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For Whom The Belle Tolls - Chapter 38. (Patreon)

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WARNING: More sex. Face sitting, breeding kink (I'm so sorry if this is too intense! I welcome all feedback, truly)

Some advice I was given for combating getting stuck in a scene was "Kill someone." I decided to make them horny for each other instead because I'm self indulgent that way. Honestly, I don't know if this one is too weird but it was brought to you by insomnia brainstorming. 

I'm concerned about writing Bel and Lily's desire to have a biological child in a way that disparages the adoption of Sharkie, and I'm hoping for an opinion from you guys on that. I want to acknowledge that its different without making one better or worse than the other. 

Also, the new character's name pronunciation is Osmodai = Oz-mow-die 

As always, please don't share or post this anywhere else, unless you are letting your partner or friend read it on your account. I welcome all your comments and constructive feedback! 

Thank you for your patience, 


Jaysea 

Comments

MaraBellJade

I’ve been on pins and needles waiting for this. You’ve made my day! Best way to forget about my 3day migraine.

Jayde Gammie

Promised myself I would read slowly so I didn't catch up too quickly.... that was 48 hours ago.... oops. Haven't cried and sobbed over a story in a really long time. Love it

William Lynds

Sharkie asking about a sibling. I know she's not a fan of the process of making a sibling but she seems pretty excited of the idea of having a sibling in the TT series.

MaraBellJade
>>119383566

I know! I haven't laughed or ugly cried over a book like I have with FWTBT in so long.

Jayde Gammie
>>119383566

I hope it's published because I need to hold it. It's just absurdly brilliant. I'm holding my breath to meet the rest of the team.

Anij Walker

I'm not sure how I would bring up how they want a biological child. But with explaining it to sharkie, I would point out that it doesn't mean you love her any less, you just expanded your family. That being said... this was an amazing chapter, and poor sharkie 😆

Trish Ramey

Amazing. The underlying want of Bel and Lily in this chapter... ugh. All the feels.

Sean Boyd

Great chapter! I have loved the progress of this story. I will note 1 typo: bottom of the 4th page you have a phrase repetition with Osmodai's horn bumps.

Rian Domi

Hot daaaaamn they really meant SIT. Also I think there’s a tiny typo here it was the only one I noticed. “If the rolls were reversed what you do?” It’s missing a “would” I believe.

Malak El Dessouki

Im so excited for them to find out they can have kids

Vic Hill

This is gonna be one of the weirdest compliments I've ever given: I really enjoy the smut you write. It conveys what it needs to without being over the top or cringey (in my opinion). I'm not sure how best to approach the Sharkie adoption in consideration with a possible biological child, but I have no doubt you'll approach it in a researched and considerate way when you do. Thank you for sharing your writing with us!

LE Clark

this was written perfectly. i absolutely love how asmodeus is written in this series!!! maybe first you could go about writing about how they figure out if they can have children? i’ve watched all of hells belles but i haven’t seen the conversation of them losing their mortality- but i don’t think you’ve overstepped at all. i love this series so much and can’t wait to read it as a book.

Kori

The ‘FINALLY’ that came out of my mouth when this posted… I didn’t know my voice could get that deep. It was guttural. This chapter was fantastic as always. Can’t wait for more.

SpinningInPlace

Sooo good…all the right mix of spice and tenderness and FEELS!!!

BaconVader

Loved it. A little smutty and a little sweet. Perfect balance. 😎🔥

Rayna Kenawell

Thump instead of thumb on page 16 was the only typo I saw, but this was an amazing chapter! Love the spice, and love love love the way you handled the discussion between lily and sharkie. Also cackled out loud when sharkie walked in on them.

Elizabeth

There are lines you have said and or written that show how sweet but chaotic sharkie is. I think the last line of this chapter is the newest addition to that list.

SeaYaLater
>>119384484

Now imagine me trying to mimic the noise that came out of Lily when she got squished and feel free to laugh as hard as I did when I realized what I was doing 😅

Anna

This was everything

Kenyoda Adams

Sweet chapter! Also, I noticed that 'rolls' should be 'roles' there was the missing 'would' in 'what you do if...'. You also wrote lien instead of line 'Sariah must have seen her expression and lien of sight'.

MzDivaShay
>>119383649

I think that’s a wonderful idea. Maybe Sharkie could come home from school and ask after a class on reproduction. Or a friend could be getting a sibling and they could ask when they’re going to get one.

William Lynds
>>119383566

I'm excited to hear more about how Penny turns Greg's world upside down and inside out.

Kaylie

Brilliant as always! Gotta love the tender moments and the unintentional traumatizing moments 🤣 One catch… on page 17, rolls should be roles ☺️

C Williams

"It seems messy and noisy." Yeah that sums it up. Excellent as always. There are a few typos, but its not much. 🤙 Also, as the adopted kid (I was first) then 2 sisters arrived when I was 8&9, communication is key. Making Sharkie understand they will not be loved any less and are not any less their child is huge.

Embeth Arreyn

So obviously I loved the chapter, that's a given. Brief grammatical note: right at the end, talking about going to the funeral, you said "if our rolls were reversed," should have been "if our roles were reversed." Only one I caught. I was honestly a bit distracted as I read, because I was thinking about your question about biological children. It's something my husband and I have been thinking about a lot, because my son (age 11) is from my previous relationship. He's not my husband's, biologically. I also have a stepson from that previous relationship (got rid of his father, kept him lol). I've always said that I have two kids: one store bought, one home grown. My ex and I got custody of my stepson when he was 8 and I was 23 (my ex is 10 years older than me), and I was 7 months pregnant. So I very much get Lily feeling a bit thrown into parenting- I'd been fun weekend stepmom for a few months at 22 years old, had a birthday, and abruptly got custody of an 8 year old while most of the way through growing him a little brother. Suddenly I was doing school mornings, parent-teacher conferences, homework, with this 8 year old, with all his other, older, more experienced parents off working or just not in the picture. It was a crazy time, but one thing I made sure of was that my stepson knew we weren't replacing him. But it wasn't quite the same, because he wasn't so much worried about me. I was new. We were kind of thrown together, and I love that boy, but honestly, he didn't really care about his new younger nearly as much as he needed help navigating his own life, so I just tried to be what he needed. Now fast forward 11 years- my stepson is in his 20's, off doing his own thing, but my son (the home-grown one lol) and I have been "the two of us against the world" for a lot of years. We did our own thing while I was still with his dad (it was a DV situation, not fun), and then spent years just the two of us before my now-husband and I got together. Husband and I have been married a year now, and I've been bringing up kids. I want two with him, I want to try for a girl. But it's been really hard- how do I justify basically resetting the clock on our family? Will my son feel replaced, will he feel like he wasn't good enough, like our little family of 3 isn't enough? If I can't answer these questions for myself, how can I answer them for him? So yeah, been doing a lot of thinking. And for me, what it comes down to is that the experiences aren't better or worse, they're just different. I don't want to create a better child, I want to experience pregnancy and partnership with my husband, the way we didn't get to when I had my son. Doesn't make my son any less loved- frankly, part of what's holding me up is the thought that how could I possibly love another child the way I love my son? And he and my husband absolutely adore each other, they have such a great relationship, and my husband got to skip the "constant crying, no sleep, spitting up, diapers" phase and jump straight into "we build Legos and jump on the trampoline and play video games together" part of life, and that kicks so much ass. And I feel like that's Lily and Bel with Sharkie- they got to meet each other when Sharkie was already a whole, amazing person who could articulate their passions and ask questions. They got to skip the incredibly frustrating years of wailing, "Please I'm begging you, just tell me what you want!!" at a sobbing infant at 3 in the morning. But now why sign up for that? Why want that? Not because it's better or worse, but because it's an experience they want to have. Sorry, I think in metaphors, but if you've been craving pizza and someone gives you free sushi, you're never going to complain about the sushi. You're going to love the hell out of it and enjoy every bite. But after, you might still want the pizza, too. If you have a favorite hike, you're allowed to want to try out a new one. Doesn't mean you don't still love your first favorite hike, but existence is about having experiences, and growing your own child from scratch is one of the big ones. Doing it as a team with a loving partner, feeling that love together, is an even bigger experience. And I feel like growing a child from scratch with not just your partner, but your first child who's old enough to be involved in the pregnancy and baby-care process as well... it just feels like an unbeatable team, and it feels like the love in the standard "parent partnership" version of pregnancy and infant-years just gets amplified when you do it as a team with your first kid. I've realized that there's no way I'd be excluding my son from my next pregnancy. (I shouldn't have to say this but obviously he's, uh, not invited to the conception. People on the internet can be messed up, so making sure it's firmly established that no, I'm not, yeah, anyway.) Like he'll be there with me through the fetus growing, after my partner and me he'll be the first one to hold the baby, stay in the hospital with us, like I'm not parentifying him, he's not a built-in babysitter or anything, he's just 100% from the door a huge fixture in any new baby's life. There's no shutting him out, this is his baby too, his sibling. And I just feel like looking at it that way, as a new and different adventure the characters get to take together as a family, each of them bringing something different to the table for this baby... that's where it's at. Sorry this was long, hope it helps ❤️

RubyRedDemise

The best advice I would give on how to bring that up is to reiterate how it doesn’t matter how a child comes to be yours they are still yours. And no matter how many children you have the love never fades and there is plenty for all. Hope that helps!

Aj Holder

I don’t know how to bring it up maybe with sharkie questioning siblings?

Kristiane Laucht

I'm reading this in public, still have 8 pages left, but the insane cackle I let out when Bel body slammed Lily probably got me on the shopping centres watch list. Fuck me, that should not have been as funny to me as it was. 🤣🤣🤣

Jayde Gammie
>>119383566

And then puts it completely right. I love reading a good story for the first time. And then get sad I can't read it again for the first time

Em

As a grown adoptee who also has experience mentoring adopted kids I think you’ve done a great job so far at writing Lily and Bel’s desire to have a bio kid. Sharkie never feels left out of the equation to me. If you want advice I would say communication is key. It could be a good idea to emphasize that its not just Lily and Bel having a baby its Sharkie getting a sibling. They’re growing the family together and that means there’s even more love to go around. (Also I know this is far in the future because Hells Belles hasn’t even hit it yet but being careful about “he has your nose” kind of conversation around Sharkie if Lily and Bel ever have a kid)

Mark

Love the depth of feelings you're able to convey in such short chapters. Always advancing the narrative. Superb as always *chef's kiss*. Can't wait to buy a hard copy at your book signing event. Now, as the former exec of a publishing company (and your free editor 🥰), I caught a few very tiny typos that spellcheck wouldn't catch. Other readers have mentioned some, but I also noticed ...... "grief ghost ON her face" (not "one"). Again, love your writing and keep up the fantastic work.

Kristiane Laucht

Bel, Azzy, by guys, my bros, my boys, even the 85 couldn't stop them, wouldn't stop them. You have no chance.

Shay

Personally, I would just sit Sharkie down and tell her that Bel and I (as Lily, obviously) want to give her a brother or sister. We love her more than we ever knew was possible but we think more littles would be better because we feel like our family isn't complete yet. Or something to that effect. Don't make it an adopted vs "natural" child convo. Make it a more we want *our family* to grow convo. Or that's my thoughts..

Shadowkitten

First NEVER stop writing!!! Second I can't wait to read everyone's back stories (begging you to write them all). Thank you for another great chapter. Question is Bel ever going to let lily touch his wings?

Peter Psareas

Almost every chapter you use lines that just slay me. Sometimes profound. Sometimes Finn. Sometimes sad. This one on first read was he banished it from the house like it had personally offended him. Just great. I liked this chapter a lot. I think Sharkie will love being a big sister. Also her first walk in and Lily’ explaining it. Just great. Thank you again.

ava
>>119384238

i was thinking the same thing! if i remember correctly they still don’t know that its even possible for them to have children and considering the reincarnation storyline, you could transition into the convo about children once lily finds out she can lose her morality

Oliver Aurora Sandane

Amazing chapter as always! This is one of the highlights of my week when you post. Only thing I would say to be a bit nitpick-y; Page 4, when describing Osmodai, it seems like you forgot to backspace after rewriting. "...where his horns would his horns would someday grow..."

Thomas Forrest

Another obligatory “Amazing chapter!” given! While I loved all of it, I think my favorite thing about this chapter was not only the love and care that Sariah and Azzy had with everyone in the room, but just the love that Azzy and Sariah share with each other. Both of them saying that they each married up made my heart soar!!! I’ll be honest, I was extremely skeptical when the two of them were initially introduced (you can only have so many great characters before some of them start being duds, right?), but I am SO GLAD that I was so wrong! They quickly became one of my favorite couples, and I hope to share in the unconditional and total love that they share together someday! Long story short: This chapter is yet again a great one, and I can’t wait to buy my copy of the beefcake! Keep up the amazing work Jaysea! PS: I recognize that I am extremely unqualified in providing you an opinion on the Sharkie and bio child question, so in the interim (wink wink), allow me to direct you to some of the other comments on this chapter. I saw some amazing ideas that may fit into your grand vision! Good luck!

LE Clark
>>119384238

i think sharkie would love to have a sibling- i wasn’t adopted but i’m the oldest of 3 and my little siblings are my favorite humans ever. it obviously isn’t always perfect being a sibling but i feel like as long as it’s expressed that your love doesn’t need to have limits it’s all good. just because sharkie already takes up their hearts doesn’t mean that another child can overthrow that love- it just means they can grow and increase their support and happiness together. plus seeing the little shark teach another one the ropes has to be the cutest thing in the world. i’m not sure if i’ll be able to have kids due to my endometriosis but i know that even if i adopt i will love my kids all the same. i’m loving the transition into lily losing her mortality- it’s almost as if she was always meant to be there. the universe seems to be on her side. and for the record i couldn’t tell there was any writers block. so amazing. pls bring in little O to tik tok!!!!!?!

Peter Psareas

I need to prepare for the funeral chapter. Extra tissues go sute

lauren_and_georgie

It was really good! I don't feel like they pushwd Sharkie to the side at all. You can feel how much they love her. You can alos feel how much they also want something together as well. i think you did a great job of showing that it doesn't change how much they love Sharkie

Ash hart

Great read for post 69!! Love your content!

Bianca Nicole

I mean technically you can avoid bringing it up with Sharkie until after they learn there is a way for lily to get pregnant. Because before that Lily having a baby can just be explained as something she wanted to have happen in her mortal life. A dream she had before she died and met sharkie. I think explaining that it is something they both wanted before Lily and Bel knew each other and before they knew sharkie can help, in addition to saying they would make an amazing sibling especially all the fun they have when playing with Bels nieces and nephews. Or saying how close both Bel and Lily are with their siblings is something they want for their kids. I think they have a few ways to explain that it isn't because Sharkie isn't good enough/replaceable but because they want more kick ass kids like Sharkie and for them to have siblings to love and bond and make amazing memories with.

Kwon MaiLi

Reading the new chapter is my morning ritual on Sundays, sometimes Mondays. I love the story and what you make with it, I cry with them, I laugh with them. It's very personal, but I much rather them have sex than one of the characters dying permanently... there is so much sadness and agony and loss in the world, I read for my pleasure. And I know a little aching or war happens and is sometimes needed to not have a too cheesy story, but I much rather them fuck than die. XD I don't feel like you pushed sharkie to the side, they are lily's and bels child and another kid doesn't mean they get loved less, it's just another person you can love. There were two things I saw, one was on page 4 on the bottom (doubling of "where his horns"), and on page 17, Sariah asking Azzy "if the ROLLS (not roles) were reversed". Otherwise... Ma'am, you have extraordinary writing skills, and I am so glad that you decided to write this story ❤️ also, give us the absolute BEEFCAKE of a book xD

Cassie Tudor

Soo good, I don’t think it was weird at all.

Samantha Johnson

The chapters are too short, I finish them much too quickly then I have to wait again. As always a wonderful job of writing the spicy and the poignant. I absolutely adored it.

Chandra

Love the chapter! Admittedly, I had quite the laugh when I read “…rolls were reversed” and thought Jaysea must’ve been hungry writing this 😂 I love the depth of all of the characters. Als can confirm that first off-limits food or drink after giving birth is the best! Great Chapter!

Kitty S

So good! Really enjoyed it. Majorly sweet and funny! Minor technical notes: Page 4 - "would his horns" seems like too many extra words in the sentence Page 16 - thump is maybe thumb? Page 17 - rolls is maybe roles?

Owen Hands

Amazing read I found a little double up on this paragraph for you: scrunched up face, tiny pointed ears, and wispy dark hair plastered to his head. The little bumps where his horns would his horns would someday grow were barely visible.

Nonakris

I adore this story a few typos but after reading comments all ones i saw have been called out. Lilly treated the awkward sharkie walking in sex talk rather well and she so would make a great big sister. Love how they all love so openly and freely. Looking forward to many more amazing chapters ❤️

Jayde Gammie

Blood doesn't make a family. Often the bonds we choose are stronger than the ones of blood. I have a friend who is adopted and after her parents adopted her and her sister they found out they were pregnant. It was explained to the adopted children that they thought this pregnancy would never happen and that is why they choose to adopt. It didn't mean the love they had was any less. After the adoption was finalised thsy did a modified hand fasting ceremony to show that the adopted children were part of the family. Honestly the most beautiful photos I have even seen, they also had their hands cast holding each other wrists. Sharkie is smart enough to know that she is part of the family because she found them as much as lily and bel found her.

Debra Cimabue

According to the timeline with TT, Sharkie is an adult before Bel and Lily would have children. I think that would clarify a lot of Sharkies feelings.

Belinda Millar

I’m so excited to see how they find out the way Lilly could potentially have children. I was wondering when Sharkie would have their first scare walking in on Bel & Lilly. Having Osmodai around from newborn for Sharkie can help lead to the conversation of them having a sibling. I can’t imagine it being easy for adoptive parents to have this sort of conversation if/when they plan on having biological children of their own

Amanda Carr

Just a couple editing things you put lien of sight instead of line and then almost at the end you said what you do? Instead of what would you do? Overall though. Another great chapter. As someone who is going through extreme struggles trying to have a child and may have the face the possibility of never having a natural one I really appreciate the way you handled this. The longing, the wishing, the dreaming about the situation being a little different, the sadness but also realizing all that you do have and appreciating it at the same time. The hurt will never totally go away but the love and support I have makes it feel just like an old scar sometimes. It's always there and sometimes twinges a little bit with old pain but it is no longer debilitating.

Van Brewer

Wonderful chapter!! I know there’s a case to be made that the potential to develop deep bonds with biological offspring is greater due to nature, nurture, and time. There’s also a strong case to be made that a family by choice can be as real as any other - sharing DNA does not a good parent make! But we only see differences if we look for differences. The choice between adoption and procreation is really situational - in this instance, Sharkie, Bel, and Lily all think of themselves as family; they are an established family with unique bonds. Sharkeie will welcome new siblings as siblings, and any additions to the family will see Sharkie as the elder, if chaotic, sibling. Lily and Bel will love them all, it’s in their nature. In the end, like any other, they will be a family by nature and nurture. Most importantly, you have given them an indestructible foundation of love.

Devilcat

So I’m not sex repulsed, just not interested, maybe confused. So I was dreading another sex chapter, but I think it worked. I think it showed the relationships well and worked as a way to show the vulnerability in Bel and as a way to almost ease the reader into the funeral chapter or chapters. I think adding sharkie walking in and how things were explained to make her feel better was a very nice touch.

Kat

I have no words. So good!!! (Face sitting included!!!) 🔥🔥🔥❤️❤️❤️

Tzwaenia.fox

Oh finally the baby, love how Azzy is calling Bel. Also I think the little discussion at the end is a good way to lead us readers to the funerals.

Hannah Raye

I can’t wait for lilys decision to stay and for them to hopefully have a baby 🥰

Phil Mangefrida

I picture the look on Sharkie’s face to akin to when Stantz 1st sees Slimer in Ghostbusters.

Sean

I really enjoyed this one! I think Lily’s response to getting walked in on was excellent. This may be an unpopular opinion but I think you should lean into the anxiety and stress from Sharkie at the idea of being “replaced” by a biological baby. There’s room for conflict here that I think could make for a really compelling story arc. We all know how Bel and Lily feel but navigating a child’s complicated feelings on the subject gives lots of room for character growth for everyone.

pidge

kind of the opposite situation, but I'm my mom's only child because she had cervical cancer. found out through a miscarriage. my parents did think about adopting, and asked me if I'd be okay with that, I can't remember my exact answer but I was a lot like sharkie when I was younger; too smart and forced to have more emotional intelligence than a normal adolescent, so I probably said something along the lines of "if you guys want to, then I'm okay with it" or "I'm okay being an only child". they debated adoption Not to replace me OR the baby mom lost, but because they Just wanted more kids, and maybe partly didn't want me to be so alone (was the only kid Consistently on the island we lived on, everyone else there were old, retired people). they never did adopt bc it would be too expensive and mom quickly realized I was enough for her, by whatever cosmic force, I was meant to be her one and only. If talked through properly, assure sharkie a bio kid isn't to diminish her legitimacy as their child, they just want another kid and biologically is simply a different means to do that, then I think it's absolutely fine. Besides, I Really really don't think Sharkie would see Lily & Bel wanting a bio kid as a threat or anything, they've never given her a reason to think she's not their legit child. she's the one who initiated calling them mom and dad, and lucifer papa. I think she would understand why they would want another kid, but they should still ask to make sure, of course. for lack of a better way to explain it, sharkie was there first afterall. they Chose to take her in so it'd be dumb af to do anything that contradicts their love and devotion to her, but I dont think that's what they're doing or will do. idk if you can message people on here, but if you have any more questions, I can go into more detail on how my mom and I have discussed all of this! great chapter as always!!!

Anthea ✨

Great chapter! There were a few errors with misplaced words or extra letters, but the biggest was on pg. 17: “If the rolls were reversed what you do?” I'm assuming it's supposed to be "of the roles were reversed, what would you do?" lol. I know you said a lot of distracting work was going on and that's 100% the kind of thing I'd write in that scenario lmao. Aside from that piece of dialogue, everything else is great! Can't wait for the next chapter, and thanks again for writing such an awesome series for us.

Kali Chamberlain

Eeepppp!!!! Sweet lil baby! Poor sharkie! But I loved it nonetheless! You do great writing these and making sure we feel all the emotions they go through even in the skits as well!

Kat 💜

Sweet babies! The fear of "being replaced" is very real and normal. Sharkie has a very level head on her shoulders and will understand the difference while at the same time knowing that she'll never be replaced.

Van Brewer

3rd reading catch: “lien of sight” = “line of sight”.

Anjuli

I skimmed the sex parts but there was a line on page 4 that didn’t make much sense.

Anjuli
>>119448792

“The little bumps where his horns would his horns would someday grow were barely visible.” I think you either added an extra word or missed something. It kinda messed up the flow to the reading because I wasn’t sure what you meant. Other than that I thought it was great. I feel like Sharkie having to skim parts of that chapter but overall it was great!

Jordan Yeager

Where you’re describing the picture of the baby you repeat “where his horns would grow” but amazing chapter as always! Especially considering your distractions! I about died of laughter when sharkie walked in on them

Chef Jeff

The third time I read it, the first was minutes after it dropped but I was too tired to focus on the storyline vs the symitry. After a day of blissful sleep, I can clearly state that Sharkie has many interesting walking-in misadventures in their future; and what Carlton just left you guys hanging. I had over 40 people asking if you dropped a chapter, most have read the chapters on AO3. I have introduced you to the 40 and older crowd consisting of 2 dozen Aussies, a handful of Kiwis, and a dozen plus Brits. Congrats to Asmodeus and Sariah and for sure many more Shark encounters until next time thank you JC.

Delia Isaac

I was raised in a house with my biomom and "stepdad" but like you said in the episode where Sharkie meets Lily's mom, he's my dad in all the ways that mattered. So, I never called him anything but dad. Together they had my sister. My dad never treated any of us differently so that helped with stuff

Monique

This was really sweet. I like the frank and open conversation Lily had with Sharkie, reassuring her that sex is a normal part of life and shouldn’t be a bad thing while acknowledging that it can be used as such. She also acknowledged that not everyone likes/ wants sex. I love Azzy and Sariah, they’re wonderful and a baby is definitely a ray of sunshine and hope in such a dark time. Also, the way Bel woke up at first, thinking he was still at war was a great reminder that it’s not an easy thing to shake off or recover from.

Tara Cabache

I'm upset with myself that I binged the entire story up to now in the past two days and now I have to wait for more 😭

Jessica Tanner

I purposely forced myself to hold off on reading the chapters as they were posted as waiting was torture. After binging the last seven chapters I can honestly say that I am in awe of your creativity. You started the characters on the clock app and they have grown into not only a digital series that is inspiring others to make a type of "spin off" but has also given birth to this fabulous prequal. Being the child of a Vietnam Vet the talk of just being there for those that were able to come back as well as when they are processing the pain of those they lost really hit home. The introduction of Ozmodai (sorry if it is spelled wrong) in time for the funerals was perfect timing. As Sarai said while they are grieving the loss of those past the baby will be the light showing what they were fighting for. Keep up the fantastic work and we will continue to await the next chapter on pins and needles.

Ivy Lyn

LOVED this chapter! The face riding? Yesss. So good. I loved the conversation Lily and Sharkie had about sex. I’m also a birth doula, and I loved the part where Sariah said that the positions used to put baby in are the ones that get baby out because TRUE!

Samantha Pare

"Just try to fuckin stop me." Hell yes. Mama strength is equal to Mama Love. And the love for those who gave their lives to protect the rest of them, especially the newest family member... Yeah that's infinite.

Carrie Brooks

Ngl, I feel like this chapter had a bit of an “everything but the kitchen sink” feel, and you were eyeing the kitchen sink for the sex scene. Not saying it’s a bad chapter- the theme of children flowed nicely throughout. Birth, discussion of desire for kids, current raising of child/Sharkie, etc. Overall it felt kind of cluttered, especially the sex. Does that make sense? Personally, I think it could be even better with some reworking. (“I will not apologize for constructive criticism when it’s been requested…I will not apologize for giving asked for feedback…I will not feel bad about it…don’t freak out…” 🤦🏼‍♀️ I have issues 🙄)

SeaYaLater
>>119664955

Thank you so much! Absolutely please don’t feel bad for helping me create a better story! I definitely have recognized that I feel the pressure to deliver a certain word count per chapter because I don’t want everyone to get crumbs in return for their support. There will be extensive rewrites and the chapters will be broken up differently by the time I start hunting for an editor. Thank you thank you thank you!

Carrie Brooks
>>119664955

Thank you, and you’re welcome! But please, don’t put heavy expectations on yourself that most of us aren’t giving. Stories are like meals- sometimes you want thanksgiving dinner and other times an apple and peanut butter is perfection. 🥰

Peter Psareas
>>119664955

Our support isn’t per word. It’s for the world you created. Please write how YOU want it. Size doesn’t matter. Quality does

Peter Psareas
>>119398718

I think Sharkie’s reaction to Osmodai is how they would react to a sibling. I would also reference how Sharkie relates to Ruggy and Dante. Seeing them as siblings on TT

Belinda Millar
>>119398718

I’ve seen it where it hasn’t worked quite as simple as that, especially for a child with trauma. We can see the end result in Hell’s Belles but there has to be a point where the conversation of potential siblings has been had, that’s what I’m interested in seeing

Jennifer Cathren

Amazing as always!!! I did see some typos but other than that amazing as always!!!! I can’t wait for the next chapter.

Claire Moores

You managed to get me all teary. Again. Damn, you write well. (Also, because I notice things like spelling when I read - they actually are jarring, and pull me out of the flow - I caught a couple of things: “Running her thump over” probably should be “running her thumb over” “Mm, believe it of not” probably should be “Mm, believe it or not” I hope you don’t mind the editing suggestions.)

Kat Bechdol

Sorry if this has already been mentioned…but do you have any plans in this book for Lilly and Bel learning they can have kids?

melanie mcdevitt

What kind of monster would put hot water in the mug before the tea bag!!?? 😳

Carol johnson

Awww. Baby. And bats on his socks!

Jared

The baby is here