Keep Me in Check - Part 1 (Patreon)

Alright then, I've managed to get it ready for today, as promised! Here you go :)

Of course, I've also placed a pdf down below, for anyone who, uhh... doesn't have a google account? I guess? Mm.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1EaV_m4OrGMyeqDI-WpTFoVPDh6O9-SiRlPn3g1rIsjw/edit?usp=sharing

I do have a couple of notes on this first part, I'll try my best not to be too spoilery.

To start with, do you like the way I formatted things? With the italics and the lighter color for text that is not dialogues? Truth to be told I stole the idea from Spicychat. I might've stopped paying them 30 bucks a month (in this economy?!), and using chatbots in general, but I always liked the way they highlighted dialogues this way. This is a matter of taste, but I personally find it makes things easier to read/skim through, and to get less confused while editing through.

Fyi, I had to cut a lot. The idea was basically to write as if I was actually playing a text-adventure - as in, playing as Sasha. And that is very fun, I highly recommend it, but I couldn't just have multiple times in a story where its protagonist focuses super hard on objects. That would've made things a slog to read through.

I had given Sasha a dakimakura, though! I couldn't scrap that, come now. I've moved it to part 2 :)

Still unsure about the division of parts, we'll see if its three or four. I think four might be best, I do want to get more dialogues and eating scenes with these two gals (I just like Amara a lot, you will too, you'll see), even at the risk of getting a bit repetitive. I'll try not to. But as a story it is a slow burn, so yeah.

As for when part 2's coming out... don't know! One the one side, I have more time given that I'm not writing for Spirit of Hunger anymore. On the other, it's not summer anymore and do have more work on my hands. So we'll see. I'll also try not to be overly perfectionist about the writing - overall this story is kind of comfort food for me, it has been for the past week's evenings, wouldn't want to ruin that.

Ok, stop! Too many notes! BYE