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Wiki x Wank 59 (Patreon)

Published:
2026-06-03 15:51:41
Imported:
2026-06

Content

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1SGo5FVr6oRfZzqM-ZNyu3FDaY9uNDotEF045S6sJRpc

Comments

Helen of Boy

I like how much Jiro genuinely likes all the girls. And it shows in his actions, not just in him saying things about them each having charm points. At first I missed it being Rias who triggered the golem and thought Akeno's curse came back the moment the date ended. One thing, the way you have Yuuka's speech when she's trying to get Jiro to get Neru drawn right is confusing. Generally, lines like that mean the dialogue is changing between people with each line. The traditional way of indicating it's the same person is to remove the closing quotation mark on all but the last paragraph (but leaving the opening so it's obvious it's still speech). Here, it might be stylistically better instead to put a line break of some kind between each line to show that more time is passing. Even just an elipsis would do a lot to make it naturally clearer, I think.

Zerak

Between their skill sets they can easily fix a bit of audio file corruption.

Ebiris Fanfiction

Good call. Just leaving off the closing quotes at the end of each paragraph doesn't work since yeah time is meant to be passing between each, so I've added in a little interstitial between each line.

Zerak

I am looking forward to the unavailing of the new tech, and how it will shock people when he just releases the blueprints.

TheOchreKnight

Big thanks for the chapter Yuuka is truly any engineers wet dream She's like a whole Factorio megafabric in a portable 100kg form Very nice

vodkasheep

Wonder who he's going to funnel the engineering stuff to. Seekvaira maybe? She would definitely be interested in giant robots too.