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This strip was an insert! I wanted more Jennifer and Raidah interactions in the buffer. They've got a fucked up thing going on between them and it's great!

however, this first pass at the strip had collateral damage in how much other things in the strip are fucked up

"go blow him" "eugh brother" "but in an actual real way he's not" is a fine exchange. I like it. But it, uh, colored interactions in the rest of the buffer between Jennifer and Walky in a way that I strongly disliked. I don't want that sort of missive to be hanging unspoken over their heads. And the "Fine, don't blow him" afterwards didn't unring that bell enough. (though i'm sure it'd get some readers' engines revving, you know who you are and also I know who you are)

Anyway, I tried it again without the bit about blowing him in the middle. I'm not sure what the original text was supposed to be above Jennifer in panel 3 that resulted in "I think he could use one." Something about a friend? A sympathetic ear? Nah, this pass was limp without the original middle, and it makes Jennifer sound too outwardly nice to Walky. She's gonna put up a front about it.

So my solution was to extend Raidah's conversation with Jennifer! She doesn't leave mid-strip. I get more of Jennifer hedging about how she's being friendly to Walky but only because he's a dumb idiot baby, and then I set up the next strip where Raidah says "You will NEVER top me." I lose the "I'm sure she'll be nicer to me once I prove I'm useful!" bit, which I liked, but Raidah is given a platform for a better line. And, overall, just serving up on a plate exactly how everyone's brains here are broken. All three brains.

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Yue Ryong

I'm sure an opportunity for Jennifer to vocalise her desire to be useful will present itself. =)

Sajuuk-Khar

See, that’s a fun punchline that hits at the heart of Billifer’s broken ass, sure, buuuuut I think what you went with is so so much better because: 1.) it puts Raidah in more of the pathos-holding, *petty* villainess position where you want her—this is a person with a weird interiority that we’re interested in AND it makes her sound like an Imperial officer from Star Wars, which is much funnier than just a jerk. 2.) it gives Billifer agency and teeth. She knows Raidah isn’t secretly Queen Sugarplum Tits, like she said; she’s here because she’s drawn here by the siren call of Bad Bitchness! 3.) god please Alice and Billie double teaming Raidah would be both super hot and the FUNNIEST FUCKING SHIT please please please I’m begging you

GundamBradley

I think you made the right call. Like, we can infer as it is what Raidah would want Billie to do considering she already fumbled Asher as far as Raidah is concerned.

Harold

@Sajuuk-Khar: 3.) Picturing Billifer and Alice, heads bobbing, surrounding Raidah and bouncing her off each other as "What is Love" plays

Star Ringer

"Okay, they're on the plate, what now?"

Logibear

I love that the actual strips give some time for the Billie/Raidah/Alice dynamic to breathe.

Maude Reads Things

If you so chose there's always room for the other lines you liked later. At this particular moment, I like the real strip

Sajuuk-Khar

As ever, you understand my vision completely

Captain Button

Is Raidah channeling creepy anime "It's OK as long as you aren't blood relatives."?

Amelie W

What do you mean kids who grow up in close proximity develop sexual revulsion to each other that have nothing to do with blood relationship? Aren't all human interactions purely transactional?

Amelie W

Raidah walking in on her parents having sex: "Oh no, don't stop on my account, I'd like to see how it's done in case I'm going to do it some day."

JasonAW3

Ah, yep... Your final version works so much better...

JasonAW3

It would be even funnier if they got together with Walkie and went after her... Heis not stupid, a bit naive at times, but he can be VERY clever when he needs to be...