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I'm very sorry for very late post. I am so sorry unable to finish this before the end of the month. at least another 4 page done. 

As alway if you want to help with my grammar or have any suggestion  feel free to post it in the comment.

Also thank you so much for another month of support. I am very sorry for unable to finish this before the end of month.

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M

Very cool we got a bit of backstory and lore of this world. I'm always down for anti-war messages. What inspired it? Also, whether you decide to retain June's personality or not, I think a good compromise is having her personality be turned off/on. Most of the time her personality is robotic like Prima but can act like June when Amelia allows. Though I prefer she is reprogrammed entirely. Doesn’t seem in character for Amelia to allow potential disobedience.

StarGazer

Nothing like a bit of gay liquid metal to convince people ;)

M

Not much corrections this time, good job! Here are just the parts that should be fixed. Page 1: "PLEASE OPEN YOUR MOUTH, SECUNDA." "I CAN'T RESIST MILLER'S WORDS!" Page 2: "IT HURTS, BUT MY BODY WON'T RESPOND. " "BIRDS-EYE TO THE NEST, ALPHA TEAM WAS WIPED OUT. PRIMARY OBJECTIVE IS IMPOSSIBLE. "

M

Page 3: "A DUSTY BATLLEFIELD. A GOLDEN DESERT AS FAR AS THE EYE CAN SEE." "A LAND DISPUTE BETWEEN TWO PRINCES." "IN THE END, BOTH SIDES HAVE TAKEN ON SO MUCH DEBT THEY HAD TO BE BAILED OUT BY APOLLO CORP. THE ONE WHO SUPPLIED BOTH ARMIES THEIR WEAPONS." "A SIX MONTH BLOODBATH STOPPED BY ONE PUSH OF A BUTTON." "WE SHOULD BE MAD. OUR LEADERS BANKRUPTED THEMSELVES AND SOLD US OUT." "BUT WE JUST LAUGHED. THE SITUATION WAS SO ABSURD WE COULDN'T HELP BUT LAUGH." "WE'RE JUST GLAD TO BE ALIVE." "THAT'S RIGHT. THAT IDIOT THEN JUST CLIMBS OUT AND LIGHTS HIS CIGARETTE." "I REMEMBER THE FIRST WORDS HE SAID TO ME." Page 4: "HEY, BIG LADY." "WANT A SMOKE?" "NO, NO! EVEN HERE...?! NO...PLEASE!"

Arbiter

Oh cool! We learn more about their past and we get some yuri at the same time ^^

Nobody-Kadaj

In the original, Amelia (called "Angela" there) apparently made a mistake or ran into a glitch when she programmed "Iron" (whom June is converted into here). That glitch violated a directive both had, and it allowed both Mercury and Iron to rebel against her.

Nobody-Kadaj

Once he's finished sketching Part 2, he might begin coloring them in. Give him a month or so after it's done. This level of quality cannot be done overnight...

M

I remember. Well, more like convert her into one of them. I hope we get Iron in a part 3, it'd be cool to see a trio of robots. Plus I just love Iron's design and figure, it's sexy & contrasts Mercury's color.

Nobody-Kadaj

I think June/Secunda is REMAKE's answer to Iron.

Pascal

mmm... kissies

CrazedGamma1721

Please Save Her Mind. Don't Delete Her Mind.

Arthur Yeung

@ibenz009 Keep going, friend! You're almost there!

Milton Romero

I think the same thing that happened to Miller will happen to her too. She will have robotic personality and her reprogrammed human personality