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Edit: Okay, I fixed the typo in panel 2, and I did another pass on the looked-like-a-strap-on in panel 3. It was admittedly a little distracting once it was repeatedly pointed out. I don't blame you guys. It did look like Sciona was about to give him what for.

How do Sciona's bangs get longer when her hair is down? Magic, probably. Don't worry about it.

Deus sure gets a lot of mileage out of that "I'm going to be a jerk but it's because I respect you so much" bit. He used it on Maxima, though I honestly couldn't tell you what page that was. Ironically, the more intelligent the person is, the fewer times he could pull it off with them, even if he was being mostly sincere. 

You know, if Sciona... sorry, if Escorpia really was a sicario/narcotraficante, she probably would have had a lot more tattoos than just the... temple tattoo? It's more like a "mohawk negative space tattoo." Not that I'm aware of any comprehensive audit of female merc/drug runner tattoo coverage. I guess Sciona lucked out that Escorpia was content with just the one on her skull. Presumably if she can permanently change her hair color and length with a spell, she could probably remove or at least hide tattoos. Really the only reason she still had the one on her head under the hair she was growing out was for you guys' benefit. (guys's?) 

Sciona usually does not "take smug." She's murdered for a lot less than that. But Deus is too important of a potentially exploitable resource to her. He's also pretty good in bed, which isn't a deciding factor, but it is a factor. She knows that if she killed him, the Alari from the colony ship would almost definitely assume control of Galytn, which would probably be both good and bad for her plans, and Deus can more or less run interference for her regarding them.

Sciona's original final line was "I am seriously reconsidering fucking you." Which I think is more pithy than what I changed it to, (Actually the very first draft read "sleeping with you" but that didn't feel right either) but the more I thought about it, the more it sounded like she was planning on sleeping with him for his sake, like some sort of transactional reward. I suppose for being good at it the last time, maybe? So not some selfless sacrifice on her part, certainly, but there was something vaguely "It's a man's world, and I'm very sexy, which is mostly for the benefit of men, and he deserves his prize" in the sentiment. Yes, it's possible to over analyze these things, but it doesn't hurt to occasionally step back and do a paradigm check. The comic is mostly female characters, and while I certainly can't claim any special insight into the female mind, I do at least attempt to consider that perspective… Even if a lot of them do have fairly typically male behaviors and hobbies. But I write what I know, and would the comic would be any better if I did some deep dive into typically feminine hobbies so Sydney could launch into the occasional dissertation about… quilting? Not that women couldn't be into literally any hobby, of course, but the point of all this would have been to "feminize" some of the female characters, and saying that Harem is into restoring vintage tractors doesn't really accomplish that. Although… she was raised on a farm… Hmm.

Anyway, I edited Sciona's lines mostly because I don't want all the characters to sound the same, and my first draft felt more sit-commy, and less "sociopathic blood mage." 

I sort of feel guilty when I post a page with only 4 panels. I mean, not that guilty, but for all I gripe about cramming way too many panels on a page and having to draw tiny faces, when I get to the occasional page that just wouldn't benefit from wedging three more panels in there, it does feel a bit... light? Oh well, I'll get over it. 

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TrixieTurner

Lmao looking at the shot in panel three it really looked like Deus just had his shmeat out between her legs.

codesurfer

I'm so glad I'm not the only one. I was like wow I didn't realize this was an extra

TrixieTurner

Actually lmao if you look at panel three long enough it looks like sciona is the one with the shmeat, even got the mushroom tip and everything. Appropriately she’s circumcised, just like when we first met her with the tip of her head cut off.

Red

What you settled on for the final line is funnier this way too. So double win.

Jared

It seems like she thinks he created a vaccine for her powers, when it seems more likely he has something that prevents him from absorbing unapproved chemicals in general. Although, I wouldn't put it past him to have managed to get a sample from a prior victim of hers and created a specific countermeasure then did all of this for show.

Michael Obert

Oh, Sciona, sweetie: it's adorable that you think you're the villain in this story. You're tier 2 at best (given you've already had your butt kicked once). Accept the title of lackey gracefully and we can all move on.

Michael Obert

I did a double take on that as well! LOL

Justaguy

Yeah I had to take a 2nd look at it to make sure it wasn't.

Justaguy

Hell I wouldn't be shocked if occasionally his body was a meat-puppet he was driving around by a remote sensory-feedback array.

Adam Fuller

The best lackeys are the ones that don't know that they are lackeys.

Absentia

Ya know... these two are oddly cute together.

Shade Jones

Panel 3 is a really great pose! Also, yeah. It looks like sciona's got the strap ready lol

Orlet Soir

There's a typo in "certainly" on the second panel, btw.

Tom wilson

Don’t feel guilty at all, those were well drawn, and that’s good art. It doesn’t matter if you have one panel or six, what matters is the quality of the art and the writing. And this page right here? Is good both.

Anton Schleef

I thought that Sciona was wearing a strap-on, that was more flesh colored than you typically see.

Scott Heavilin

"Is it possible to annoy a woman so much that she'll.....still sleep with you?" Yes, it's called Hate Sex :p

William Burns

In some future Deus appearance, he should just casually stroll by an entire hall of Deus clones.

Vincent Russo

* Guys'. Guys's is a commonly Kused term, so it "feels" right, but actually isn't.

Tim Malmström

Not gonna lie, she looks way hotter with her hair down.