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Teaching Her A Lesson Part 27 (Patreon)

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2020-10-15 08:03:38
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[EDIT: This is NOT THE END OF THAL! The first line of the original post was only a bad joke about numbers. I promise I will actually finish the story and not just ... it with a weird sexless essay. Sorry for the tricksiness, folks!]

Here it is, the final post of Teaching Her A Lesson the number of which is a perfect cube. I don't mean to cut myself short, but I feel pretty confident we will not reach part 64 on this thing. This post, however, is something a little different. In part 26, we closed with Canon fishing Taylor's essay out of the trash and telling himself that yeah, maybe he'll read it, eventually, if there's time, blahdy blah. 

So part 27 is just the essay, as composed by none other than Taylor Stern herself. For you grammar fiends, she has made some errors, but remember, she's not a pro. (Can you imagine a professional author releasing work with errors in it? Unimaginable!) There's no introduction, no context, just a header and an essay. I won't set it up any more than that, so without further ado: Taylor Stern, writing about Ralph Waldo Emerson. One of the weirdest writing experiments I've ever done. :)

PS, if you haven't joined us on discord, there's a ton of groovy people joining in, so come on down, the water's great. I hoped I'd get a few people popping in, but so far I have been blown away by the responsiveness. Sorry I didn't do this sooner!

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skinnyrandompatron

So two points i would like to made: 1. Thats gonna make one hell of an akward read for the second auditor :D 2. What do you mean "final post"?? You have resolved nothing! This essay is basically an open ending. Back to your writing desk and gimme some more!

Paddy

Ok so that was actually awesome

InCompleteController

The post: I agree with you that this story seems to be wrapping up. There are a few things which I believe is forcing the story in that direction. Not saying that a never ending story is better, just that a choice was made. The primary reason for the story to come to a close would be that it’s the end of school. A lot of the driving force behind the story was the forbidden student/teacher relationship, which is soon to be over. Another reason is the lack of conflicting personalities. The only one that has really tried to mess things up was Louisa. I loved the fire, but that flame has now been tamed. Beyond that the wildest thing has been Taylor making Tabitha write 100 lines on the blackboard. There’s a strange lack of competition for being the #1 girl, especially from Abbie who seem to take it rather well that Canon is stuffing the other girls instead of her. The story: What a genius way to pull back the curtains a little. The story is still firmly planted in Canon’s perspective, but this way we also get to hear some of Taylor’s thoughts and feelings. Admittedly there are likely to be some bias as she is knowingly writing her thoughts down with the intent that Canon is going to read them. So the narrator of this part is definitely unreliable, be it direct lies, lies by omission or simply wishful thinking. As someone with English as their 2nd language there’s a lot of authors that go over my head, although there was never a point where I just skipped the text. It’s interesting to see how much empowered Taylor got by puberty and how much she realized that people wanted her all of the sudden, rather than avoiding her. I do like that we get the sense that she’s just in Canon’s class due to him being the hot teacher, and that he’s right on the edge of falling for her. He never gives in and takes her but at the same time he rarely calls her out on her displays. I remember reading about the 2nd detention and how it really felt like Taylor had figured Canon out. Turns out that she had figured him out long before, but now she just wanted him to give in to the feelings he had shown her. It really feels like Taylor might have been able to have sex on Canon’s desk if Abbie hadn’t gotten involved at that point. I’m a bit unsure about if the events after, at Canon’s house, is real or not. Personally I think that it was the plan, since it explains how Abbie managed to overpower Taylor, but I question that Abbie isn’t really Taylor’s boss. My take is that Abbie and Taylor disagreed about them being nothing but pieces of meat for Canon, and that she truly got sprayed as well. That said, Taylor’s thoughts aren’t being manipulated, so abusing the privileges of being the CEO of the Stern household comes with some rather hefty push back from one of the employees. There was never a point where I can say that Taylor did something she 100% wouldn’t have done if Abbie didn’t command her. So it can very well be that both of the Sterns have always been scheming together. One reason for me believing that Taylor isn’t being entirely truthful is the events around Cassie. Taylor omits going into detail about what happened. It just comes off as a bit too neutral for me, especially considering the incestual encounter Taylor got involved in. The stuff at Louisa and Candace I could see why she enjoyed. Canon forcing his will upon other girls whilst he focused on her is hot as hell. The thing about Tabitha makes sense though. I can understand why Abbie might play a bit more fast and lose with implanting suggestions, but Taylor wanting something extra due to her personal connection with them. Finally the goddess bit. What a blow to her ego it must be that Tabitha, someone she helped mold into Canon’s perfect pet, is taking her spot. Thoughts and theories: Whilst I do believe you have written yourself into a corner with this years students, I don’t think the story has to end. Taylor and Tabitha are both very much competing for his attention and Cassie is still connected to the neighbor. The story has to shift gears, true, but I don’t think it has to end. A really easy way to keep the story going would be for Taylor to feed into the god complex she has about Canon and herself. She might have been denied sex at school now, but who is to say that she can’t bother him the next year and go for something grander? Sex on the principals desk or in class are still an option. Much of the difference between Canon’s and Taylor’s version of being a pussy comes from the consequences Canon faces for his action. So if Taylor truly want to set Canon free and let him become the god that she has always wanted then she needs to find a way to ensure that there are no consequences for their actions. Not only should Canon be able to take her in his office, but he should be able to tell everyone else in there to get out. Have them all know what he’s doing with her and there not being a damn thing they can do about it.

Xuk

Most of us saw something like this coming, especially after the Wild Things referenced, hitting us over the head, eh teach? But seriously, officer Barbie recommended serenex, surely that needs to be explained? As does the reason for Justin’s submission, it would take a hell of a lot to convince a straight man to do that to someone he hates, then to make jokes about dick breath...? The story could end here sure and my goodness it is a good part to end, but Taylor needs to be reconciled to humanity, perhaps as does Canon, though that would destroy the fantasy. Cassie and Abbie need to find their way and what will be Taylor’s and (ms perfect?) path? Both are obviously attractive and intelligent, but as someone who has seen many intelligent and and attractive individuals flounder hard in life after receiving such a huge wake up call as this (ask me how I know?). Anyways, good job and please keep it up.

ZeroCross

It took me way longer than it should have, to understand that it wasn't the last post but rather the last post whose number was a perfect cube.

WDB

Hi where can I pledge to Taylor's Patreon please and thank you

WDB

" I did what I thought was right, and chased after what I wanted. I even got to have it, for a while, and hold onto it until it felt the need to squirm loose. That’s more than most people can say, I guess." That's it. That's where I started crying. It's a chapter that's vulnerable and insightful and funny and caustic and *intensely sad* in a way that Ice Bear's writing is maybe best at. It's this woman who got to be the real her and lost it all, in the midst of a harem-style MC erotica serial. Obviously, A+ on some of the long-simmering twists that will make an eventual re-read pretty goddamn rewarding. (I guess the folks who theorized that some of the Taylor commands had worn off were half-right!) It's nice to get that plot stuff nailed down, explicated in ways beyond exposition. It makes this a crucial chapter, plot-wise. But, shit, I can't pretend to value that in the same way I value *truly discovering* who Taylor is. This weird bundle of societal expectation and too-young societal disappointment, a hot girl who will always hate hot girls, and how liberated she felt by every terrifying thing that's happened in this story. The relationship she has with Canon... I don't want to fall back on song lyrics, but I will, and you can't stop me. (Taylor was right! To quote Achewood, "Being in trouble is a fake thing.") It's from a song by Superchunk, because it's *always* from a song by Superchunk with me: "Time and transition is a wave that will put you overboard Where the darkness is a bed and you can sleep 'Til someone tells you that they know you and they do" Canon was someone who had potential, someone that really got how she saw the world... until he didn't, until he squandered it. The loss of him isn't just the loss of a lover, it's the loss of a soulmate. It's someone she thought could validate her worldview, her experiences; but he's just another jailer, just another prisoner. I really loved this. It's the least hot thing I've ever read by Ice Bear, even the porn stories that I've hated. (There are a couple of those! I don't give free passes!) But it's one of the most affecting things I've had the pleasure to read on this site, and I love that it gets to exist. Thank you, Taylor Stern.

Ice Bear

Only the final perfect-cube-numbered post! We could all the way up to 63 still. Panic not! I would never end this on that ambiguous of an ending.

Ice Bear

In regards to the Ending issue, I hear you. I think when I say it's coming to an "end," I mostly mean having an emotionally satisfying place to stick in a bookmark. There's no reason at all that there couldn't be tons more to say and do with these characters/setting after the point where we'll close this, and sentimental as I get for my characters, I can't imagine I won't be back at some point(s).

ZeroCross

You're not cubic

InCompleteController

I feel you. It will be good to have a point where you can say "I'm done for now", but leave the possibilities open to add a continuation later on. Like I say, I feel like there's enough meat on the story for it to continue, although I will continue to say you set yourself up with starting so close to the end of school.

Ice Bear

You are not wrong. There were some (valid) criticisms during TIOS about how convenient it was that every last senior at Northside was already 18 way back in October, so I figured I'd make it a little more palatable this time around. That's combined with my initial inkling that this story might go 3, maaaaaybe 5 posts, so I never figured there would be much sentiment built up around a premature ending. :P (Oops.)

Ferrum1

This chapter should have come out way back in the story, imo. I think I might have referenced it before, but I've always found the Not-Canon characters to be rather flat and one dimensional because we never really got to see anything about what was going on in their heads unless they were spelling it out for Canon. Now, after weeks and weeks of seeing Taylor built up to be a harridan, we discover that she's got some deep thoughts going on and maybe isn't as bad as we were led to believe? Don't care. Too late. Wouldn't it have been neat to see this Taylor struggling with those Emerson quotes and the Serenex experience? Wouldn't it have been fun to see the whole thing from both Canon's and Taylor's perspectives? Sure, it would have been more of a jumble if the story showed both sides of the conflict, and I can certainly see reasons for keeping it focused on Canon. That said, I would have liked to see this Taylor's struggle. I would have liked to have known this girl. Unfortunately, I don't think we can have both. This "new" Taylor is in direct conflict with chapter after chapter of her as mean, despicable, cruel, heartless, and manipulative - and now we're supposed to care that she had a wounded childhood or is, in some way, a really deep thinker who was only trying to help where she could? It was certainly well-written and I enjoyed reading about her thoughts and motivations, ignorant as they were. This goes back to what I was saying earlier about how a more formed character makes for a more fun story. Hopefully, Canon's adventures aren't over. While the school year is ending, I never really picked up on that as the main Crux of his situation. While it's true that he was going to be in big trouble for screwing the students, I always thought the biggest cross to bear was simply learning how to deal with what had been done to him and the many women now in his orbit. He's a lucky man, obviously, but now he needs to figure out how to live with a harem. That, to me, was always the interesting and problematic part. Kudos for writing this chapter and spelling things out from Taylor's point of view. You've added depth and meaning to that character, shown something of who she is, and that makes her more relatable. I'd dearly love to see the same done for the other's! Candy and Isa have a relationship that's been all sorts of turned upside down, yet we know almost nothing about them or what's going on in their heads. Same with Cassie and her mom. Tabitha, I think, is the one in the worst shape because she's all alone, not having a partner to talk things out with. She seems to like Cassie well enough, but doesn't live with Cassie and can't cry on anyone's shoulder when the pressure gets too much. I still think there was something about Taylor making Tabitha write 100x on the board. She said something about Canon liking his new toy, implying that something new was being done there. I could be wrong, but... I guess we'll all have to see. Was it just some juvenile punishment from the bitch we've all come to despise? Or was it something more than that, and Tabitha is going to have a whole new outlook on life? In the end, there are a dozen ways this story could go. I'd like to see two or three chapters devoted to each couple/group/person just so we can learn more about them and how the Serenex has impacted their lives.

WDB

Re: Taylor's reveal coming too late in the series - Hmm. Not sure I agree? I think the idea of a character's motivation coming too late to be narratively useful ("Oh, so THAT'S why she drowned all of those children! Well, now I feel like an asshole for trying to arrest her.") is relevant, but it's also relative? If you think Taylor's a subpar character for 26 chapters, then maybe her essay is too little, too late. But if you're a fan, it's adding depth and complexity to someone you're naturally invested in.

Ferrum1

From where I'm standing, it almost seems like a gimmick to make the character more likable after the author saw so many comments about how she just wasn't fitting in or worth all the trouble. Not saying that's the case, only an example of how the chapter might be seen. Does it make Taylor more relevant and relatable? Sure. But then we have to wonder why she's worth the aggravation to do that after all the chapters where she was written as naught more than a shrew. Page after page of her portrayed as a nightmare, almost getting people fired or thrown in jail, but it's okay now because her essay shows us another side of her. Of course, everyone has their take on the issue, and I know Taylor has a ton of fans. I thought she made for a good antagonist, so it's a bit jarring to see something of a plot twist that makes her out to be something different entirely. You're right that the essay adds depth and complexity to the character. What I tried to point out earlier is that those things would have done the story a lot more good if they had been introduced early on as the story was unfolding. And I say the same thing about all the girls in the harem. IB wrote Taylor to be a horrible person, but we never got to see the motivations, dreams and desires that made up Taylor. Everything about her was superficial, just like the other enslaved girls. We got to see some of the inner dialogue and mental machinations of Canon because the story is written from his POV and he's the central character, but he's the only character that's really fleshed out to any degree. Going back to the side stories in the TIOS universe (which I've just done and loved doing it), I thought they added a ton to the main story even though they were wholly disconnected from the story. It's odd, I know, but I felt like I had a better understanding of the universe and the characters because they finally had a chance to get fleshed out a bit. For Taylor, I loved seeing something of her background and where she's coming from. It totally changed my perception of her (except her gross myopia and ignorance) and I really regret that we've spent so long NOT seeing her more fully. From her essay, she seems troubled and unhappy, but not a complete wretch. If we'd seen more of that in the early half of the story, things would have been far more entertaining. It can be very difficult to spin a yarn, I'm sure. But I can't help thinking that it would have been a lot more fun if we could have learned more about who these girls are, what they're going through, how they're dealing with having their lives completely upended, etc. Sure, they see it as the new normal, but is there ZERO conflict in their minds? How do they blend that new normal in with their otherwise normal not-a-sex-slave lives? How has the Serenex exposure really impacted them? What are they up to when they aren't in Canon's bed? Maybe someone like Cassie is entirely okay with it, but how is she dealing with her mom also being trapped in the web? What kind of conversations are they having next door? How has Cassie's mom helped her become a better booty call for Canon? In the last chapter, Canon asks about how Candy and Isa are getting along in their private lives, but the conversation goes nowhere and we still have no actual idea who these women are or how their Indoctrination is impacting them on personally and professionally. We got tidbits, sure, but there's an entire story or three just in the two of them trying to deal with the changes they're going through. Maybe those stories will come up next. Maybe the next five chapters will be nothing more than Candy and Isa POV from the time after Taylor/Abby get them with a second dose of the Serenex and really turn their world upside down. I'm still waiting on the continuation of Losers, too. We really need to see what happens next in that universe!!!

InCompleteController

Right, hadn't accounted for the difference in school systems. That one always sneaks up on me somehow.

WDB

Sure, I get you, but it's really a Your Mileage Might Vary situation. As a Taylor fan, I'm glad that we got her essay this late in the story, because it's the culmination (or near-culmination) of her arc. If her motivation had been discussed way earlier, it might've humanized her, but it would've robbed the story of so much mystery and tension. This is the type of thing you *should* wait for in this story, because it's a pivotal reveal. Taylor's a main character (and possibly the title character), so something as game-changing as her backstory needs to be delayed as long as possible. But, y'know, that's all easy for me to say because I'm a Taylor fan. If you'e not, I can see how this all feels like someone making a last-minute try to salvage reader interest. I mean, I don't think that; this works so well for me in the story that I can't imagine Ice Bear threw this together to sway Taylor haters. (I don't... I'm not sure someone who ate a ton of hate mail over the years is that prone to placating readers?) After 27 chapters, it feels like minds are made up about the characters. If you've already decided that Taylor isn't worth Canon's time, I'm not sure any piece of writing is going to save her. But, for me, I thought that keeping Taylor's motivations opaque (and then keeping Taylor absent entirely) made for a character that was pointedly easy to misunderstand, which made the inevitable reveal of who she really was something that struck like a lightning bolt. Your mileage may vary!

Xuk

Ice man I am going NUTS here!! When’s the next chapter going to drop? I’m about to start writing it myself for f’s sake! Just kidding, id rather it be good than quick crap, I just really expected it Sunday, and here it is going on Wednesday and, well, I need my next fix!!!

skinnyrandompatron

Re: Does not work for Taylor. Sorry, but to me it seems you missed a lot of hints that Taylor is indeed not so terrible. In fact i would say that kinda a lot of bad stuff Taylor has allegedly be done is only presented in exposition. So far we have apart mayhaps from the chapstick incident Taylor not doing anything really bad, at least in my eyes. And that she is actually not that bad was also pretty obvious to me for quite some time. Regarding the point of rather flat characters: Your point here falls kind of hollow if you now berate the extension of Taylors background :D Though i have to admit you might be right, i would also like to point out that it is way harder to write fully-fleshed characters in a real storyline, then you might think. Especially for periodic releases like this one i would argue rather more for more plot then background into the characters.

Ferrum1

As a reader, it's not my job to interpret "hints". That's even if you and I agree as to what constitutes a "hint". Trying to infer from what the author writes doesn't make your assumptions correct - which is why we call it an inference. You'll note that nowhere did I "berate the extension". I said that it came late to the party. I said that it added depth to the character and explained things that weren't clear before. I even said that it made me like THAT Taylor a little bit. But there was no berating involved anywhere. The Taylor in the essay is a character that I'd like to know, and never got the chance to meet. You're right that it's hard to write fully-fleshed characters in a story. That's why I always prefer smaller casts and longer stories. I want to know about the people involved so they feel more real. Taylor reminds me of a lot of idiots I've met in life. How she's been portrayed is all that any of us has to go on. Trying to infer or dig for hints doesn't work for me because I never know if I'm going to be right in my interpretation. As such, I'm not going to try and concoct reasons to like her or feel bad for her. If it's not spelled out in black-n-white so I know exactly where the author is going... tough. Not my job to like a particular character or agree with everyone's assessment of her. Do the characters come across as a bit flat? Sure. They have to because not enough time is spent with them. The whole story is told from Canon's perspective, which is perfectly fine. Aside from Cassie, none of the other women get info-dumps that give you more than a glimpse into what's happening in their lives since all this began. That has to happen when you have so many people involved and are telling things from only one perspective. If Canon doesn't think about it, or think to ask about it, how could we know anything about the others? The only clue you get is when they're talking to Canon, and that's very limited. Not a worry for me, though, because the story's been enjoyable to date. I like who I like, and don't like who I don't like. You get your pick, too. :D If you step back and take a fresh look at Taylor, ignoring the essay's spelled-out insights, what about her is really appealing beyond the fucking? Is she polite? Friendly? Well-spoken? Mature? Reasonable? Caring? Educated? Refined? Elegant? Or, is she portrayed as trailer park trash trying hard to be ghetto, willing to happily enslave other girls, doing what ever she wants regardless of the consequences to herself and others? Canon can talk all day long about getting through to her, seeing great potential and all that. Everyone wants to help the ugly duckling transform and achieve greatness. Unfortunately, there comes a time when you have to cut and run. Throughout the entire story, Taylor/Abby have done nothing but cause problems. They're not even fun to talk to because they're so ignorant. Even in her essay, you can see that she cherrypicks quotes that affirm her negative, selfish behavior. Given the choice between the Stern sisters and any other character, I'll choose any other character. Even if you accept that they are wounded and just need a little TLC... my point has consistently been that they are not worth the trouble they bring. Until the essay dropped, you had no solid evidence of any good in them. Canon's thoughts were just that - his thoughts - and he could have been entirely wrong in his assessment because he wasn't privy to all the information. As such, you don't know if his thoughts were on point or missing the mark. All you can do is go by what's written and make a mature decision. You want to bang some hot teenage ass, great. Again, why put up with the Sterns when you have two other hotties? Is she so much better looking than them that she's worth the trouble? My answer is no. Especially not after you've banged her a few times in the story. You liked it, got it, now eject from the situation and get to a safe place. If Conor had followed my advice in those early days.... he would never have been busted by the principal and those other girls wouldn't have been enslaved. In the end, that's the lesson you get to take home with you because that's the one thing the author wrote down for us. If Canon had only dosed the Sterns a second time to make sure they were under his control instead of whining and crying all the time... none of the others would have been enslaved. If only he hadn't been a pussy! :D

R Masters

Loved it, and it made sense of a lot of things that always felt right about Taylor. So proud of her for chasing what she wanted and then moving on when she failed to get it. And as much as Abbie as the mastermind made for great erotica, Taylor as the real motivator makes for a great story. You said this isn't the end, but if it were I'd be satisfied.