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Having a character tell such a long story and make it sound natural is challenging for me. Even though Kal hammered out all the details of the Crawler/Gaurdian lore long ago so it's all there for me to pull from. So the hard part is deciding what would be said or, more to the point, not said from Tempest's point of view. All while getting across the important parts to readers without dumping a wall of text that will put them to sleep. I hope it comes across well. Feedback is always welcome.

Anyhow I hope you guys are still liking the lore. We're getting close to the end of her flashback now!

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xavier kazi

The alternate pov exposition is great, don't get me wrong However The casual blowjob while she recounts the genocide of her people is hilarious, and that final panel is gorgeous. Amazing work with her expression.

Crimson03

the lines and the pics, is clearly Transformers.

llCDll

This works really well! There's a good balance between lore dump, sex, and the comical situation at hand. I think this is being handled quite well.

FoolyMagooly

It looks like there's about to be a flaw in her logic pointed out.

Vylon Delta

So…no more turbo slut nurse?

Lukas West

Loving the sex in the background, feels really TRW for backstory being told and someone just fucking as they listen. But question and sorry if this is a bit nit picky. Switch and Tempest are aliens, right? From another planet. But there has been references to dimensions so I am curious... Are they aliens or from another dimension? Or both?

Coffee Sunshine

First--DEUCES, GARY! 😁 Second--Nikki thought Tempest was having a post-nut fever dream until her last sentence. Nikki's expression in that last panel... Fight or flight response about to kick in...

Slaughterbug

Soon, did the guy manage to get off? Or did all the exposition kill the mood. I cant quite tell if nikki is swallowing a load or just feeling him go soft on her mouth in the last two pannels.

StonesThrown

Honestly felt that! I have to do in a way how I’d explain it in their head. It sounds complicated for me but it helps when I don’t think about it…oh god I made it more complicated

Graci

So far so good!

Softie.gurll

There's spurting in the previous panel - What I can't tell if Nikki is suddenly realising the implications, or is just paying more attention post-nut.

Chris Davis

It's scary that Nikki's eyes are suddenly the same shade of green as Tempest's...or maybe it's always been there and I'm reading too much into it, LOL! Still, great page! I was unaware of all of this and I can't wait to see how Tempest became the Nurse.

Woody

So far so good, including the use of sexposition. Sadly, Tempest is too military to use the phrase "Nope the fuck out" cuz...yeah...telepathically shutting down everyone in range planetwide is such a situation? Are we going to hit (s)exposition with the third Crawler, though? That's where plotting gets problematic.

Minivet

I guess my only feedback is I can't tell exactly how Nikki was affected by the last bit in a new way. Is she suddenly getting the feeling this isn't just a new bloom of psychosis? Is this connecting to something else she's heard about? But I imagine this is normal end-of-page suspense that will be cleared up in the next page.

Coffee Sunshine

It occurs to me that, if someone does a partial-Husnock on your species, you'd do everything in your power to leave that someone TF alone. The Guardians might clean up Tempest themselves.

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Nikki and Tempest both have green eyes, they’re good together. I do like Kaiju Switch tho

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More lore!

Reinbach

Well I'll admit what I was going for is more "you no longer seem like the harmless kind of crazy." XD

Reinbach

I'll take it as comparisons go! XD

Reinbach

I wouldn't call her completely gone. ;D

Reinbach

I had both in my head. Like they're on another world in another plane of reality.

Reinbach

My intent is that he went soft from the mood being killed in that last panel. XD

Reinbach

Oh that's not on purpose Nikki just happens to have green eyes too. XD More on how she became the Nurse on Thursday! :)

Reinbach

Tempest wouldn't know much about Iris. She'll get recounted later. :)

Reinbach

That is what i was going for, yes. Exactly what Nikki thinks will come up on the next page. :)

Rockoco

Your doing a great job of keeping the information at a reasonable pace, it doesn't really feel like someone monologing because of the back and forth of the convo