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My Little Ventrue Pt.8 Ch.15 (Ch. 133) (Patreon)

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2022-02-16 13:51:19
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2026-06
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Falling action, some of my favorite stuff to write.

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Alberto Sanchez

Autocomplete/autocorrect has messed up a few words here and there in this chapter Also, I have to think staking Natasha must have been more premeditated than that text alone, given that the wolves carried a specialty stake with them which was designed to be undetectable. Not sure if something like that would make it into a wolves EDC-kit

AniNovu

Message me what the typos are! I'll correct them for the public release, and if they're nasty, I'll re-upload them to Patreon. I don't have any auto anything. All mistakes are mine 😭 I basically auto-complete words incorrectly all the time, habit from writing so much.

Memoryleak

I guess my only issue is that story wise it doesn’t seem it has been three years since he became a vampire, and a full year since Samantha was embraced. Not sure if it may be due to me picking the story up mid Part 6 but it doesn’t feel like there is anything to anchor the passage of time(Dates, holidays, seasons, season attire, length of night?). I think one thing that could help would be occasional drops on how far in the past a certain event occurred. Something like Jen - “Triss, we’ve been taking bodies back to Ellen for three months and gotten nowhere.” So far the only drops have been X years since Jack was embraced.

AniNovu

Agreed. I noticed this problem a while ago, and have been thinking about ways to deal with it. Unfortunately MLV is mostly beyond repair in this regard, but I will try some things. PoH will handle this much better from the getgo.

Memoryleak

I think this will be more important to tackle in PoH, since it won’t be taking place on earth(I assume). So you can’t use any of those earlier examples, just dates(if dates matter in hell 😂) and past references. I think the other issue is that most chapters roll from one to the next so it can seem like an entire part takes place over only a couple days. Between parts seems to be only weeks, like 6 to 7 and 7 to 8 there were only two week jumps.

Memoryleak

Thinking this more, you’ll probably have an easier time handling this with only two POVs in PoH, since you wont have to time jump six POVs like in MLV.

AniNovu

I'll be straight up including a day counter (or something like that) in PoH chapters, both to help readers but also myself. I wish I'd done that with MLV, so that handling the progression of so many PoVs was easier to manage. In PoH, the entire setting will be affected by the time flow, so yeah, super important to keep things organized and tracked from the getgo.