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Chapter 1532 (Patreon)

Published:
2020-09-25 05:05:09
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2026-06
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Hampus Steinvall
>>44681674

Not sure this applies to your world but in the beginning you say that they "moved all soldiers under the rank of commander out of the way". There is usually a pretty sharp divide between soldiers and officers and I think commander sounds like an officers rank rather than a soldiers rank. Perhaps write "any military personnel" or maybe "anyone under the rank of commander"

Kevin Mendoza
>>44681674

The real residences. If your goal is to write to a audience, you want to give clear language, simple language often. Instead of “the real residences” which is incorrect based on context how about “The local populace/population” instead ?.

Grammarmelade

Thanks for the chapter! So this Neshamah Rex is related to his recruit Benjamin Rex, I guess. Was it mentioned, that he has blue skin?

Umut Numanoglu
>>44707573

It is mentioned that he is related to Rex family but I belive his skin color is different, he is also hairless I believe