this is a problem, usually. So far, it's worked for the story. But I feel myself starting to get annoyed if/as the plot goes down the route of "super serious realistic unsexy consequences, Canon gets the rightful comeuppance for his recklessness and poor harem OPSEC. " Cause, really, he isn't! Both of the things Canon is going down for-The picture with Abby and the naked Harem in his room- Don't quite make sense! What the hell was his friend thinking? Forget kissing a student, a teacher has no business having any pics whatsoever of him kissing girls at a bar online, whoever the girl is. This is the kind of thing you get disciplined for, and there's no reason for 'Jay' not to know that. Who the fuck are these friends anyway? Canon is a nerdy adult highschool teacher, who's friends fucking publicly posts about their barcrawling and picking up girls apparently as gainfully employed adults, Does Canon party exclusively with college frat boys? And like, highschoolers know how highschools work. More people than Canon have that key, what if the janitor or one of the other department members needs something from the room? And Canon totally innocuously having another teacher with him as he opens the door is not like something that would only happen if he was already in deep trouble, teachers walk and talk in the halls sometimes. Every single person in that room is brainwashed into taking these risks really seriously, and at the bare minumum Tabitha is smart and levelheaded enough to know that the risk exists....So, by all logic, they shouldn't take it! And like I'm not really calling you out, or calling this/last chapter out as like awful, ruining the story, cause magical realism! This is the perfect thing to precipitate the next stage of the story, to create a *problem* that must be solved with wacky mind control hijinks. Like obviously, we at the very least need a way to dose that principle, and maybe Tabitha's mom, fun times to be had. But if this is instead a path to not fun times, like we are just going to deal with Canon losing his job and an investigation that involves very little exercises of sexy mindcontrol.... I mean come on. Canon is a really great protagonist for this kind of thing, because, with a little desperation and luck, he's smart enough to get himself out of jams, but not quite smart enough to avoid them in the first place. That's a character that you can do a lot of interesting things with! But it only works as long as he keeps on the rebound, he needs to keep having a way out that he's striving for- If he just fucks himself over and then has to wallow in the consequences, he becomes annoying and idiotic.

Ice Bear

Ha! No, you can criticize away. It is fair to say Canon is not the most self-aware dude. I think when he splashes onto the page, he's just a guy who's been easily seduced and doesn't think before he leaps because titties YAY. :D He seems to do well enough when he steps back and scrutinizes - taking on a security chief, upstaging Isa and Candy's plot, etc. - but in the moment is still young enough that his libido clouds just judgment pretty regularly.

Ice Bear

I definitely agree that a story about Canon going to prison and emerging many traumatizing years later to see if Shantel was right about Serenex's durability. A story without challenges is lame; an erotica tale with no erotica is worse. :) And I can only add: prisons and hospitals are full of people who took illogical risks. (Not exclusively, of course.)

InCompleteController

The story: Despite the stakes at the moment, this part was surprisingly calm. With all the loss of control, it’s good to see the group taking it slow and trying to figure out how to get through this. It’s also nice to see that Canon, deep down, cares about the girls around him, which just adds to my theory that Louisa and Candace would have been left alone if they just played their cards right. I would have liked to know a bit more about Abbie’s reaction to all of this, considering it was her idea that backfired spectacularly, harming not only Canon, but also her own ability to be his fantasy slut. As for the booty call, I can’t help but facepalm at how quickly Canon gave in to using his nubile sex slaves to ease his mind. I like the progression of Tabitha. To begin with she hadn’t changed much, since she assumed she always had his approval. However it didn’t take much for her to realize that this concept of approval might extend beyond their teacher/student relationship. It’s amazing to see how deep the thought process goes, that it wasn’t the spanking that got her off but the idea that Canon would want her to get off on being spanked. It’s a wild and dangerous path to take. If it wasn’t because of her belief that she can become so perfect that Canon wouldn’t need any other girls, I would be worried that she would start using Serenex herself. Although, I kind of hope to see what happens when she realizes that Canon likes the diversity in body types as well as the attention multiple girls can give him. The note: As for this note, yes I did expect things to get into the open eventually and I like how it was the bar scene that made it happen. What I didn’t like was how the girls were very casual about flaunting their sexuality at the school, that was a bit too much for me. Also, whilst it can be interesting to just let the characters actions just flow in order to create a story, there is the danger of getting swept away by it and be carried into the deep ocean where there’s no hope for the story flow in any given direction anymore. The gardener style of writing gives good characters, but a weak overarching plot. The architect style gives an amazing plot, but characters that only do stuff to progress the story. I do agree though, Canon would eventually take things further, but I like that it’s the girls that keep reading him like an open book and forces him to live out his fantasies. Thoughts and theories: As mentioned before, I think Tabitha will eventually realize that one girl isn’t going to be enough for Canon and that he will enjoy a little variety in bust sizes, among other things. She will likely become a bit like Abbie, someone that tries to fulfill Canon’s desires without him before he even knows them. The major difference being that Abbie will continue to be wild, whilst Tabitha will be methodical. I could easily picture a scene with Canon getting “caught” as someone walks in on him having fun with the girls, only to realize that the person has been dosed to ignore that type of behavior. Extra points if there’s a bit of cat and mouse game going on regarding if they are going to be caught or not. An example could be Canon interrupting a sleepover at the neighbors house, when Robby suddenly returns because he forgot something. As for how Canon gets out of this whole mess, I’ve got no clue. It’s very likely that Canon will take the plea deal being discussed, only for Horen to later back off after getting dosed. I’m not dismissing the idea of Louisa doing a 180 on the joke about dosing a technician in the hope of getting their hands on more Serenex to fix the situation. I doubt that she would bring up the idea, but I’m sure that she would be very turned on by the idea of an endless supply for Canon to use as he pleases. Although for stories sake, the supply should come with a degree of uncertainty of its effect.

InCompleteController

I thought it had been intentional as well. There's no doubt that Tabitha is the best at reading Canon. Although the list of girls that are able to read Canon is pretty extensive, despite what Canon likes to believe.

WDB

Yeah, for real. Is there *one* woman in this story who hasn't given him some version of Okay Hot Shot You Are Not As Clever As You Think You Are? Taylor, Tabitha, Abbie, Cassie's mom, Isa, Candy... he's not that opaque!

WDB

Tabitha... it's so weird to think of her being introduced late in the story, since she's seemed to consume all the attention of both Canon and the fans. It's almost like we're in the sequel to THAL, where all of your old Book One favorites recede to the background while the Hot New Character takes center stage. She's just really good, though, right? If the first chunk of the story was all about the fantasy of teaching some troublemaker how to follow direction, all of the Tabitha stuff is the flipside, where a shameless suckup goes to ever more debauched depths in search of approval. I don't know what point I'm making! I just like how the focus has swung from Taylor to Tabitha in ways that seem to be as illuminating for Canon as they do for the girls.

InCompleteController

Tabitha isn’t that special. She’s like Abbie, but methodical rather than chaotic in her approach on how to do things. So whilst it might seem like my fan theories about Tabitha takes center stage, it’s really just all my theories about Abbie that got split into two piles. Having sex in the middle of class would be an idea that could go either way. If Abbie pulls it off, the classroom would be loud and cheerful, almost making it into a competition of how many girls Canon could take. If it was Tabitha’s idea then the classroom would likely act very much like usual, except for Canon making the girls take turns to entertain him. With either plan the result would be Canon getting laid during class, the only difference being how the students would react to it. We also need to remember that Abbie has caused some issues of late. First the blowjob and now Canon getting fired, so it isn’t surprising that Tabitha would take center stage. Right now Tabitha is just the best fit for the downer mood that Canon is in. Whilst Cassie might have been as eager to please him, she’s waaay too chatty for the moment. Taylor would undoubtedly also be able to read the mood, but she tends to push Canon’s buttons whenever they are together.

WDB

So Tabitha's... comfort food?

Schmoopie

Cassie is the comfort food. Abbie is new restaurants. Taylor is what breaks your diet but you indulge in anyways, and Tabitha is a nutritionally customized meal plan.

Mr. Snrub

Just wanted to say that that Tabitha scene was absolutely pitch perfect. Someday I might have to commission you to write a piece set a year or two down the road in an alternate universe where Canon took her up on her suggestion (for her to be his one and only, perfect girl) and they run away together.

Thor Hansen

I really wanted at this point a portion of the story where Tabitha and Taylor had to work together to save Canon from something.